Writing Tips - Seven Hooks to Tease your Reader

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We write because we want to. We write because we have this mad passion to share our ideas, our stories, and our information with those whom we want to take the time and read our work.

We are asking the reader to invest their precious time. This is a big ask. Investors ask for promises, they want to see returns on their investment. They want to be entertained, informed, gripped, emotionally engaged and taken on a roller coaster ride of ideas.

They need to see what’s in store. They need a preview, a sample, a tease.

This is especially important in a novel or a short story. Readers can lose their interest very quickly. They know that the back cover blurbs, like film trailers, can paint a different picture to what they are actually about to read. So they turn the front pages, sneak a peek into the first chapter or the first paragraph. They want to know what you are about to say. They want to know whether you can deliver on a promise, whether you can say enough to sustain their interest.

This is a big responsibility. We have a big story to tell, bursting with ideas. We have so much to offer. But we run the risk of losing our very readership by a shoddy first few paragraphs.

Necessity Is the Mother of...

I was forced to rethink my first paragraphs when I entered a competition for BBC radio 4 to write a short story of 1500 words. The competition asked authors to only submit the first 200 words initially and on the strength of it they would pick 50 and ask them to complete the story. Out of this 50 they would pick 5 winners to be broadcast every afternoon, Monday to Friday.

You can imagine my panic. However, it was perhaps the best experience in editing my own work that I ever had. I pruned, trimmed, discarded and mercilessly ripped bloated passages to shreds. I was like a chef trimming all the excess fat to produce a lean meat.

In the end I produced 200 words of sheer concentration that had to grip, hook and impale my judges to such an extent that they should want to read more. They did. I was lucky to be one of the winners much to my surprise and joy. More importantly, my opening strategy had worked. When I got the judges feedback, they commented on various qualities of the writing, the imagery, the visual story telling but most of all they said, the first paragraph made them want to read more.

Hook, Line, and Sinker!

All through history, great writers have teased their readers by gripping first paragraphs. I have tried to illustrate some examples of the ‘hook’ to give you an idea of what your readership may expect and find engaging. Of course, there are always exceptions to the rule. But, as novice writers wanting to make a mark, we all know that every little helps!

Barrie: Peter Pan
Barrie: Peter Pan

1. The Puzzle Hook

This opening leaves the readers with more questions than answers. These questions are their own. Their curiosity is stoked. They want to know what, why, when, where and how.

There are many masters of writing who use this hook. These writers tease with the sharpest hook: the puzzle, information or an incident that grips and sets your brain into overdrive.. They give you a brief glimpse of what’s to come, a tease of such alluring quality, it leaves the reader wanting more.

There are many examples of the quizzical hook:

In his Pulitzer Prize winning novel, Middlesex, Jeffrey Eugenides teases thus:

I was born twice: first, as a baby girl, on remarkably smogless Detroit day in January of 1960,and then again, as a teenage boy, in an emergency room near Peroskey, Michigan, in August of 1974.

The Master of the hook was Charles Dickens, who of course serialized his novels in monthly or weekly periodicals, he specialised in hooks and cliff hangers, he pretty much invented the art of the tease. Consider how he starts, ‘A Christmas Carol’:

Marley was dead: to begin with. There is no doubt whatever about that. The register of his burial was signed by the clergyman, the clerk, the undertaker, and the chief mourner. Scrooge signed it: and Scrooge's name was good upon 'Change, for anything he chose to put his hand to. Old Marley was as dead as a door-nail .’

Consider also the fact that this first chapter also carries the title, ‘Marley’s ghost’. Was there ever any doubt that the reader wasn’t going anywhere’

Consider also the quaint but quizzical opening from Peter Pan, by JM Barrie:

All children, except one, grow.’ Awww.

Brown: Da Vinci code
Brown: Da Vinci code

2. The Action Hook

Some authors prefer to plonk the reader right in the middle of the action. There is no preamble, no scene setting, and no long descriptions of whom or what. You need to catch up as you go along. What you get is that the story kick-starts from the word go. Before you know it you are along for the ride.

If you have a story that starts slap bang in the middle of an action packed scene, get right to it. Scottish writer Alistair MacLean was a master of action thrillers, many of his books have been made into gripping films. Here’s his opening paragraph for his best seller, Where Eagles Dare:

The vibrating clangour of the four great piston engines set teeth on edge and made an intolerable assault on the cringing ear drums. The decibel level, Smith calculated, must have been about that found in a boiler factory, and one, moreover, that was working on overtime rates. The shaking cold in that cramped, instrument-crowded flight deck was positively Siberian. On balance, he reflected, he would have a Siberian boiler factory any time because, whatever its drawbacks, it wasn’t liable to fall out of the sky or crash into the mountain side .’

In his worldwide best seller The Da Vinci Code, Dan Brown, gets the ball rolling from the first paragraph:

Reknowned curator Jacques Sauniere staggered through the vaulted archway of the museum’s Grand Gallery. He lunged for the nearest painting he could see, a Caravaggio. Grabbing the gilded frame, the seventy-six year old man heaved the masterpiece toward himself until it tore from the wall and Sauniere collapsed backward in a heap beneath the canvas.

Irving: Hotel New Hampshire
Irving: Hotel New Hampshire

3. The Character Hook

This could simply be a description of the character, what they are up to, who they are and in general familiarise the readership with some of the cast. Try to imagine the cast of your story, who is important enough to come at the beginning. IS it the main protagonist? Is it the key but small character that sets the story in motion?

This could also be the simple beginnings like those of a fairy tale, ‘Once there were three sisters...’ etc.

CS Lewis begins his classic series of Narnia:

Once there were four children whose names were Peter, Susan, Edmund and Lucy.

John Irving starts his Hotel New Hampshire with a classic paragraph:

The summer my father bought the bear, none of us was born - we weren't even conceived: not Frank, the oldest; not Franny, the loudest; not me, the next; and not the youngest of us, Lilly and Egg.

Or you could get more specific and describe the character like Joseph Conrad does in his classic Lord Jim:

He was an inch, perhaps two, under six feet, powerfully built, and he advanced straight at you with a slight stoop of the shoulders, head forward, and a fixed from-under stare which made you think of a charging bull’

Roy: God of small things
Roy: God of small things

4. The Scenic Hook

This usually begins with a setting. The author gives a description of a place; a location where the action is about to commence. This usually tests our descriptive strategies as we try to be original. We can capture the colour, the smells, the noises and the feel of the place. It is always better to use spare but distinct descriptions that cater to our five senses. Just try and imagine the place in your head, with your eyes closed, what do you see, what do you smell and taste, how hot, cold or warm does the place feel?

There are only so many ways of describing the sky.

Trust William Gibson, in his seminal sci-fi blockbuster Neuromancer, to come up with:

The sky above the port was the colour of television, tuned to a dead channel’

Barbara Kingsolver, in her book The Lacuna, sets the scene in Isla Pixal, Mexico, 1929:

In the beginning there were the howlers. They always commenced their bellowing in the first hour of dawn, just as the sky began to whiten. It would start with just one: his forced, rhythmic groaning, like a saw blade...’

Or consider the colourful, sensory explosion in the opening lines of Arundhati Roy’s 1997 Booker Prize winning The God of Small Things:

‘May in Ayemenem is a hot, brooding month. The days are long and humid. The river shrinks and black crows gorge on bright mangoes in still, dust green trees. Red bananas ripen, Jack fruits burst. Dissolute bluebottles hum vacuously in the fruity air. Then they sun themselves against clear windowpanes and die, fatly baffled in the sun’

5. The Philosophical Hook

This could a meditation of ideas, thoughts and opinions. This usually invites the reader to share your vision and version. It may be a gripe of the state of affairs, a quibble about the past or even a hopeful dream about the future.

Who better to go back to, but our old curmudgeon, Mr Charles Dickens. He sets the scene so wonderfully in his Tale of Two Cities:

"It was the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was an age of wisdom, it was an age of foolishness, it was an epoch of belief, it was an epoch of incredulity, it was a season of Light, it was a season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it was the winter of despair."

Here’s Mark Twain succinctly underlining that the line that divides the poor and the privileged has not changed from the 16th century, in his The Prince and the Pauper:

In the ancient city of London, on a certain Autumn day in the second quarter of the 16th century, a boy was born to a poor family by the name of Canty, who did not want him. On the same day another English child was born to a rich family by the name of Tudor, who did want him. All England wanted him too.’

Or consider the simple truth of Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice:

"It is a truth universally acknowledged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife."

MacLean: When Eight Bells toll
MacLean: When Eight Bells toll

6. The Object Hook

This is something I have come across a few times. The author painstakingly describes an object and shows depth of research and understanding. He or she goes through intricate details about the object only to reveal how this is connected to the tale.

We go back to Alistair Maclean, for his wonderful start to his novel, When Eight Bells Toll, where he goes into great detail about the classic gun.

‘The Peacemaker Colt has now been in production, without change in design, for a century. Buy one today and it would be indistinguishable from the one Wyatt Earp wore when he was the Master of Dodge City. It is the oldest handgun in the world, without question the most famous and, if efficiency in its designed task of maiming and killing be taken as criterion of its worth, then it’s also probably the best hand-gun ever made.... When a Peacemaker Bullet hits your leg you fall to the ground unconscious, and if it hits your thigh bone and you are lucky to survive the torn arteries and the shock, then you will never walk again without crutches.. And so I stood motionless, not breathing, for the Peacemaker colt that started this unpleasant train of thought was pointed directly at me...’

Stephen King’s emotional classic, The Green Mile ( which was originally serialised in 6 parts) starts with a note on the ‘old sparky’:

‘This happened in 1932, when the state penitentiary was still at Cold Mountain. And the electric chair was there too, of course. The inmates made jokes about the chair, the way people always make jokes about things that frighten them but can’t be gotten away from. They called it Old Sparky, or the Big Juicy. They made cracks about the power bill, and how Warden Moore could cook his Thanksgiving dinner that fall, with this wife Melinda, too sick to cook.’

McBain: Hark
McBain: Hark

7. The Dialogue Hook

This is the Quentin Tarantino style banter. The story kick starts with sparkling dialogue that is razor sharp and gets the story going.

Dialogue is always tricky to write, more so when you want to make first impressions. There are some stellar dialogue writers, especially like the 87th precinct police procedurals author, Ed McBain. Here he combines tension and razor sharp dialogue for the opening scene of Hark:

Gloria knew there was someone in her apartment the moment she unlocked and entered. She was reaching into her tote bag when a man’s voice said, “No, don’t”. Her fingers were an inch apart from the steel but of a .380 caliber Browning. “Really,” the voice said, “I wouldn’t”....

The Last Dance:

“ He had heart trouble,” the woman was telling Carella., “ Told me he hadn’t been feeling good the past few days. I kept telling him to go see the Doctor. Yeah, I’ll go, I’ll go, don’t worry, like that you know? So I stopped by this morning to see how he was. Found him just the way. In bed. Dead.”


There are other hooks, other fresh ways of alluring the reader. Like a spider spinning a web and inviting the fly to come into the parlour. Like the Sirens singing to the hapless sea men.

Obviously, the opener is not everything, it is the story that follows and the quality of writing that gets our reader hooked and wanting to come back for more. However, when we are starting out and trying to impress readers and publishers, the opener can be a useful ammunition.

We need to find new ways of fresh bait to get our readers hook, line and sinker.

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Sarah Masson 5 years ago from Melbourne, Australia

This is great, thanks

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Docmo 5 years ago from UK Author

You're Welcome, Sarah. Thanks for dropping by.

Sophia Angelique 5 years ago

Precisely. One doesn't have to start with the action. One has to start with a sentence that get's the reader's attention. That has has much to do with a writing style as a 'hook'. What has happened these last decades is that those who teach assume that one can teach storytelling. So, they've broken down and tried to describe what successful authors do. The bottom line is that a truly good writer/storyteller can break all those rules and still be successful. That's where the choice of words, the pace of writing, etc. comes into it. :)

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Docmo 5 years ago from UK Author

Exactly! Writing is personal. We can be guided but not taught. It is just that, in the stiff world of competition and low attention spans, we are competing for readership with an 'MTV' approach of fast cuts, quick edits -so in order to gain foot hold, sometimes these steps help. But not always. As you say it is the quality of writing and the heartfelt passion that will out. thanks for dropping by! :-)

Sophia Angelique 5 years ago

:) The old story. One can be taught the steps, but not the dance! :)

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Docmo 5 years ago from UK Author

Yeah. We need to feel the music - inside us! ;-)

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Crewman6 5 years ago

I enjoyed every sentence and every word. You've also inspired me to re-read old favorites, and experiment with new writers. Your hook was excellent. Thanks for the wonderful read!

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richtwf 5 years ago

Great hub as always my friend and this has certainly given me some excellent food for thought! When I write, I don't tend to think so much about hooks, I just tend to go with gut instinct and how I feel and just run with it and if it feels right for me at the end then I'm content. If it doesn't feel right then I go back and have a re-think if necessary.

Cheers for sharing and big thumbs up - Useful and awesome my friend.

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Docmo 5 years ago from UK Author

Thanks Crewman6! I always love to revisit old favourites, see what made them ''old favourites' in the first place. At first we enjoy, now that I am writing, I am being more analytical to see what was the reason for enjoying some authors so much.

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Docmo 5 years ago from UK Author

Dear friend richtwf, I am glad it has given you food for thought. You already are an excellent writer and I am pleased this ha s given you further ideas and examples. Cheers and Best wishes, as always.

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Karen Wodke 5 years ago from Midwest

Excellent piece, well-written and researched, and full of helpful ideas to get a writer started.

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Docmo 5 years ago from UK Author

Thanks Karen. Appreciated. BTW I voted for you in the best new hubbers of 2010 comp forum. Good luck!

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

I started out reading #3 and realized there was a # 1 and #2. I have learned so much here Docmo and want to say thank you. I must read 2 and 3 next. This is a fantastic hub!

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Clairepeek 5 years ago

Good Morning Docmo!

I saw today that you had written the fourth part of this writing tips series; therefore, I had to start from the beginning... that is to say HERE.

I have to say this, I have read so many tips here and there on writing that almost every single time, I falter and stop my reading in the middle of them... the 'have to-s' and the 'must and need' and all the 'how-to-s' have always managed to make me doubt my own abilities. I always start and then to have a clue on how to go on, I read tips... probably a bad strategy but here you have it, it is what I do...

HOWEVER, this is the first time today that I read writing tips to the end, and feel that I can do it after all. You should be a teacher ^_^ Thank you!

On my way to the next writing tips...

kims3003 5 years ago

Great series - glad I found you - look forward to reading more.

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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Your points are interesting and very useful.

Good work, voted up.

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jenp123 4 years ago

This is interesting! I teach writing at a university, and I might just show this to my students! Voted up!

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

jenp- thank you very much. I am glad you will show this to your students- do let me know what they think of this and the other parts of this series if you can. Much appreciated!

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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California)

Mohan (Docmo),

You never cease to amaze me, polymath. Your Hub once again shows the brilliance of your writing and the importance of your subject matter.

Every aspiring writer should read this article on a monthly...perhaps weekly...basis.

iamaudraleigh 4 years ago

Docmo, this is brilliant! I am going to save this hub as reference! I really like the THE SCENIC HOOK! I would like the challenge of the other hooks too! Your friend's tease is so great! You also wrote about so many great authors! What was you favorite book and hook? Voting this up and sharing it with everyone! Very excited!

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shalini sharan 4 years ago from Delhi

Docmo, these are really useful tips, your each hub is different than than the others, with one similarity, each takes my breath away :)

kelleyward 4 years ago

What a useful hub packed with tools any writer needs to be successful. Although I don't write fiction, short stories, etc I'm bookmarking this one, just in case!!! Take care, Kelley

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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

I will be reading this again to really let your wisdom sink in! How lucky we are that you write these much wisdom and information we can actually use. Your qualities of writing, imagery, and visual stories hook us into reading everything you write (yes, I did use your own words and paraphrased a bit).

Voted up, useful, awesome and interesting.

P.S. When the hubbies voting starts I'm voting you best hubber!

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Sally's Trove 4 years ago from Southeastern Pennsylvania

This is an excellent set of demonstrations of how to hook your reader. I particularly enjoyed your BBC contest experience. Chop! Dice! Toss! Anything that doesn't grip and grab needs to go. Up, interesting, and very useful.

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ChristyWrites 4 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

Congrats on being one of the BBC winners! You have the experience to back up your great (and useful) tips here. I see this is a series and I look forward to reading more.

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

Daisy, thank you for your comments and the persistence in giving me the title of polymath. I consider myself still a wannabe polymath but that doesn't stop me from grinning and nodding ( humility, where are you?) you are a star.

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

Audra, thanks for your comments and for sharing this on FB. I wrote this nearly a year and a half ago and have followed it since with four more instalments periodically. I am delighted at your response and appreciation.

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

shalini, it is good to hear your lovely comments. I am glad you find this writing enjoyable and useful. Much appreciated.

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

kelley- this is the first of a five part series ( I'm writing part 6 now) and I am quietly happy with the way they turned out. I am even more happy now that my fellow hub friends have discovered this and are enjoying this. thank you.

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

Mary, Mary - I dunno what to say. Its an absolute delight and considerable blushes at your warm appreciation of my craft and the willingness to let me know how much you like my work. It does spur me on and really help me to continue my writing journey. you are a true inspiration.

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

Sally's Trove, thank you so much. The cop, dice toss experience was one the best i've had in editing and merciless pruning. It also taught me not to be verbose in my fiction writing but to convey the idea well and efficiently. Glad you found this useful.

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

I have only ever entered two competitions and won both strangely it made me frightened to enter more as I thought I couldn't sustain my streak! Also life, professional work and parenting took over and I am only now regaining my flow and confidence- thanks to hubland. With such supportive and complimentary comments- I am encouraged to continue to work hard. thanks Christy.

Milli Thornton 4 years ago

Congratulations on being a winner in the BBC Radio competition. Reading the judges' feedback must have almost felt more rewarding than your win. But the great thing is how much you took away from the experience long-term. You really milked that learning curve for all it was worth! And you deserved your win for the amount of effort you put into pruning and fine-tuning your entry.

Thanks for sharing your wisdom on opening hooks here in this Hub. I've bookmarked it, partly for the reminder that can be gleaned for my own writing from scrolling down the headings and partly because you've made me want to read some of these books based on the openings you've provided. Your commentary was very enjoyable.

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK Author

Thank you Milli- I am always learning from good and bad experiences of writing. This was borne out of a need ot collect and analyse the openers I have remembered and enjoyed. This classification is very much my own and there may be others that exist. But I am proud of creating something that helps to analyze my own and others' writing. Appreciate your visit and comments.

Milli Thornton 4 years ago

Thanks for the reply, Docmo. I was curious about your process in writing this Hub and your response gives me a clue in the regard.

Your love of reading and writing really shines through, as does your quest to better understand and utilize the power of writing. I'm glad I found your Hubs.

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alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

Excellent suggestions here -- and many of them also translate to non-fiction writing such as in hubs. Voting this Up and Useful.

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Brett.Tesol 4 years ago from Somewhere in Asia

Wonderful advice! I have to say when I read a book, the action to hook works well for me. Actually, I like it when a book starts off in the action but doesn't fully explain why, combining the puzzle and action hooks in one.

Up, useful, and sharing.

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dghbrh 4 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

Fantastic tips and a much useful reading for sure. Way to go...all votes up and away:-)

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Suzie HQ 4 years ago from Dublin, Ireland

Hi Docmo,

This was a really interesting article and packed with great advice and examples. It was lovely to read some of the classic works again in this context! Hooks are so important to grab you and I know that I have to be hooked in as a reader or I loose interest. Super tips, thorough as always my friend, voted up+++++ and sharing on :-)

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jainismus 4 years ago from Pune, India

Great tips. These tips will surely help new writers. Thank you for sharing this well written and useful hub.

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shampa sadhya 4 years ago from NEW DELHI, INDIA

Voted up, useful and awesome!

Outstanding article. The different hooks that you have mentioned are very nicely categorized and so it's quite easily understandable. Loved it and definitely very useful for writers like me who are just the beginners. Sharing and pinning it.

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Thelma Alberts 4 years ago from Germany

Awesome! Great tips, very well researched and written. Thanks for sharing;-)

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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

Not bad info, Doc. :) It might work. lol J/K! Great information and very interesting. Voted up and more.

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Relationshipc 4 years ago from Alberta, Canada

Oh I agree that a hook is so important. Sometimes I get hooked into the first few pages only to be disappointed by the second chapter. This is why I think it's important to keep the reader excited until they have to know know, that point in the book where you will never put it down until you finish. Very good hub!

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MelChi 4 years ago from Cape Town, South Africa

I didn't realize that there were so many ways to hook a reader in the first part of a book. Very interesting, and I loved the examples of books you gave for each type of hook. Thanks for sharing! Voted up - useful - interesting - awesome :)

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Sally's Trove 4 years ago from Southeastern Pennsylvania

This concise information is ideal for making a 7-day writing exercise...write one kind of hook a day as a prompt, and see what develops from there. Using the 7 hooks this way looks like a useful tool for teasing myself out of writer's block. Up, interesting, useful.

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Mel Jay 3 years ago from Australia

Wow, fantastic advice - loved the examples you used - thanks for the information, Cheers, Mel

Lucifer 2 years ago

Agreed Mel Jay

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Docmo 2 years ago from UK Author

Thank you Mel Jay and Lucifer.

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FatBoyThin 17 months ago from Kinneff, Scotland

Some great examples of openers here and excellent explanations. Great Hub. Voted up.

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