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Haiku Diary 07-14-17: The First RusMongChi (RMC or Mongku) Verses Ever Crafted in World History!

Updated on July 18, 2017
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Haiku honchos declared labors of love lack literary value. A Lawgiver is needed to uphold the honor of Poetry & Poets. Jose steps forward.

You must have heard about the Mongolian barbecue.  It's about time you learn about the Mongolian sandwich.
You must have heard about the Mongolian barbecue. It's about time you learn about the Mongolian sandwich.

July 14, 2017 / Odiongan

Japanese poetry is founded on two building blocks -- the triku (5-7-5) and the biku (7-7). The three haiku genres (hokku, senryu and zappai) utilize the triku alone. But the other famous short Japanese poetic form -- the tanka (5-7-5 7-7) -- uses both the triku and the biku, wherein the triku is called the "upper poem" and the biku the "lower poem".

Incidentally, the Iberian nations and their numerous descendants in Latin America and anywhere else in the world may choose to translate triku as "tresku" and biku as "dosku". It's their call, not mine.

Haiku means "a haikai verse", indicating the origin of this verse form. Hokku, senryu and zappai all trace their ancestry to haikai renga, a kind of linked verses that were publicly and collaboratively composed in Japan in ancient time. It was a popular form of entertainment during those days.

Now, haikai renga (haikai for short and also called renku meaning linked verses) happened to utilize both the triku and the biku. Haikai was conducted as a poetic exchange between two or more poets. The first verse called "hokku" used the triku form and was usually composed by the best poet in attendance. The second verse was usually couched in the biku form. The whole poetic exchange itself proceeded in an alternating pattern of triku and biku.

I am impelled to discuss these matters today because when I woke up this morning, there was an idea in my mind that I was trying to mold into the haiku form or else the tanka form but couldn't. So by accident and necessity, I ended up inventing a new poetic form -- what I call the RusMongChi (pronounced the way the first syllable of the three countries involved are pronounced) in memory and honor of Mongolia, a landlocked country totally sandwiched by Russia in the north and by China in the south.

If RusMongChi (syllabic count: 7-7 5-7-5 7-7) is difficult to your tongue or to your memory, just call it by its abbreviation of "RMC" or by its nickname of "mongku".

Now, tidy up yourself and prepare for the camera. Give it your best pose! This is a historic moment and the spotlight of history is upon us. You are witnessing below the first appearance of the first ever RusMongChi in the world.! And if you so choose, you could have a happy time narrating to your children and grandchildren that you were among the first to craft the sandwich-like poem called RusMongChi invented by the bard from the Far East.

The first ever RusMongChi in the grand history of cosmos

ordinary citizens
have their own privileges

the high and mighty
cannot freely roam around
and stay unbothered

popular celebrities
cannot wander undisturbed

Ten Rules in Writing a RusMongChi (a.k.a. RMC or mongku)

Post Script the Day After

1. Write with sense.
2. Adhere to the RMC syllabic scheme (7-7 5-7-5 7-7).
3. Keep to a single theme or topic which could be anything.
4. Make your wording and phrasing artful.
5. Try to make each line a complete phrase.
6. Try to make each substanza a complete thought.
7. Rhyming is not required; nor is it discouraged or prohibited.
8. Rhythm is also not required; nor is it discouraged or prohibited
9. All poetic techniques from East and West can be employed.
10. Feed your readers with a nutritious sandwich.

Compose a RusMongChi and post it in the comment box below

As a final note, the three parts of a RuMongChi can be joined together, leaving no spaces among them. Or they can be spaced apart from each other, thus forming three distinct substanzas. The rule is similar to the one in sonneteering wherein the octet, sestets, quatrains, tercets and couplets -- as the case may be -- can be separated or joined together.

I am creating a poll below to find out who are interested to be among the first composers of RuMongChi. Kindly post your finished verse in the comment box below so I can record your literary feat and historic composition, thank you. I shall provide a space right here for the first 100 composers of RusMongChi. Who are going to join me in this exclusive club?

100 RusMongChi Pioneers Club

POET .................................................................................. DATE SUBMITTED

1. Jose Rizal M. Reyes ........................................................ July 14, 2017
2. Nelson M. Reyes (no relation to me but an FB friend) ..... July 15, 2017
3. Aine Albancis Losauro ..................................................... July 15, 2017
4. Jez Rico Cuenta ............................................................... July 15, 2017
5. Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan ........................................... July 15, 2017
6. Randy Salvador N. Ugay .................................................. July 15, 2017
7. Danny Gallardo ................................................................ July 15, 2017
8. Adrian K Montojo .............................................................. July 15, 2017
9. Bilshan F. ServaƱez ......................................................... July 16, 2017
10. Andrew Alan Buhman ..................................................... July 16, 2017
11. Melchor Espeleta Orpilla ................................................ July 16, 2017
12..
13.
14.
100.

Poll for haijin, minstrels, sonneters and other bards out there

Do you want to try composing a RuMongChi?

See results

Comment Section: Post your RusMongChi verses here.

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 7 weeks ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      This hub's first recorded updating was July 18, 2017. But on July 15, the HP editor informed me that Nelson Reyes, Aine Alarba Losauro, jez rico cuenta, Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan, Randy SN Ugay and Danny Galardo had just posted comments. Other bards followed in succeeding days.

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 7 weeks ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      Wow, Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo posted several mongku verses and in four languages yet -- English, Tagalog, Asi and Onhan. We will enter her name in the 100 RusMongChi Pioneers Club after 1 or 2 other poets submitted their poems. Touching or editing the body of the hub/article cause it to be unpublished for 24-48 hours for the usual review procedure. So we shouldn't do that so often.

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      Adrian K Montojo (ianism) 2 months ago

      food chain’s apex predators

      powerful Aquila soars

      flying and circling

      amazing graceful creature

      a hunter and prey

      rules of eat or be eaten

      a single shot took it down

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      Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo 2 months ago

      Rain might be angel's teardrops

      when it touch the ground seeds sprout

      Plants then grow so proud

      with leaves and flowers from buds

      Dancing with the winds

      Beautiful like daffodils

      Fragrant flowers in late spring

      MCRR 2017

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      Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo 2 months ago

      I now believe ghosts are true.

      Sound of a chair being dragged;

      Oh, but I'm alone!

      Now the chill runs down my spine.

      I hurry to the wake.

      Since my presence seems needed.

      I shall bid my last respect.

      MCRR 2017

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      Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo 2 months ago

      My mom is so beautiful.

      With her smile, I'm so beguiled.

      How pure her heart is.

      So loving and so thoughtful.

      God gave her bonus.

      She is nine decades on earth.

      Hurrah to centennial year!

      MCRR 2017

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      Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo 2 months ago

      Oh, sunflowers have blossomed!

      They tilt to sun's direction.

      My heaven on earth.

      When they bloom they quench my thirst.

      Yellow flower heads.

      Sun like, they scatter on earth.

      Humbly with great uniqueness.

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      Two fine RusMongChi verses from Rosario B. Villaluz. One about a tough weather and a "great conspiracy theory". The other about clock watching early in the morning to avoid being late.

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      Rosario B. Villaluz 2 months ago

      five sharp, dings my alarm clock

      half awake, half asleeping

      fifteen minutes passed

      again, the alarm clock dings

      got up so swiftly

      bend my knees and pray shortly

      must be up or get tardy

      RMC#2 @ Rosario B. Villaluz

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      Rosario B. Villaluz 2 months ago

      Sun declines to illumine

      Tough winds gusting aimlessly

      Clouds concealed the moon

      Stars mortified to come out

      Milky way show's elusive

      And one downcast soul

      Universe waging a plot

      Great conspiracy theory!

      RMC#1 @Rosario B Villaluz

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      I'm facing a major test

      after 57 years

      I need to go out

      from the familiar confines

      of my comfort zone

      there is no turning back

      the moment of truth has come

      RMC #2 July 16, 2017

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      Aine 2 months ago

      ...

      I have been there to see you!

      Yes! not long ago I came.

      I took a quick look

      of what you are doing there

      but I missed the chance.

      You must be waiting

      for me for long to come by

      #RusMongChi

      #Mongku #4

      By Aine Losauro

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      rsnu-06 2 months ago

      in darkness they left abode

      half-conscious, hunger-stricken

      gaunt eyes needing sleep

      breathing laboriously

      as cold wind oppressed

      the wild howled with nameless pains

      as blood forged a testament

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      Here's the first mongku written in the Pangasinense language by Melchor Espeleta Orpilla. He also crafted an English translation of his piece.

      Ligsay la'y sakëy tëkap

      Abokay la'y san-dapag

      Bila'y kon aklat

      Kaplesa'y panusulat

      Kagnapa'y piaët

      Luan malikët to tintak

      Dala'n kulay to'y magkët

      -----

      (English translation)

      I have written a chapter

      Just turned some pages

      My life is a book

      Being written with a quest

      For its sheer moments

      Sweet are the tears of my ink

      And colored with crimson red

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      Last night I dreamt of flying,

      Soaring till my eyes opened.

      I walked in sadness

      All day, recalling that dream.

      Till I understood:

      Put your dreams into practice,

      And soar above life's problems!

      #1RusManChi

      Andrew Alan Buhman

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      The poem above was posted by Andrew Alan Buhman in my FB wall. Just like with the poem of Bilshan, I am reposting it here to show his right to be included in our exclusive 100 RusMongChi Pioneers Club.

      Thank you everyone for responding to my invitation to write an RMC. The quality of your pieces are superb, certainly above average.

      I have also noticed that Aine Albancis Losauro has crafted 2 RMCs, Jez Rico Cuenta composed 4 pieces including the first Tagalog RMC, and Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan 2 verses. Really, really amazing talents.

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      mongku 1001

      a spark jumps the stepladder

      followed by a booming clap

      niter fills the air

      the spores are getting active

      on decayed matter

      august happily trundles

      to deliver my mushrooms

      The RMC above was posted by Bilshan F. Servañez elsewhere. He tagged it as "mongku 1001" presumably to indicate that it is a higher form of poetic art.

      I remember that when Bilshan crafted his first haiku, he designated it as "haiku 101" -- the same way college subjects are designated like Accounting 101 or Philosophy 101 for example.

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      I have added the names of fellow bards Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan, Randy Salvador N. Ugay, Danny Gallardo and Adrian K Montojo to the 100 RusMongChi Pioneers Club. Thank you everyone and wishing you and your loved ones a blessed day!

      I will also add the names of Bilshan F. Servañez and Andrew Alan Buhman because they also crafted an RMC each although they posted them elsewhere.

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      Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan 2 months ago

      I wear the rarest jewels

      molten by an artisan

      whose handiwork gleans

      in the seamless canopy

      of heavenly breeze.

      I wear them around my neck-

      wondrous arms of my children.

      © Carolyn Gutierrez- Abanggan

      #2 RusMongChi

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      rsnu-06 2 months ago

      wearing expensive black suits

      sipping the fruit of the vine

      leathered couch hugging

      chiseled bodies of those who

      get hungry by choice

      claims of love for all mankind

      begging bread crumbs for the damned

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      Randy Salvador N. Ugay 2 months ago

      wearing expensive black suits

      sipping the fruit of the vine

      leathered couch hugging

      chiseled bodies of those who

      get hungry by choice

      claims of love for all mankind

      begging bread crumbs for the damned

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      Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan 2 months ago

      scrawny lil bodies wasting

      under a queer, moonless sky

      my heart groans in pain

      for the short-lived innocence.

      taking alms in dirt

      ©Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan

      they hug themselves tight against

      the harsh windy night. eyes shut

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      Aine A Losauro 2 months ago from Philippines

      RusMongChi Poetry

      ...

      RusMongChi poetry born

      In the fourteenth July morn'

      Friendly unique style

      that fits my poetic mind

      Hail with the founder.

      A bard from the far east bay

      To pen this as liberty

      Mongku #3

      By AineLosauro

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      jez rico cuenta 2 months ago from philippines

      wailing wowan in the crowd

      carry on her arms her child

      lifeless,innocent

      wretched moments to view there

      killed by stray bullets

      let tears flows incessantly

      to commend the glory of war.

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      jez rico cuenta 2 months ago from philippines

      sa liwanag ng buwan

      sumisilip sa dilim

      sa mga tala

      na lubhang maririkit

      doon ikaw mamanhik

      sapagkat makikinig

      sila sa iyong hibik.

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      jez rico cuenta 2 months ago from philippines

      The Clouds seem so dark today

      the cold air contains somberness

      Wind drifted the leaves

      heap in the ground waiting firm

      to be shove away.

      It's ironic just like leaves

      we need some force to take heed.

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      Jez Rico Cuenta has joined the 100 Members Only RusMongChi Club!

      Yes, Jez, it's a matter of destiny. There are people who don't believe in coincidences, including myself.

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      jez rico cuenta 2 months ago

      it was destiny for me

      when the universe conspire

      to introduce me

      Birth of this great poetic style

      The RusMongChi poem.

      now my turn to give a shot

      my piece on RusMongChi style.

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      Wow, your RMC production is 200% greater than mine, Aine. You are the first being in the universe to have written 2 RMC verses!

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      Aine A Losauro 2 months ago from Philippines

      Thank you Lord of Poetry JRMR

      Let me pen my second RusMongChi

      As I sat down in my bed

      There's a blue song in my head

      The night was so cold

      Like a winter wind soft-blows

      My heart sigh sadly

      The missing warmth of your breath

      A blue song I always heard

      Mongku #2

      by AineLosauro

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      Ah, Aine couldn't be outdone. That's a superb RusMongChi, Aine. You are surpassing your own poetic ability.

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      Jose Rizal Reyes 2 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

      That's a great piece, Nelson. I am pleased with your prompt reply. Thank you very much and kudos!

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      Nelson M. Reyes 2 months ago

      As I look at the bamboos

      The east wind blow towards it

      I can see a smile

      In its swaying leaves and trees

      Telling me something

      You are one of the few here

      That can see me dance and sing

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      Aine 2 months ago

      Upon the sun's arrival

      Flowers in the gardens bow.

      How are you master

      Our kind energy giver

      Here are your servants

      Sun smiles in return greetings

      Spreading his golden rays crown.

      Mongku #1

      by: ainelosauro

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      Nelson M. Reyes 2 months ago

      As I look at the bamboos

      The east wind blow towards it

      I can see a smile

      In its swaying leaves and trees

      Telling me something

      You are one of the few here

      That can see me dance and sing