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Flash Fiction- The Watering Hole

Updated on May 09, 2016
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I am a writer of poetry and fiction. I especially love flash fiction. My name is Ruby, and I live in Southern Illinois. I am a retired R.N.

Pete sat motionless as he listened to the mortician's remarks.

Pete only had a couple stair flights to reach his favorite watering hole, a bar where he spent every waking hour. He sat down and ordered his usual, a double shot of whiskey with a water chaser.

He'd lived in a little one bedroom apartment above the bar since his retirement two years ago. He'd worked on the docks loading and unloading ships since he was old and strong enough to lift cargo coming and going.

He had never married and had no surviving family.

Joe, who owned the bar paid little attention to him as long as he paid-up and didn't bother anyone.

Pete lived in his own little world drinking, and making friends wasn't on his bucket list. He'd never deliberately hurt anyone, but he'd never gone out of his way to help anyone either.


A large mirror hung on the wall behind the bar, depicting a nude woman on a lily pad. Pete had never noticed it before, but tonight, he saw movement and was astonished to see his body laying on a slab at the city morgue.

The mortician was in the process of performing an autopsy for medical students. First he removed the liver which was black with areas of green pus. Next, he removed the brain which was dark gray. He had a normal brain and liver encased in a see-through container to highlight the difference between the normal and diseased organs.

Pete sat motionless as he listened to the mortician tell the students, " This is a typical case of alcoholism and how it destroys the liver. ( Cirrhosis of the liver ) and the brain, ( Alcoholic Psychosis )

This man's name I'm told, is Pete. He was robbed and murdered in the hallway, just a few steps from his apartment above the bar where he spent most of his awake hours drinking.

Pete ordered another drink and downed it quickly before stumbling out of the bar, heading for the stairs that led to his apartment.

Fumbling for his door keys, he saw four hoodlum killers walking toward him.

There really wasn't four, there were only two. Double vision is another common occurrence when too much alcohol reaches the brain.


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      MizBejabbers 10 months ago

      Wow, that's a goodie, and it carries a ring of truth, too, along with a little metaphysical prophecy. Love your flash fiction, Ruby. You keep 'em short and not-so-sweet...and very interesting. Keep it up.

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      Eric Dierker 10 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Well I reckon my life ain't so bad after all.

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      Bill Holland 10 months ago from Olympia, WA

      That's one rotten retirement if you ask me. :) I've said it before but that won't stop me from saying it again...flash fiction is your wheelhouse.

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      mckbirdbks 10 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

      Well, this is a gritty piece of work from our bird loving, Elvis following, happy-go-lucky writer from IL. I sometimes, like now, wonder what inspires a story. Hi, Ruby.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi MizBejabbers. I do believe I enjoy writing flash fiction more and more. It suits my attention span. A long story is difficult for me to stay involved. I am so glad that you enjoy my stories. Thank you so much.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Eric, I think we're both doing fine. lol.. Thanks for making me laugh...

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Bill, your comment blows me away! Wheelhouse is a new accolade for me and I love it. Thank you so much..

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Mike, when I was in nursing training, I was one of the students who watched this autopsy of an alcoholic. I just used that experience for Pete. Of course I let my mind run wild about the mirror. BTW the picture above the bar made the story come alive for me. I am still that woman who loves Elvis and my birds, but I also love to write flash fiction, and sometimes you must get down and dirty to make a point. There are many Pete's out there with this horrible addiction who need someone to care enough to get them needed help. I've known a couple. Thanks for asking the question. Hugs......

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      Genna East 10 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

      My heart went out to this poor, solitary man, and the fact that those double shots of whiskey were his only comfort in his final years. Loneliness sometimes takes the bottle as a friend; it can destroy the soul the way liquor can destroy the body. I have to agree with Bill...flash fiction is your wheelhouse, Ruby. Well done!

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      Clive Williams 10 months ago from Nibiru

      pete needs some good ginger and weed tea. His life is wasted.

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      Venkatachari M 10 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Wow! It's a great flash fiction. You have done it so well and left the ending for the readers to complete.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi Genna. I read an article that told of the many older people who are alone and lonely. They had turned to alcohol for companionship. It is sad indeed. Pete needed someone to reach out to him, maybe he wouldn't accept it, but perhaps he would. Thank you for always supporting whatever I write. Hugs..

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Clive. What is weed tea? Is it a drink? You are correct, his life was wasted..Thank you...

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello VenKatachari. I'm so glad you liked this one. Thank you so much.

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      Audrey Hunt 10 months ago from Nashville Tn.

      Ruby,

      You're a flash fiction artist. You have me feeling so sorry for this poor man. Excellent work my friend. Mighty fine job!

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      John Hansen 10 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Ruby, it looks like you've found your new niche...flash fiction. Well done..poor old Pete didn't even get a chance to learn a lesson from his prophetic vision.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Audrey, I felt sorry for him too. Funny how that happens. Thank you for the upbeat compliment...

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi John, I love to write flash fiction. I can blame Frank for that. lol. Thank you..

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      Nell Rose 10 months ago from England

      You do flash fiction so well Ruby, I tend to write too much, you get it totally right! gruesome stuff! lol!

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      Devika Primić 10 months ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

      Amazing and so much you have in mind. This is what happens when you start to enjoy what you do.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Nell. Thank you Nell. I loved your flash fiction, talk about gruesome, the blood transfusions were scary and unique....

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi DDE, I do enjoy dabbing in fiction with a twist ending. Thank you for coming by....

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      Martie Coetser 10 months ago from South Africa

      Oh dear, how scary, and powerful. This is a winner, dear Ruby!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Martie, so nice to see you. Thanks for your ' winner ' comment..

      Hugs my friend...

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      Frank Atanacio 10 months ago from Shelton

      wow always.. this one was very good.. wow... very well written

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Wow Frank, thank you. So glad you enjoyed...

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      Faith Reaper 10 months ago from southern USA

      Hi Ruby,

      I didn't see a notice about this one! I'm so glad I popped over here and saw this flash fiction. If I didn't know better, this could be a prelude to one of Frank's flash fictions. His last flash was about a mortician performing an autopsy is why I that thought popped into my mind.

      There are so many sad and lonely souls out there in this world. It seems alcohol is so misunderstood, in that so many use it to drown their sorrows, so-to-speak, but it just really takes them deeper down that dark hole of despair.

      What a sad life and ending of life for Pete.

      On another note, you are a terrific flash fiction writer!

      Peace and blessings always

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Theresa, Frank writes some great flash fiction hubs. I learn something every time he writes. I must say that I love writing the unusual. Thank you so much for the terrific comment....

      Peace and blessings...

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      Faith Reaper 10 months ago from southern USA

      Oops, I mean prequel not prelude there.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Theresa, don't worry about that. My typos show up frequently. lol..Cheers.

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      Shyron E Shenko 10 months ago

      Ruby, Ruby my gem of a friend

      I could not believe that would be his end

      I thought there would be a reprieve

      And divine intervention he would receive

      But, alas there were no twists

      As his name was added to the list

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      Ruby you get better and better at this Flash Fiction.

      Blessings and hugs my gem of a friend.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 10 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Shyron, I guess I could've given him a reprieve, but his life was over due to alcoholism. There's no repairing organs that's diseased from alcohol. Thank you my pearl of a friend. Hugs...

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      manatita44 9 months ago from london

      Awesome, Ruby.Interesting and Excellent Hub!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 9 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hi manatita, Thank you for your awesome comment. Happy you enjoyed..

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      Maria Jordan 9 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Love when your inner nurse combines with your writing muse, dear Ruby ~ a tale with depth and credibility.

      Excellent story! Love, Maria

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 9 months ago from Southern Illinois

      Hello Mar. This piece came from my day's as a nursing student, watching an autopsy on an alcoholic brain and liver. Pete needed a friend. Thank you my dear friend...

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      Shauna L Bowling 9 months ago from Central Florida

      There's a definite moral to this story, Ruby. Love your flash fiction!

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 9 months ago from Southern Illinois

      I'm happy you saw a moral in this story. Alcohol is a killer that's harmed my family. Thank you for loving my flash fiction. I love writing it....

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