Ending a Relationship When Still in Love (Story in Narrative Poetry)
Introduction
The three poems below tell the story of a failed romance when still in love, and the attempts at working on the relationship with the intent of making it last.
The first poem is about how synchronicity brought us back together after a futile start, to grow closer once again, until the final departure.
When lovers are deeply involved, it’s difficult to see the forest for the trees, as the saying goes. However, once we are on the outside looking in, things become clear, as portrayed in the second poem.
Finally, the third poem reviews the mistakes with the clarity of being alone once again. I describe how we were working on the outer periphery of the relationship without concentrating on its inner core.
Synchronicity Marks a Revival
A poem about the revival of a lost relationship as synchronicity brought us back together.
After a breakup for reasons unclear
Our paths once again cross, and I see my dear.
It was unexpected, with no thought involved.
But it opened communication for problems to be solved.
She told me she was leaving in a week to visit her family.
Without thinking, I offered a ride to the airport merrily.
We both agreed to enjoy the week before her departure
With no actual discussion and just some nurture.
We agreed that we’d talk a month later upon her return.
So we went with the flow and discovered much to learn.
We got to know each other more than before.
It's undoubtedly a feeling that may endure.
Only the Present Survives
A poem that evaluates the challenging relationship as it draws to an end.
Unsure at first, then feelings develop
Craving for more and caring envelops
Attentive to her delicate cues although she may not have known
Accepting all differences and desiring a future sealed in stone
But she found one thing disparaging
and no longer was acknowledging
With a futile team effort, she wanted to be freed
Recognizing challenges and appreciating her need
Set free when requested only because of love
What more can I give with no sign from above
The past now cut off, leaving only fond memories
The future cut off too, without further discoveries
Only the present remains,
Heartbroken
The Essential Necessity: Trust
A poem that reviews the mistakes made in a doomed relationship.
What are we doing with this relationship?
Are we just here for the companionship?
Concentrating only on the periphery
leaves us eventually feeling jittery.
We haven’t focused on its inner core
although we’ve had a great rapport.
By avoiding what really mattered
we came to a state of feeling battered.
We missed out on developing a real experience
and bringing our relationship to actual deliverance.
If only we were able
to make our feelings stable
Knowing and understanding one another completely
would’ve helped discover mutual needs so sweetly.
Trust in the process
could’ve bound our hearts regardless.
That, I feel, is necessary to create a bond throughout
that cannot be broken by fear or by doubt.
“In life, unlike chess, the game continues after checkmate.”
— Isaac Asimov© 2016 Glenn Stok
Comments
AUTHORBrian Leekley - Thanks Brian. Poetry doesn't earn much from Google search traffic, but it's nice to be recognized for achievement.
Congratulations, Glenn, on winning a HubPages award with these three poems.
Congratulations!
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Miebakagh57 - You pointed out a very important aspect of liability—lack of trust. That’s a good way to look at it. Thank you for bringing that up.
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manatita44 - Thank you so much for your comment on my poems. Interesting that you mentioned it reading like a song. I actually did write lyrics for a romance song once.
Hello, Glenn, this poem reminds me of the legal maxim, a person you cannot trust is a liability. "Trust" matters much in any relationship. Its absence cause frictions. Therefore, trust is an essential ingredient for couples, friends, family members to understand one another and things. Your poem fulfills that essence. Thanks.
Very beautiful piece. Reads lyrically, like a song or story-telling excellence. Great work!
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Thanks Jean. I agree with you that companionship isn’t enough when it’s not preserved with understanding.
Lovely poems and valuable insights Glenn. Congrats on your win! I have similar issues, and sometimes think companionship is enough, but it really isn't. As you point out, the knowing and understanding isn't there.
Congrats, Glenn! As I told Verlie, although I don't really understand the art of poetry--more a short story guy myself--I'm pleased my friends do. :)
Glen, these poems do a great job of analyzing the demise of a relationship. Sometimes we have to be on the outside looking in to see the truth.
Great job and congrats on your win!
"CONGRATULATIONS," Glenn! Wonderful job! Paula
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Thank you John, Dora, and Verlie, for your wonderful feedback on my poetry. It was a pleasant surprise to see that I won the contest.
Glenn your narrative is heart tugging, engaging, and well structured. The rhyming couplets give a lot of strength to the story. I liked how you delved deep into reasons why the relationship ended without playing the blame game. That's so important. Congratulations on the poetry win! All the best.
Two years ago, I recognized this as good work. Congratulations on your contest win!
Nice work on these poems Glenn and linking the different stages of the relationship. Congrats on being one of the winners in the contest too.
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Thanks, Kristen, for saying I’m a wiz of poetic words. Funny thing is that it only comes out of me when I feel deep emotion.
Great set of poems Glenn on how felt in a troubled relationship with such profound words. You're a wiz of poetic words.
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Thelma Alberts - Thanks Thelma.
Beautiful! It´s hard to have an ending relationship. Thanks for sharing these awesome poetry.
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FlourishAnyway - Thanks for your kind words.
Break ups are difficult, and men often take them more worse than women. Especially when you don't understand why, it's hard. I'm sorry for your heartbreak.
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RTalloni - What a great suggestion! I actually did that once, making a verse I wrote into a song by creating a melody to go with it. You reminded me of that. I'll have to try it with these poems to see what I can make of it. All I would need is contact with a professional singer who could take my words and melody and add an instrumental to put it to song. Anyone interested?
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MsDora - Absolutely! Time heals all wounds, as the saying goes.
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These poems on unrequited love remind of a folk song or ballad. With continuing verses I imagine that you could turn them into one!
In such a situation, the "fond memories" will have to become agents of comfort, and sadness doesn't have to last forever. Grief may turn to gladness after a while.
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Kaili Bisson - The first poem was full of hope because it was a precursor to the second one. I guess all relationships begin with hope.
Well done. I especially like the first one, as it is full of hope :)
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Blond Logic - You're right Mary. In addition, if one person isn't happy and the other loves her, he is willing to let her go since her happiness is the most important. Problem is, she later changes her mind. But without anything being any different it would only repeat the same pattern.
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tsmog - Thanks Tim. I guess wisdom comes with time. For some it just takes longer, requiring more heartaches to learn from.
I think in relationships there is always one party who believes it could still work out, but if one person isn't happy, a relationship can never survive.
Your poems are ones which most can relate to as many of us have experienced the same .
Thanks for sharing Glenn. I 'feel' and see wisdom . . .
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