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Understanding a Failed Relationship (Narrative Poetry)


Glenn Stok experiments with writing emotionally captivating stories with an intimate flair in poetry and prose.

Explanation of the Poem That Follows

Creative writing with poetry can bring hidden feelings to the surface and begin emotional healing. It can help one make sense of the confusing thoughts and hidden feelings that are buried deep inside of us.

We need to get in touch with the grief of a breakup and we need to understand the painful emotions that follow the loss of someone dear to us.

I found that I can do this by letting the various thoughts in my mind emerge in a poetic fashion. It helps to develop an understanding of what took place. It also conveys to the reader the essence of the romance and the emotions involved with the breakup.

I tend to become poetic when I experience strong feelings, especially when involved with a romantic relationship. This creative side of me only appears under these conditions.

I include an explanation below the poem describing the meaning of each stanza.


Breaking Up and Moving On

Synchronicity leaps on the very first day.
Much to discover and thoughts of what may

Be it a friendship or lovers to be
Sure is a mystery for you and me.

Our voices harmonized but never repeated.
Nevertheless, we were never conceited.

Three months go by with being ourselves.
More sharing continues and overwhelms.

A puzzling past that is hard to conceive.
The desire for explanation leaves little to believe.

Attempts to clear the confusion lead to dismay.
Saying Goodbye because there's nothing left to say.

The Meaning of Each Stanza Explained

“Synchronicity leaps on the very first day.”

The relationship began with the discovery of similar interests, hence the synchronicity.

“Much to discover and thoughts of what may.”

We quickly discovered many common values and desires.

“Be it a friendship or lovers to be. Sure is a mystery for you and me.“

It started as a friendship, but wondered if we should keep it that way or move forward.

“Our voices harmonized but never repeated.”

We loved to sing together.

“Three months go by with being ourselves.”

In the beginning we each accepted one another as we were.

“More sharing continues and overwhelms.”

As more was shared, we both became overwhelmed with feelings.

“A puzzling past that is hard to conceive.”

As past lives and baggage emerged, trouble pursued.

“The desire for explanation leaves little to believe.”

Trust and distrust began to become an issue.

“Attempts to clear the confusion lead to dismay.”

Failure to communicate became more common.

“Saying Goodbye because there's nothing left to say.”

Finally giving up, knowing that nothing could be resolved.

© 2016 Glenn Stok


Glenn Stok (author) from Long Island, NY on November 07, 2019:

Brenda Arledge - Thanks for returning and for your additional comment. Thanks also for the kind words.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on November 05, 2019:

You capture the essence of relationships excellently.

From beginning, to middle , to end...it is usually this way.

Nice read.

Glenn Stok (author) from Long Island, NY on July 27, 2019:

Brenda Arledge - You’re absolutely right. It takes time to get to know the inner person, and to understand where they are coming from when their baggage interferes with growth of the relationship.

Too often we overlook the good qualities when something seems to stand in the way.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on July 27, 2019:

I like how you gave an intro before your poem and then you detailed the meaning below.

The below meaning really not necessary for your words painted the picture in my mind.

I feel sometimes we give up on relationships much too quickly. Everyone has a past and there will be times things come up until we really get to know the inner person.

Glenn Stok (author) from Long Island, NY on May 04, 2018:

Thanks Mark. I’m glad you like the way I wrote this poem with a couplet style.

Mark Tulin from Palm Springs, California on May 04, 2018:

Like the couplet form, you used here in this melancholy poem.

Glenn Stok (author) from Long Island, NY on December 19, 2017:

Thanks Kristen. That’s what I always try to achieve with anything I write.

Kristen Howe from Northeast Ohio on December 19, 2017:

Wow Glenn, this is a real moving and profound poem. I loved how you painted a vivid picture with those poetic words. Now I know what you mean to make it meaningful and engaging and educational with your intro too.

Glenn Stok (author) from Long Island, NY on September 20, 2016:

Jean Bakula - Yes, life is complicated. I'm sorry for your lose and I agree that as long as you don't feel ready, it wouldn't be the right time to move on. However, when the time comes and you meet someone new, know in your heart that your deceased husband would have wanted you to be happy.

As for your son, these things are always difficult and complicated. He is an adult and to some degree you have to let him handle his own affairs himself. I wrote an article about a friend who had another issue with her son. Not the same thing, and by no means as problematic as yours, but he couldn't decide what to do with his life and he is even older than your son. His Mom didn't know how to handle it.

Complicated? You bet!

Jean Bakula on September 20, 2016:

Your relationship poems are very touching. I haven't dated since my husband died 2 1/2 years ago, it was very sudden. Guys try to feel me out to see if I want to date them. I just don't feel ready. My husband was brilliant and I could talk to him for hours. He was devoted, kind, and fun. He always looked at life from a different view than other people.

I know I have to take the plunge soon or I never will. We had one son, now 28, who is having some issues and is living here with me. So it's not exactly the best arrangement, but he's been falsely accused of a crime and the court system moves slowly. I feel stuck, and like it wouldn't be fair to go out with somebody while this "black cloud" is hanging over me.

I guess we all date in hope of finding more than just someone to talk to, although I would even settle for that, but would be scared to move on. It's complicated, isn't it?

Glenn Stok (author) from Long Island, NY on May 03, 2016:

FlourishAnyway - You brought up an interesting point Shelly. When we love someone and try to make things work, we struggle to make sense of the confusion that stems from miscommunication.

FlourishAnyway from USA on May 03, 2016:

You communicate the bewilderness and confusion of someone who is struggling to make sense of what happened in the relationship.

Glenn Stok (author) from Long Island, NY on March 24, 2016:

Kathleen Cochran - Thank you for those kind thoughts. I think we all could write a novel from the life experiences we have.

Kathleen Cochran from Atlanta, Georgia on March 24, 2016:

This poem is a romance novel in just a few words. I'm sorry for the heartbreak, friend, but I'm glad you redirected your passion into this beautiful poem. Hoping for happiness for you in the days to come.

Glenn Stok (author) from Long Island, NY on February 07, 2016:

Thank you to all of you for your comments. You have all shown a keen perception of the emotions and feelings I tried to convey in my poem. You've shown me that it was a success.

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on February 06, 2016:

You may have described a universal experience throughout the poem. Who cannot relate to the last two lines especially? Well done!

James Bowden from Long Island, New York on February 06, 2016:


A nice short summary in poem form that not only expresses your emotions, but more importantly an affair that at one point in time was meaningful enough for you to reminisce about and convey your feelings in the form of poetry. And often it is relationships, or the loss of a parent or spouse for example that stimulates our other creative side apart from writing fiction or non-fiction for example. Thanks for sharing this.


John Hansen from Gondwana Land on February 06, 2016:

Glenn, it is unfortunate that it often takes hardship or heartbreak to inspire creative writing, especially poetry. This poem displayed your feelings and the relationship and its ending perfectly. Thank you for sharing.

Venkatachari M from Hyderabad, India on February 05, 2016:

Very much captivating and factual description of the feelings and relationships.

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