Fin lives in the Central Valley, where he is a student at CSUB. He writes in his free time and is interested in social issues and travel.

quick poem

The traffic from the freeway is

silenced by the majestic wave of trees

and the moon, a bit shy

has decided to sleep tonight

as do the neighbors next door

and I suppose about the town.

In larger cities there still may be lights

and some noise from the people on the streets,

the buses and cars electric in avenues

lined with cafes and music

and the couples dining

and the public fountains alive

with water

electric almost - shooting coils in the air,

the bulbs of bright coins

pooling in the shallow basins.

On another side of the planet

the first thin slivers of light

penetrate the curves of

the sky

and the bright

pristine rivers

slip through the dark crevices

of rock

and sing

as the sharp pebbles mature

into thin sands.

Comments

Fin (author) from Barstow on August 19, 2018:

thank you Susan. Wasn't quite a piece I wanted...just something to tide my insomnia...and didn't go the direction i wanted but i think it is a finished piece.

Susan W from The British Isles, Europe on August 19, 2018:

Such a gorgeous piece, filled with bursts of vivid, sparkling imagery that just came to life in my mind. Night time is always the most mysterious; pinpricks of city lights always lend to some of the most electric imagery the world has to offer.

And then the juxtaposition with light bursting through crevices in the sky was so lovely too.

Your piece definitely made use of light in its most potent form.

Loved this!

Fin (author) from Barstow on August 04, 2018:

Flourish and Elijah:

This didn't quite go where I wanted it to and I was trying to work with some paralellisms and incorporate my inability to sleep.

Not quite what I had in mind when I started, but then again, sometimes it just feels good to write things down.

thanks for your nice comments.

FlourishAnyway from USA on August 04, 2018:

This was a beautiful description of two sides of this world.

Elijah A Alexander Jr from Washington DC on August 04, 2018:

A complete observation of the USA in comparison to the opposite side of the earth described to perfection.