Fin lives in the Central Valley, where he is a student at CSUB. He writes in his free time and is interested in social issues and travel.
The traffic from the freeway is
silenced by the majestic wave of trees
and the moon, a bit shy
has decided to sleep tonight
as do the neighbors next door
and I suppose about the town.
In larger cities there still may be lights
and some noise from the people on the streets,
the buses and cars electric in avenues
lined with cafes and music
and the couples dining
and the public fountains alive
electric almost - shooting coils in the air,
the bulbs of bright coins
pooling in the shallow basins.
On another side of the planet
the first thin slivers of light
penetrate the curves of
and the bright
slip through the dark crevices
as the sharp pebbles mature
into thin sands.
Fin (author) from Barstow on August 19, 2018:
thank you Susan. Wasn't quite a piece I wanted...just something to tide my insomnia...and didn't go the direction i wanted but i think it is a finished piece.
Susan W from The British Isles, Europe on August 19, 2018:
Such a gorgeous piece, filled with bursts of vivid, sparkling imagery that just came to life in my mind. Night time is always the most mysterious; pinpricks of city lights always lend to some of the most electric imagery the world has to offer.
And then the juxtaposition with light bursting through crevices in the sky was so lovely too.
Your piece definitely made use of light in its most potent form.
Fin (author) from Barstow on August 04, 2018:
Flourish and Elijah:
This didn't quite go where I wanted it to and I was trying to work with some paralellisms and incorporate my inability to sleep.
Not quite what I had in mind when I started, but then again, sometimes it just feels good to write things down.
thanks for your nice comments.
FlourishAnyway from USA on August 04, 2018:
This was a beautiful description of two sides of this world.
Elijah A Alexander Jr from Washington DC on August 04, 2018:
A complete observation of the USA in comparison to the opposite side of the earth described to perfection.