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You Can't Close One Eye and Not Open the Other

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You Can't Close One Eye and Not Open the Other

Such a blind eye such a hateful heart
Has scarred your being, has torn you apart
You can't close one eye and open the other
Half-truths whole lies have left you to wonder

One cannot hide, from the truths that are told
Or do the things that make you feel so bold
So confusing- such a split and twisted tongue
When you turn around you just don't see anyone

So, what's left for one to do
Believe in your own lies that you tell to you?
I cannot go on...live with all this thunder
Everything is wrong it's gone six feet under

The blood has drained completely from my heart
Nothing flows through my veins... they've been shattered apart...
The air has been sucked right out of my chest
Leaving my heart in silence! -cardiac arrest!!!-

You watch me in the distance
Feeling your eyes follow me with no resistance...
Your words... they cut just like a knife
With no regard to this mortal life...

Is there no integrity that you might possess?
Just speak in silence! to give it a rest!
Let go of the pain and quiet the thunder
Before it's all gone.... six feet under...

© 2020 Donna Rayne


Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on March 01, 2020:

Thank you very much, Ivana. I appreciate it.


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Ivana Divac from Serbia on March 01, 2020:

Very well-written, captivating and filled with such strong emotions. A wonderful piece of art!

Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 27, 2020:

Thank you so much Deborah, I couldn't have done it without Jesus!

Have a good day,

Donna Rayne

Deborah Reno from First Wyoming, then THE WORLD on February 25, 2020:

Fantastic poem. And the explanation of your ex and his behavior makes it even more powerful.

You are a survivor. And the creator of your beautiful life.


Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 23, 2020:

Thank you so much, Brenda, feel free to share what you like, I am honored that you wish to do that.

Thank you and have a great day!

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Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 23, 2020:

Thank you so much, Brenda, feel free to share whatever you like. I will go check out your group!


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BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on February 22, 2020:


This poem is so deep. It cuts right to the core of the feelings one harbors inside when dealing with this type of person.

Great write.

Feel free to post poetry in my new group Sparklecity Poetry Group.


I would also love to post some of your work on Poets with a voice.


Thanks for sharing your talent.

Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 21, 2020:

Thank you and yes it was very scary. Thank you for reading my poem!

Have a great day :)

Donna Rayne

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on February 21, 2020:

I am glad, after reading the comments, to know that person is no longer in your life. It sounded like a very scary time!

Rosina S Khan on February 15, 2020:

Hi Donna, I would like to make a request. Would you like to go through my new article, titled, "Believe in Miracles- God Will Make a Way"? If your answer is yes, I would ask you humbly to click the link below, read the article and leave your feedback in the comments section.


Thank you.

Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 14, 2020:

Exactly Ms. Dora, sometimes "love' is not what it should be. Get out while you can, call out to Jesus and he will save you!


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Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on February 14, 2020:

Great, practical advice. Let go of the pain. Give it a rest. Live! A wonderful message.

Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 12, 2020:

Thank you so very much, Flourish! Me too!

Have a lovely day! :)

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FlourishAnyway from USA on February 11, 2020:

People with hate in their heart like this are hurting but it doesn't mean we have to tolerate it or make it our issue as well. I'm glad you're done with it.

Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 10, 2020:

Thank you very much, Linda and Ms. Ruby for sweet words!


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Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on February 10, 2020:

This was a powerful poem! Self hatred, is there no cure? Exceptional poetry!

Linda Crampton from British Columbia, Canada on February 10, 2020:

This is a powerful poem, Donna. I was very glad to read in the comments that you no longer feel this way.

Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 10, 2020:

Thank you, Lorna and William, and manatita44 for all your kind words and I am so glad to be out of this situation. Been 10 years ago and I have grown so much thanks to Jesus.

And Manatita, thank you for seeing the music in this poem. I appreciate all the kind words from you all!


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manatita44 from london on February 10, 2020:

You know, my sweet, Donna, naturally it refers to sad times, but I couldn't stop myself feeling the music all the way through. It will make a brilliant rap poem with the right music. It flows in my head like a rhythmic beat.

Yes, life does have those colours. A woman recently wished me a colourful New Year! I found it very amusing and I thought of colours similar to this poem. They have so many shades!

I don't know the circumstance but it's a brilliant piece of writing. Peace!

William Kovacic from Pleasant Gap, PA on February 10, 2020:

Excellent, Donna! You captured the night perfectly.

Lorna Lamon on February 10, 2020:

A poem full of fear, anger and courage. You have sent out a strong message through your powerful words Donna. I am so glad you are free from this abusive person and that others in similar situations will take strength from your words.

Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 09, 2020:

Thank you very much, Rosina!


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Rosina S Khan on February 09, 2020:

Thank God, Donna you aren't grieving any longer. The poem shows strong bitterness towards the man concerned. You assert it is only to show others hope and find out ways who are in similar bondage. Now that's a benevolent act. Truly appreciated.

Donna Rayne (author) from Greenwood, Indiana on February 09, 2020:

Thank you, I wrote this in 2010 and I didn't change a word except for the title. Which was "Six Feet Under" I don't feel this way anymore, in 2012 Jesus snatched me up and brought me out of the horrid life I was living and saved my soul and my life.

I share this poem only to give those who are in this type of bondage, that there is hope and there is a way out! Just call out to Jesus and He will save you!

Much love always and God Bless,

Donna Rayne

Clive Williams from Jamaica on February 09, 2020:

Sad affairs. But good write

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on February 09, 2020:

Donna, There is such grief in this poem. The person that sounds so evil is someone to stay away from no matter what. The poem really flows and is very good, but I am conerned about the pain that must have triggered a poem with these words. I pray you will be doing much better in the near future.

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