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Transitional Thoughts

Lorna is a published writer with a particular interest in narrative poetry, which she finds therapeutic.

transitional-thoughts

Within the power of our imagination

Creating our own version of perfection

Held within the mirror of reflection

Where life’s reality does not exist


How glorious the morning birdsong

Captured in the hush of dawn

Whose melody imprints upon the mind

Preserved forever as a joyous memory


Heaven’s sweet scent of summer rain

Soft vapours released from clouds

Like the soothing balm of a gentle touch

On a scorched and crying earth


Those thronging cities full of life

Searching for something just out of reach

Yet within the cacophony of many voices

We yearn for that strain of silence


Our fate with shades of black and white

Like an open book filling empty spaces

Constantly striving to improve that rough draft

In the hope we will become our final copy


If our world became a countless sea of stars

Each one carrying all our hopes and prayers

Would our memories unite in mourning

Longing for the comfort of dawn’s light

© 2020 Lorna Lamon

Comments

Lorna Lamon (author) on March 14, 2020:

Thank you for taking the time to read this poem Peggy and for understanding its meaning. Your kind comments are always appreciated.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on March 14, 2020:

Conjuring up images of searching for improvement in our lives, as well as welcomed memories, comes to mind when reading your poem.

"Constantly striving to improve that rough draft

In the hope we will become our final copy"

That is part of the human condition. Your choice of words is perfect!

Lorna Lamon (author) on February 01, 2020:

Your comments are always so kind and generous Audrey. That particular verse really speaks of this need within us all. I feel we all get there in the end - life's journey. Glad you like my choice of photos, as I try as much as possible to connect them to the poem. Always a pleasure to see you Audrey and thank you for visiting.

Audrey Hunt from Idyllwild Ca. on January 31, 2020:

"Our fate with shades of black and white

Like an open book filling empty spaces

Constantly striving to improve that rough draft

In the hope we will become our final copy"

Oh, Lorna, this stanza so perfectly describes our need to become all that we possibly can. What an amazing piece of poetry! I also want to mention how much I love your choice of photos. Thank you.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 27, 2020:

Thank you so much Dora and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I always appreciate your comments.

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on January 27, 2020:

Your poetry manifest your expert writing skills. In addition to its message, I like the alliteration in "Heaven’s sweet scent of summer rain." Good work!

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 26, 2020:

Lovely to see you Ann and thank you for your kind comments.

Ann Carr from SW England on January 25, 2020:

Food for thought, Lorna. You push the boundaries and invade our minds to pull out something we didn't know was there! Always something unexpected, always so well-crafted.

Ann

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 24, 2020:

Hello Denise, Yes that place where thoughts take shape and increase awareness. Lovely to see you and thank you for commenting.

Denise McGill from Fresno CA on January 24, 2020:

It sounds like that half awake and half asleep place where reality isn't really in play yet. I like that floating semi-conscious place. I get some great ideas there.

Blessings,

Denise

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 23, 2020:

I am sure we will Mary we cannot stop hoping. Thank you for visiting and commenting.

Mary Norton from Ontario, Canada on January 23, 2020:

How glorious the morning birdsong...this is what wakes me up every morning. I just love it. I hope we can enjoy this for years still given what you expressed in your poem about our world. Still, it is good to hope.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 23, 2020:

Lovely to see you Elise and I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for your kind comments.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 23, 2020:

Lovely to see you Lora and your thoughts echo my own. Thank you for visiting and for your generous comments.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 23, 2020:

Hello Devika, I couldn't agree more we all need to work together. Thank you for visiting and for your kind and generous comments.

Elise from Melbourne on January 22, 2020:

beautifully written Lorna

Lora Hollings on January 22, 2020:

A beautiful and wistful poem, Lorna. It conjures images of a polluted and burned world and cities full of people alienated from a much more serene existence and our ideals compromised but still longing for a world where finally peace and the uniting of all mankind will at last prevail. Wonderful writing! Thanks for sharing.

Jessica Agnew from Jacksonville on January 22, 2020:

wow, nice poem. it was really nice and made me think.

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on January 22, 2020:

Hi Lorna I enjoyed your poem and with so much going on in the world right now light and prayers is what is needed for a better place. You have a creative mind and great skill to write poetry.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 22, 2020:

Lovely to see you Jason and I'm glad those lines spoke to you. It's true we can change, improve and grow every day. Thank you for your kind and generous comments.

Jason Nicolosi from AZ on January 22, 2020:

Beautifully written poem Lorna. I believe that as humans, we try to better ourselves so that one day we will be the ultimate person that we can be. Each day we have is another chance for us to evolve into something better. Our final draft.

Like the others I also loved the line:

"Constantly striving to improve that rough draft

In the hope we will become our final copy"

That line was amazing to me.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 22, 2020:

This is the message I was trying to convey in the last verse. That we would heal our world and remain. Thank you for visiting and for your generous comments.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 22, 2020:

Hello Cheryl, I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for your kind comments.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 22, 2020:

Always lovely to see you John and many thanks for your generous comments.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 22, 2020:

I'm delighted you enjoyed this poem Pamela and thank you for your kind and generous comments.

Rosina S Khan on January 21, 2020:

The last stanza in your poem is my fave in which each star would carry our hopes and prayers so that our memories would unite in mourning and we stay in anticipation of the comfort of dawn's light. Very beautifully written as always, Lorna. I couldn't be more baffled and impressed. Thank you for sharing another wonderful poem.

Cheryl E Preston from Roanoke on January 21, 2020:

Very inspiring as always

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on January 21, 2020:

A beautifully collection of words sculptured into a wonderful poem. Lorna your poetry never disappoints.

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on January 21, 2020:

I read this poem 3 times just to try as I think it is absolutely beautiful. This poem really made me think about your meaning and I really liked "Constantly striving to improve that rough draft

In the hope we will become our final copy" That seems to explain life as we make mistakes and learn from them, constantly trying to learn and improve ourselvs.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 21, 2020:

You are very kind Lorna and it's always a pleasure to see you. Thank you for visiting.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 21, 2020:

Thank you Brenda - I'm glad you liked those lines. Your comments are always so generous.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 21, 2020:

Thank you for your kind comments Harish and for visiting.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 21, 2020:

Lovely to see you Verlie and I appreciate your kind comments.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 21, 2020:

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem Liz. Thank you for your comments which are always so insightful.

Lorna Lamon (author) on January 21, 2020:

Thank you Manatita, your comments are always appreciated.

Lorna from USA on January 21, 2020:

Hi Lorna, you are very gifted in writing poetry. I would love to be like you! What a great imagination you have. Thank you for sharing!

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on January 21, 2020:

Lorna,

Your poetry is exquisite.

I love this part, "Constantly striving to improve that rough draft

In the hope we will become our final copy"

Thanks for sharing.

Harish Mamgain from New Delhi , India on January 21, 2020:

A fantastic and beautiful poem, soothing our mind while reading !

Verlie Burroughs from Canada on January 21, 2020:

Beautiful elegant verse Lorna.

Liz Westwood from UK on January 21, 2020:

This is a deep and meaningful piece of poetry, using carefully chosen words to take us to new heights of imagination.

manatita44 from london on January 21, 2020:

Another exquisire piece, Lorna. Wsy to go!