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The World's Greatest Symphony (Simile), a Poem

John has been writing poetry since his school days. He was awarded "Poet of the Year 2014" Hubby Awards and has had two poems become songs.

Beautiful birds glide with ease across the azure sky

Beautiful birds glide with ease across the azure sky

The World's Greatest Symphony

Beautiful birds glide with ease

across the azure sky,

like a school of swimming fish

in a sea of air on high.


While butterflies flutter their delicate wings,

like flickering candle flames

dancing to a gentle breeze

through an open window pane.


A bullfrog choir sings joyfully

to greet the coming day,

more like the forty baritones

than the four tenors, but hey!

psychedelic kaleidoscope of clashing colors

psychedelic kaleidoscope of clashing colors

Pretty blooms within my garden

open and close

like some psychedelic kaleidoscope

of clashing colors

That somehow compliment each other.


I gaze in wonder at life that surrounds me,

how an intelligent creator got everything

just so perfect,

like a celebrated conductor

directing the world's greatest symphony.


The Platypus

A platypus

Lives in our dam.

What I say is true,

Yes Mam!


With its duck like bill

And beaver's tail,

Kangaroo's pouch,

And spurs sharp as nails.


It has webbed feet

And waterproof fur.

With "pus" in it's name

It may even purr.


That may be it,

Unless there is more.

A platypus is

A live metaphor.

a platypus lives in our dam

a platypus lives in our dam

Poet's Note

This poem just sprang from a moment of silliness and experimentation. I was tossing around some words and phrases, playing with metaphors, similes etc. and using nature as a theme, and this is the result.

I added the poem "The Platypus" as an afterthought. I have always thought of this creature as a bit of a living metaphor so I wrote this and included it (It also helped add to the word count.)

It won't add greatly to the world of poetry but I had a bit of fun writing it so thought I'd publish it here and hope someone enjoys "The World's Greatest Symphony (Simile.)"

© 2018 John Hansen

Comments

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on February 14, 2020:

John,

No. I cannot say I have heard of platypus.

I can see in pictures that he is a very odd looking creature.

Maybe one day I will make it to Australia.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on February 14, 2020:

Thank you Brenda. Really, never heard of a platypus? Come visit Australia.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on February 14, 2020:

John,

The world's greatest symphony is really good. I can picture it in detail.

Platypus is a fun one. Though I must admit I had not heard of this creature before now.

Great write.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on January 17, 2019:

Thank you, Lawrence. Every creature and plant plays its own special part in God's symphony.

Lawrence Hebb from Hamilton, New Zealand on January 17, 2019:

John.

Loved both poems, and they both add vital notes to that great Symphony.

Thank you.

Lawrence

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 27, 2018:

Thank you so much MsDora. I am glad you felt these poems came to life..

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on December 27, 2018:

Both poems are alive with visual images and accompanying sounds. Excellent poetry!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 26, 2018:

Thank you Devika, as always.

Devika Primic on December 26, 2018:

Share new experiences in a poem a great way to learn from these experiences.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 24, 2018:

Thank you Clive, glad you appreciated it.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 24, 2018:

Thank you Clive, glad you appreciated it.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 24, 2018:

Thank you Clive, glad you appreciated it.

Clive Williams from Jamaica on December 24, 2018:

Beautiful Music Jodah. Well played orchestra.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Thank you PoetikallyAnointed. Yes i just had fun writing this. We need to be joyful at this time of year.

PoetikalyAnointed on December 23, 2018:

I enjoyed both poems! It's always fun to put the seriousness on the shelf and just be. You just never know what amazing creation will stem from it.

The pictures of the flowers and birds are just Beautiful! Nice pic of the platypus too...very cute piece.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Thanks Eric, yes the platypus has the best of everything, venomous spurs included. I hope it was a murder of crows you saw, and hope Gabe enjoys this. Cheers.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Thank you ver much Gypsy. Thanks for reading and enjoying. I also wish you a Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

Gypsy Rose Lee from Daytona Beach, Florida on December 23, 2018:

Absolutely delightful. Really enjoyed your poems. Hope you and yours have a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Thank you Rinita, glad I captured similies in the first poem. Yes, platypi are endemic to Australia. Amazing animals.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

MizB, thank you for that wonderful comment. We do have some wonderful and unique animals.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Alyssa, it is interesting to know you name all the wildlife. The platypus we call Barry...lol.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Thanks Liz. Much appreciated.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Yes Lori, i know it is weird living in Australia but I am used to it lol. Thanks for reading.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Really manatita, you never heard of a platypus? I am glad you enjoyed this and thanks for the kind comment.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

So glad you enjoyed this Linda. Yes, it seems platypus poems are not very common lol. Heaven must be amazing.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Hi brother Sean. I have to read your bipolar poem. I am sure you did a fine job. Thank you for your kind comment though. Have a great Christmas.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 23, 2018:

Thank you Paul. It was a bit of a fun write.

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on December 23, 2018:

Very cool my friend. My son and I freaked out about the venomous Platypus.

He will like this when gets up.

You just flow with your poetry which also connected to the river of the Platypus.

We saw a murder on Friday that we could not count.

Rinita Sen on December 23, 2018:

There's something about similes that fills the heart, and your 1st poem achieves that as well as exceeds. Similies always remind me of 'Annie's Song' by Denver. Platypus was a fun read, I've never actually seen the animal, but I believe it is endemic to Australia.

Doris James MizBejabbers from Beautiful South on December 22, 2018:

John, I enjoyed you lovely poem about the world symphony. It reminded me of this afternoon as I was touring my brother's greenhouse and looking at his beautiful plants as he was fussing unappreciatively about a lovely little bird flying around in it. (Not like the flock of chickens that reside in mine.)

The platypus both the poem and the animal are cute. Today I was watching a show out of Australia, which I watch every Saturday. They had the cutest orphaned baby echidna the vets were trying to save. Don't you just love all the unusual little animals? As an animal lover, I find your Australian animals very enticing, like your poetry.

Alyssa from Ohio on December 22, 2018:

This is a beautiful poem! I love the bonus one about the platypus! Did you name it? I ask because we name all of our wildlife friends in the backyard. We have a family of groundhogs, all named 'Percy,' bunnies named 'Peter,' and 'Josephine,'and a mama dove named, 'Dana,' just to name a few. We look forward to our hummingbirds every year and they also get names. haha!

Liz Westwood from UK on December 22, 2018:

Two great poems and good illustrations too.

Lori Colbo from Pacific Northwest on December 22, 2018:

I thought it odd at first that you wrote about spring, then a platypus. Then I remembered you live in Austrailia. I loved both poems and in this yucky winter weather, it was kind of nice to hear what will come in a few more months. Merry Christmas.

manatita44 from london on December 22, 2018:

The birds have a symphony all right and the music is 'cool'. Platypus? never heard of them. I Like the way you combined sea and sky in your first stanza. Exquisite touch! Merry Christmas, Bro.

Linda Lum from Washington State, USA on December 22, 2018:

This is a first I am sure--a poem about a platypus. I love it. And I love your reflection on the beauty of the world around us. If we can behold such wonder here, what will Heaven be like?

May you have a wonderful, blessed Christmas.

Ioannis Arvanitis from Greece, Almyros on December 22, 2018:

Ok, my brother, now you made me feel embarrassed for my experimentation of publishing my bipolar poem! Lol! You reminded me that I am not a poet. You are a poet my friend! An excellent one! Thank you for sharing.

I wish you the best Christmas ever!

Sean

Paul Neglia from Poughkeepsie, NY USA on December 22, 2018:

Lovely piece John. Great imagery explaining the wonder that is nature. And i loved the clever platypus poem as well. Nice work my friend

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 22, 2018:

Thank you Chitrangada. I am glad you enjoyed this. I wait you and your family a happy holidays too.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on December 22, 2018:

Nice poem and I always believe that the Nature is the ultimate inspiration. Enjoyed your poems.

Thanks for sharing, happy weekend and happy holidays!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 22, 2018:

Elijah, I am glad I offered up a new perspective. Thanks for reading, glad you found this an interesting and funny read.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 22, 2018:

Yes, Bill. God was saying “Well, if you don’t believe me take a look at this!” Thanks for reading as always, and you have a great holiday season too.

Elijah A Alexander Jr from Washington DC on December 22, 2018:

Indeed the world is a well orchestrated symphony seen by the eyes, heard by our ears, smelt by our noses, tasted in our mouths and we would feel if we lived nude. I had never thought of it but you did make a valid point. As for the platypus, what can I say? it's a symphony of itself.

Both humorous and interesting, thanks.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on December 22, 2018:

The platypus is proof positive that God has a sense of humor. :) Loved the symphony....so many wonders surround us, my friend.

Merry Christmas, Happy Holidays, to you!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 22, 2018:

Haha Kim, I wish you the same my friend. Thank you for stopping by.

ocfireflies from North Carolina on December 22, 2018:

Dear John,

Beautiful words and images.

Wishing you a symphonic day filled with kaleidoscopic images.

Smiles.

Blessings Always,

Kim

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 22, 2018:

Thank you very much Li-Jen. To me, nature will always come first. Many man made things are just copying what occurs naturally in nature anyway.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 22, 2018:

I totally agree, Paul. Everything falls into place too well to be just a random occurrence. The platypus is a good example. Thank you for reading and commenting.

Li-Jen Hew on December 22, 2018:

Hey Jodah. You managed to blend nature together with man made items like candle and kaleidoscope. It shows that nature comes first and nature falls into place naturally without needing modifications especially the clashing colors.It's a relief to see your metaphor come to life! Thanks for sharing.

Ryan Paul S Balagtas from Philippines on December 22, 2018:

The patterns and codes in nature all scream that there is a Creator. The egg laying mammal Playtpus...its complexity shows that a great God designed it and did not just jumped out of a primodial soup... We need not to look at the stars to see God just nature....Thanks for the nice imagery of the poem...

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on December 21, 2018:

Thank you, Flourish. Well, now you have!

FlourishAnyway from USA on December 21, 2018:

I’ve never seen a platypus and never read a poem about one, that’s for sure. I enjoy nature poetry and thus these.