Dean Traylor is a freelance writer and teacher who writes about various subjects, including education and creative writing.
The Tired Sun
The tired sun
wants to rest
in the cool, cool Pacific.
But the sun,
an artist at heart,
creates one more masterpiece.
It paints the white clouds orange
and lays out a path of fire
on the cool, cool Pacific.
The intensity of the colors,
the majesty of life,
unfolds on this final canvas.
the giant sinks in the west,
beyond the horizon,
with the night quickly following
to prepare the canvas
for the stars and moon.
Its job is done.
Its day is done.
But, it leaves a small reminder;
the sky in the west glows
and slowly fades
as the tired sun exits the sky
the cool, cool Pacific.
First Draft 1982
What Do Saturday Morning Cartoon Characters and Poetry Have in Common?
Personification is more of a literary device than a genre of poetry. It belongs under the umbrella of figurative speech. However, there are numerous poems composed in this device.
By definition, personification is a descriptive use of words and language in which animals and inanimate objects take on human-like qualities. In most cases, it is used to convey a description or give a non-human object some personality. Another definition given by Babette Deutch in her influential book Poetry Handbook: A Dictionary of Terms, states that “the characters in an allegory are apt to be personifications, or abstract vices and virtues represented as persons.”
Most often, cartoon characters such as Bugs Bunny, Mickey Mouse or SpongeBob Squarepants can be considered a form of direct personification. However, this form of allegory can be much more complex. In poetry, it’s usually a mundane object that is described in figurative language. In his poem about fog, Carl Sandburg uses comparisons of a cat’s paw to describe the fog coming over a hill. In the poem, "The Tired Sun", personification is used as part of an extended metaphor in which the sun is compared to an artist, a giant, and a tired person.
While personification is a literary device that can be found in nearly every form of writing (including non-fiction or essays), the device is often heightened in a poem. In fact, many poems can be labeled “personified poem,” for they will be comprised entirely of personifications.
© 2012 Dean Traylor
BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on October 31, 2020:
This poem explains the sun quite well.
The one from your student is definitely the inspiration.
I never quite thought of the sun as being tired, but I guess it has done a days work.
Rhodora from Dubai UAE on October 31, 2020:
Prithviraj Shirole from India on August 28, 2020:
Wonderful poem on the artist sun. Nice information on personification type of poetry. Enjoyed reading the poem and the words of wisdom on the poetry type.
Sagacious Guy on March 27, 2020:
A great craft. Kudos!
Dean Traylor (author) from Southern California/Spokane, Washington (long story) on September 01, 2019:
added to the poem: The first draft....from 6th grade class back in 1982.
qwer on October 11, 2015:
Victoria Lynn from Arkansas, USA on July 17, 2012:
Nice poem. There's such a neat contrast between the sun and the "cool, cool Pacific." Nice touch to end with an explanation, too. Great job. Many votes!
Jim Higgins from Eugene, Oregon on July 17, 2012:
Great poem! I ran across the L A River sequence Hubhopping, wanted to read more. This is excellent. (I lived in Orange County years ago)
rebekahELLE from Tampa Bay on July 15, 2012:
I love this poem. Beautiful imagery and personification. The image also fits the poem perfectly. It's interesting to think of the sun as being tired.
You captured it well.