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The Quiet in the Courtroom Was Loud

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The Justice system shouldn't give chase,

it was an open and closed case,

but the air in that courtroom was antagonizing,

and the wait for the verdict was agonizing,

the quiet in the courtroom was loud,

it carried out into the hallway

like a smoke cloud,

and it had nothing to say,

no news, a quiet riot,

the only shouting came from the jury room upstairs,

as the family stares,

12 jurors, emotion flares,

some really care,

fair was fair,

and all the news media was there,

waiting to spread their share,

the waiting burns,

and the attorney could offer a plea

before the jury returns,

but what kind of plea?

The murderer was over eighty years old,

truth be told,

and without shedding a tear,

he'd be dead within a year,

So either way, there would be no punishment,

Guilty, he goes to prison,

clothes on his back, shoes on his feet,

Not Guilty, he goes back out on the street,

the situation could make anyone cry,

so why the court case,

why would anyone testify,

the murderer knew his place,

needles and pins,

if he loses he wins,

and if he wins, he wins...


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© 2018 Frank Atanacio

Comments

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on July 19, 2018:

it's good to see you and I am so sorry for your loss... chin up I'm sure she'd want you to share your talents.. miss ya...:(

Joanna Chandler from On Planet Earth on July 19, 2018:

Hiiii Frank, it has been a few years since i last read any of your stuff. This was Good!!! I hope all is well with you and your family....I literally lost my passion for writing after my granny passed away...That really hit me a hard blow.

I will always love reading, and writing...i am really trying to swing back to my old love "poetry". An awesome day to you!

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on June 11, 2018:

thanks Chris for stopping by I'll see you on your page.. :) have a good week my friend

Chris Mills from Traverse City, MI on June 10, 2018:

Ahh, the secret to the perfect crime. Wait until you are 80 years old. If you lose, you win. If you win, you win. Seriously, this shows how much pressure there is on some juries. I've never had the pleasure...yet.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 30, 2018:

Shyron, very good to see you..:)

Shyron E Shenko from Texas on May 29, 2018:

Frank, fantastic description I felt like I was sitting in quiet loud

shouting at silent crowd.

I love this.

Blessings my friend.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 19, 2018:

Of course I agree :) and thanks for stopping by Peggy Woods...:)

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on May 19, 2018:

Interesting tale told by you in poetic form. That must have been quite a fracas in that jury room!

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 18, 2018:

thank you Eric

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on May 17, 2018:

I surely do hope you take it in stride. I just came back for a read. Some stuff is worth taking another look at. Thanks.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 17, 2018:

thank you so much Missy.. bless you girl

Missy Smith from Florida on May 17, 2018:

Yes, if he loses he wins, and if he wins he wins. It seems like a pointless argument for all; lawyers, jurors, victims, and families of the victims. Does the media even get a headline story out of it? Maybe?

This was a great poem, Frank. You penned it like poetry, but it was still like reading one of your flash fictions in a way. The content suited your genre. Bravo!

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 14, 2018:

thank you so much Phyllis it is good to see you again. bless you

Phyllis Doyle Burns from High desert of Nevada. on May 14, 2018:

Great poem, Frank. Nicely penned with good phrasing. I enjoyed reading it. Take care. ((hugs))

Robert Sacchi on May 13, 2018:

You're welcome.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 13, 2018:

thank you so much Robert

Robert Sacchi on May 13, 2018:

Impressive how you describe a court room during jury deliberation. You told the story in a few words. This shows how great poetry can be for word economy.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 13, 2018:

Genna Thank you and Happy Mother's day to you and the mom's i your life...:)

Genna East from Massachusetts, USA on May 13, 2018:

Wow, Frank...you've captured the sounds of silence in the courtroom of justice perfectly. Well done! :-)

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 13, 2018:

hey thanks Sean.. two times under spam... approved one of the comments.. cool? thanks for stopping by..:)

Ioannis Arvanitis from Greece, Almyros on May 12, 2018:

This is talent, my friend Frank! With real talent and a little bit of sarcasm, you have made something that reminds me Monty Pythons, if you know them!

Excellent work, bravo!

Sean

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 12, 2018:

Thank you Dora and Happy mother's day..:)

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on May 12, 2018:

True, Frank. It's like the win period has expired. No one could it express it better than you did here.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 11, 2018:

LOL@ Jodah.. you're the best and thank you Peg Cole for visiting my poem...:)

Peg Cole from Northeast of Dallas, Texas on May 11, 2018:

Thought provoking prose from you, Frank. Wondering how prison life would be for an eighty-year old. Perhaps better than life on the streets.

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on May 10, 2018:

haha Frank, just call me Judge Jodah.......step aside Judy.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 10, 2018:

thanks Bill for stopping by...:)

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on May 10, 2018:

Yep, I don't see a bad outcome in this case. :) Great fun and great read.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 10, 2018:

I guess you're right.. let me return them....

Li-Jen Hew on May 10, 2018:

Hahaha....yes Frank. It's not my fault if you get captured for stealing shoes. :)

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 10, 2018:

Now I'm stealing shoes? Li-Jen I thought we were cool :) LOL....

Li-Jen Hew on May 10, 2018:

What I like about your poem is that you maintain your style, it paints a vivid picture and it shows real events. Also...you are clever at putting yourself in another's shoes. :)

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 10, 2018:

Jodah.. yeah figures you'd bring your smug face around with your judgee attitude.. okay we all can't be you so get off my back! LOL kidding bro thanks for the visit... honestly

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 10, 2018:

Thanks manatita for laughing at my poem..:) bless you bro...

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 10, 2018:

Yves.. thanks for giving my poetry a look over... so many people are writing it so well... thought I'd try it again..:)

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 10, 2018:

Flourish thank you for reading my poetry,,:)

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 10, 2018:

thank you for coming clean Li-Jen..:)

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on May 10, 2018:

An excellent courtroom drama portrayed well through your poetic pen, Frank. Yes, when you are at the end of your life and know it, you really have nothing to lose do you? Unless you care how history records what you did.

manatita44 from london on May 09, 2018:

Ha ha Frank. I like it. I really like it! A poetical piece of Flash. 'Sweet' title. Awesome!

Yves on May 09, 2018:

I always feel badly for really old guys who have to spend their last years in prison, until I learn what they did...and even then.. Nevertheless, I am not sorry for Cosby if it comes to that for him. However, your point is well taken. Either way, the end result is the same, although it is harsher to die in prison. Also, I wonder if you had a specific man in mind for this poem.

FYI: I see some new articles by you, but I haven't seen new notices in my inbox. How odd. Anyway, glad I checked.

FlourishAnyway from USA on May 09, 2018:

You make me want to know more about what this guy did exactly (to whom and why). You are a fine writer my friend.

Li-Jen Hew on May 09, 2018:

Actually I don't know if someone convinced you but if I did or if I did help in any way, I'm glad I did. :) Today and tomorrow are public holidays because the Opposition party has won the election in Malaysia! Your poem suits the historic victory as well.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 09, 2018:

thanks Eric for sharing your story..:)

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on May 09, 2018:

1987 a young man stood ready to defend the 65 year old woman accused of murder in the first degree. First order of business was to get that damned death penalty/capital case off the table. Hard fought but successful. Then the DA shot for excluding Mexican and Indian of the Jury. A wheeler motion closed that episode.

Guilty or not guilty the young man knew he was guilty of so much. A verdict on 2nd degree manslaughter. Only 5 years. But she did it.

I promise you the silence spoke volumes.

Thanks for bringing me back decades.

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 09, 2018:

and I thank you for that.. hey have a good work week Li-Jen..:)

Li-Jen Hew on May 09, 2018:

Haha...thanks! You are funny! ...I said ho, ho because you did it! You finally did a poem after somebody convinced you.....

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 09, 2018:

LOL, what ever I call you suits you..:) and you have a great sense of humor... Cry-Baby Santa....et al

Li-Jen Hew on May 09, 2018:

Hahaha Frank...you really can't decide what to call me....

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 09, 2018:

Ann.. bless you but your April Showcase was amazing.. that's why I waited until May...:)

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 09, 2018:

Too Late Li-Jen!!!!! kidding Cry-Baby....:)

Ann Carr from SW England on May 09, 2018:

It wasn't flattery; I really think it's a great poem. You are just as good as other poets here. I've just got a thing for poetry at the moment but it's not my forte. So don't be so modest. Write some more to entertain us!

Ann

Li-Jen Hew on May 09, 2018:

Frank it's GOOD! Your poem is GOOD! :) lol Santa! X)

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 09, 2018:

Thank you Ann for saying great poem.. not that it suits me like some other people suggested.. I tried poetry.. but it fades in comparison to real poets.. and folks like you.. that know it all Jodah.. oh yeah and Manatita...et al.. thanks for just looking this one over..:) Frank

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 09, 2018:

Li-Jen.. who are you? Santa Clause.. what's this ho, ho, ho..:) I figure I'll give poetry another shot.. ur right it has been I think over four years... just couldn't keep up with folks like you, Jodah, Audrey.. Ann Carr and so many others who just make it look easy.. I know you're being kind in telling me it's good...oh wait, you didn't say it was good.. you said it suits me.. LOL thanks for the visit... Santa Clause

Frank Atanacio (author) from Shelton on May 09, 2018:

thanks Clive for stopping by..:)

Ann Carr from SW England on May 09, 2018:

Great poem. Love the rhythm. What a dilemma! There is no justice sometimes, for those who suffer from a loved one being murdered. And silence can be very loud!

I don't remember reading any poetry from you; you're good at it and, as Li-Jen says, your style is there. Well done! I want to see some more.

Ann

Li-Jen Hew on May 09, 2018:

Hey Frank. Proud of you ho ho...you haven't written a poem in a long time...The poem suits you as I can see that the writing style is yours. Thank you tor sharing. :)

Clive Williams from Jamaica on May 09, 2018:

You are guilty as charged frank for this nice piece here.