The Last Captain (in Response to the Rhyming Words Challenge by Chris Mills)

Updated on June 16, 2018
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Rinita is a creative writer, with focus on poetry. She delves into several forms including Haiku/Senryu, Sonnets, Free Verse, and Prose.

Background

A fellow hubber Ann's response took me to the original challenge by Chris.

The challenge was about using the following words in a poem that have no apparent rhyming words, and finding the closest words that rhyme with them.

  • silver
  • purple
  • month
  • ninth
  • pint
  • wolf
  • opus
  • dangerous
  • marathon
  • discombobulate

Whenever I hear the word silver, it reminds me not of the shiny metal, but of the character Long John Silver, from the classic "Treasure Island". I always had a wish to offer a tribute in my own way to Stevenson's most popular work, and now I got my chance, thanks to this challenge.

The Pirate Ship
The Pirate Ship | Source

The Poem

His name was Long John Silver

As the dawn turned to dusk

His blabber became glibber


On the grill, he was intense

A deceived chop, with sauce purple

Beets he placed instead of meat

Made the crew’s mouths gurgle


They sailed on the fourth month

Anchored on the ninth

At the island hundred-and-oneth

The treasure may not bind


John’s mean men went deep

From the forest howled a wolf

Gripping his wooden leg

John made a maddening swoop


Out came hares and boars

The pirates danced, fine dined

Barrels of rum de-boarded

All got more than a pint


No treasure and barrels empty

John’s crew set sail

Battling through tides dangerous

The ambience on board mutinous


It all happened at midnight

Rebel loose, the men broke

John’s wooden leg askew


A new voyage, a new marathon

Began with the new dawn

A new captain to be named

A new chef to lay the fire


The story narrated by my niece

Got my mind to discombobulate

Fierce drama, in a little mind

Fire in a glass, did encapsulate


I sit here, by my warm hearth

Dedicating a piece of the opus

To the last of the bold pirates

John, the captain ferocious


© 2018 Rinita Sen

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    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      7 weeks ago

      Thank you, Doris. Happy you liked the pirate's tale. Indeed, this was a difficult challenge.

    • MizBejabbers profile image

      Doris James-MizBejabbers 

      7 weeks ago from Beautiful South

      It's a neat pirate's tale with words that don't rhyme. Some people just got it. I'm not up to this one.

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you, Chris. This was a difficult but enjoyable challenge. Happy you were interested in my pirate's tale.

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      Chris Mills 

      5 months ago from Hartford, CT

      Well, I read this a long time ago and put the link with the other responses, but I failed to comment here. Well done, Rinita. Thank you for offering this fine pirate's tale in the form of a poem as a response to my challenge.

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you, Peg. Glad you were entertained. Yes, your take around the beets is sure funny, and makes perfect sense!

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      Peg Cole 

      5 months ago from Dallas, Texas

      Great job in putting those difficult to rhyme words to use in such an entertaining way. Those pirates didn't like beets. I agree. That would be grounds for mutiny.

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you, Frank. Glad you liked my contribution.

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      Frank Atanacio 

      5 months ago from Shelton

      a very promising result to the challenge.. awesome :)

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you, manatita. Glad you agree!

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      manatita44 

      5 months ago from london

      Nice attempt and yes, Robert Louis Stevenson was cool!

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you, John. I am glad this was enjoyable. Thank you again for visiting my contribution.

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      John Hansen 

      5 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Rinita, I always enjoy a good pirate tale and Treasure Island was one of my early favourites. This was a good response to the challenge and very enjoyable.

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you for visiting, Li-Jen. Yes, I agree the 'Pirates of the Caribbean' cast and crew gave the audience some very memorable pirate stories.

    • Li-Jen Hew profile image

      Li-Jen Hew 

      5 months ago

      Hey Rinita, I enjoyed your poem! Reminds me of the drunken Jack Sparrow acted by Johnny Depp. The "blabber became gibber", "leg askew" ,"captain ferocious", "island hundred-and-oneth" are my favourite lines. Thanks for sharing! :)

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you, Ann for for visiting my response, and of course, you are very welcome for the link!

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      Ann Carr 

      5 months ago from SW England

      Very good, Rinita! This is fun; a great response to the challenge and a great tribute to Treasure Island.

      Thanks for linking to me as well, that's kind of you.

      Ann

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you, Verlie! This challenge was brain-racking, and so much fun! Glad it worked out.

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      Verlie Burroughs 

      5 months ago from Canada

      Perfect Rinita, what a wonderful sea shanty. Your rhymes are impeccable...Kudos!

    • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

      Rinita Sen 

      5 months ago

      Thank you, mactavers. I am glad it was amusing.

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      mactavers 

      5 months ago

      You met the challenge in a most amusing way.

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