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The Innoncent Gunned Down at Walmart "Abecedarian" a Challenge Issued by Ann Carr

I am a writer of poetry and fiction. I especially love flash fiction. My name is Ruby, and I live in Southern Illinois. I am a retired R.N.

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What must be done to stop this carnage?

Aggressive

Behaviors

Convoluted

Defective

Emotions

Formulating

Gunshots

Hurling

Into

Juveniles

Killing

Little

Memories

Never

Opened

Preventing

Quest

Release

Stifled

Undisclosed

Venting

Wordless

Xfactor

Youth

Zapped






Comments

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on February 21, 2020:

Hi Peggy, this type of poetry is rather difficult to do, but I had fun writing it. Yes, I agree this type of carnage should never happen anywhere in the world. Thanks again. I appreciate you.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on February 21, 2020:

Such a horrific incident which seems to be happening all too often these days. Such acts of carnage only used to occur in wars, not WalMarts. You did a great job with this type of poem.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on January 22, 2020:

Brenda, so glad you thought my words were magical. It was a sad situation, but fun to write. I think I might do another one on this Trump sham.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on January 21, 2020:

Ruby,

I found it!

This is a great write. The words used here convey the messsge vividly.

Sad situation, but your words are magical.

Thanks for helping me find it.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 31, 2019:

Hello Mar. The z was the most difficult, yet zapped is exactly what the shooter did to innocent families and children. Will we ever be a civilized nation again? It is so good to see you. I hope you had a restful time away from writing. Love ya..Hugs.

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on August 30, 2019:

Zapped - what a fitting ending to this senseless tragedy.

Thank you for daring to reflect on these unspeakable acts of hatred, dear Ruby

Sending you all my love and lots of hugs, mar.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 29, 2019:

I agree Mark. Thanks for coming by.

Mark Tulin from Ventura, California on August 28, 2019:

No matter how many adjectives one tries to describe something like this, Ruby, it is wordless and senseless.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 17, 2019:

Hello Mike, so good to see you back in cyberspace. I think, when this happens, we all are appalled, then we go on about our lives until it happens again. I can't imagine what it will be in fifty years? This is not my kind of poetry. I would rather rhyme. Thank you. I hope you are well and on the road to recovery. Hugs

mckbirdbks from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas on August 16, 2019:

Hello Ruby - I am so late. You have expressed your feelings well. Senseless is right. Seems we bring new levels to our collective frustrations. Hugs

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 11, 2019:

Hello William, thank you for praise of this offering. It is a new way, the abc poetry. It was a challenge and difficult, but I enjoyed the process.

William Kovacic from Pleasant Gap, PA on August 11, 2019:

Such a shame about the situation, Ruby, but you did a wonderful job of commemorating it. It takes a special talent to do what you did here.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 09, 2019:

Hello Rinita, so nice to see you. I agree, something must be done to stop these horrible killings. I wish Walmart would stop selling guns in all stores. I read that they are the number one sellers because they sell cheaper. Thank you for your welcome comment.

Rinita Sen on August 09, 2019:

Heart-wrenching poem, Ruby. My heart goes out to the innocent victims of this and all other mindless attacks all over the world. Every time something like this happens, it opens up several questions, with answers that are possibly out there, but our authorities refuse to acknowledge them. It is more than time to stop the hatred.

Excellent use of the form. The words were chosen carefully to emphasize the severity of the situation.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 08, 2019:

Hello Dana. Thank you for the nice comment...

Dana Tate from LOS ANGELES on August 08, 2019:

Hi Ruby

You did a nice job on this challenge.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 07, 2019:

Hello Larry. Nice to meet you. Thank you..

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 07, 2019:

Hello Pamela, happy you approve this type of poetry. Thank you much.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 07, 2019:

Thanks Peg, so happy you liked this piece. I changed it so many times, I wasn't sure the words did this tragedy justice.

Larry Slawson from North Carolina on August 07, 2019:

Great work. Thank you for sharing.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 07, 2019:

Shauna, I agree 100%. Trump keeps on talking about illegal immigrants, his followers yell " Shoot them " I'm afraid as long as he's in office there will be more. Thanks for coming.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 07, 2019:

Thank you John. This type of poetry is difficult. Happy you approved.

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on August 07, 2019:

This seems like a fitting poem for these times and you did a wonderful job with the Abecedarian challenge, Ruby.

Peg Cole from Northeast of Dallas, Texas on August 07, 2019:

Well done! That is difficult to do with the alphabet. Yet your poem says it all from A to Z.

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on August 07, 2019:

Ruby, you did a nice job of highlighting despair and the loss of life in your abecedarian poem.

I don't think mental illness is entirely to blame. When leaders, who are supposed to be role models, show and speak blatant prejudice, there are sure to be repercussions.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 07, 2019:

Hello Lorna, Thank you for reading and commenting. It truly is an atrocity.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on August 07, 2019:

Bill, like you, I am at a loss. I guess all we can do is write about it and possibly open more facilities to house the mentally ill. Thank you...

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on August 07, 2019:

I am appalled by this tragic event. Your abecedarian poem highlights it well Ruby. Good job.

Lorna Lamon on August 07, 2019:

Your words sum up the horrors of this atrocity.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on August 07, 2019:

This is the new cross all of society must bear, and I'm afraid I don't have a simple solution to it all. Hopefully we will all be able to find out way out of this darkness....your poem is haunting, my friend. Well done!