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Tears - Poems (In Response to Brenda's Word Prompt "Freedom")

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Rinita is a creative writer, with focus on poetry. She delves into several forms including Haiku/Senryu, Sonnets, Free Verse, and Prose.

Crying in the Rain

Crying in the Rain

About the Poems

This is the first time I have tried to participate in one of Brenda's weekly word prompt challenges. So, I hope I've done it right.

The word was 'freedom'.

In the first poem, I chose a style similar to nursery rhymes to depict how tears are necessary to let our emotions flow freely. A lot of people hold back their tears thinking that they're brave in doing so. But such a hiding game just keeps stewing the emotions within resulting in a lot of chaos inside the mind.

The second poem is a rictameter (a style with increasing and decreasing syllable count, my favorite style). It's about someone who has lost way too much to even bother shedding tears anymore. It may even represent someone who has left the mortal world to be 'free' at last of all emotions.


Little Tear

Glisten, glisten little tear

Flow away, have no fear

For you’re unbound, unsouled

Giving joy is oh so near!


Hiding behind virtuous pain

You’re nowhere without a gain

Flow to strength, glance outward

Relieve the emotions with some rain


You’re sorrow, you’re joy

You’re anguish, you’re love

A streaming you has no limit

You bring down the heaven above


So, glisten, glisten, little tear

A single drop can be so dear

Free the chained feelings within

Let me sleep for a whole year

Teardrop

Teardrop

On boneless cheeks

Why are you flowing now?

When the feelings have dried within

Forgiving souls have relentlessly cried

Only to make the afterworld

Free of all bitter weeds

Free of the last

Teardrop

© 2021 Rinita Sen

Comments

Teodora Gheorghe on September 22, 2021:

"You bring down the heaven above" - my favorite line!

Rinita Sen (author) on September 22, 2021:

Thanks a lot for reading Misbah. I'm humbled that you enjoyed my poems. Great to connect with you as well.

Misbah Sheikh from The World of Poets on September 21, 2021:

Hi Rinita, these poems are wonderful. I enjoyed reading both of them. This is an excellent response to Brenda's prompt, "Freedom." Asking tears to fall because they are soulless and free is a great creative way to use this prompt. I really enjoyed it. It's great to connect with you here.

Blessings to you, my friend.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 21, 2021:

I like how you mentioned the purpose of flowing, Li-Jen. You're so right that it gives purpose to the tear.

Glad you thought the rictameter fits the theme. Yes I wanted to show that when we move on to the divine sphere all tears stop. Stay well friend.

Li-Jen Hew on September 20, 2021:

Hi Rinita. I like how the emphasis on "flow" brings out the rain effect like encouraging the tears to flow and not suppress the feelings. It brings attention to the title Little Tear. Grow bigger Little Tear! The rictameter style for the second poem fits the theme as if to show that the crying has stopped in the last line.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 11, 2021:

Thank you manatita. I knew the last piece would find it's way to you. I'm beginning my own spiritual journey and beginning to understand the true meaning of freedom. Although I obviously have a million years to go before I get there, but I'm trying nonetheless. Thanks again for reading. And I'm also happy to be posting here again.

manatita44 from london on September 11, 2021:

Interesting, both pieces. They evoke deeper thoughts and feelings. Perhaps the freedom in the last piece is more obvious to me, but hey, you came. I am happy to see you writing again. Whatever your offering, it is still useful, nor 'right' or 'wrong.' here. Thank you!

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

Sorry that delicious was a typo.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

You absolutely delicious did. See you.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on September 10, 2021:

Your welcome.

I hope I got them right.

We'll see you next time.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

Thank you for the welcome Brenda and for explaining the poems so well. I hope to participate in future prompts too. Thanks again.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on September 10, 2021:

Rinita

Welcome!

I am glad you decided to join us with these word prompts.

There is no right or wrong way here. Just have fun & enjoy being creative.

In your introduction you describe a little bit about the style of each one of your poems.

The first one is like a nursery rhyme showing us a lot of people hold back their tears believing it is a sign of bravery.

The second one is a rictameter telling us about someone who no longer sheds tears.

Your poem, "Little Tear" shows us how to let ourselves cry.

Each glistening tear helps us shed the pain we are hiding inside ourselves.

Joy & happiness is waiting for us around the corner.

Your poem, "Teardrop" shows us how others suddenly feel sad & begin to cry after it is already too late.

When there are no more feelings. No tears to shed.

The bitterness & pain is finally relieved in the after world.

These poems are absolutely fantastic!

The first one shows us there is always hope for joy is around the next corner.

While the second one is full of sadness as one can no longer shed any tears.

The torment in life has broken him.

I will post a link in the word prompt article.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

Thank you Chitrangada. Glad you liked the poems and the message. Yes, rictameter is an interesting style and my favorite. I've done many of them and find solace in this style. Thanks again for reading.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on September 10, 2021:

Hello Rinita!

An excellent and thoughtful response to the word prompt, Freedom. I liked both the poems, the message, and the rhymes. I wasn’t aware of the rictameter style, earlier.

Well done and well crafted. Thank you for sharing!

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

Thank you Umesh. Happy to see you here.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

Thank you Pamela. Teardrops is special to me as well. Glad you visited today.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

Thanks for reading Ravi. I'm glad you enjoyed the rhyming. And it's good to know that it fits well with the prompt.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on September 10, 2021:

Nicely composed.

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on September 10, 2021:

I really like your poems, Rinnita. I especially liked "Teardrops". This is a nice response to Brenda's poem.

Ravi Rajan from Mumbai on September 10, 2021:

Nice poems Rinita.The rhyming fits in nicely and the poems do good justice to Brenda's wonderful prompt on freedom. Thanks for sharing.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

Thank you for reading, Mithun.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

Thank you for reading, Dora. I'm glad that I was able to send the message across.

Rinita Sen (author) on September 10, 2021:

John, Twinkle twinkle little star is exactly what the rhythm was based upon. You are always spot on with your comments. Glad you liked the rictameter. It's closer to my heart. Thanks for reading.

Mithun Das from India, Malda on September 10, 2021:

Nice poems, Rinita

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on September 10, 2021:

Both poems send messages of freedom, now and afterwards. Good work!

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on September 10, 2021:

I love both poems, Rinita. The first reminding of “Twinkle Twinkle Little Star” and the rictameter excellently done. A very good response to Brenda’s prompt.

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