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Sunshine Burnt My Shoulder ~ a Poem

John is a poet and short fiction writer who enjoys collaborating on stories with other writers, and partaking in challenges.

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Brenda's Week 15 Word Prompt: "Sunshine"

I love writing challenges and prompts and find they always seem to get the grey matter working and the inspiration flowing (well at least 99% of the time.) I actually struggled with this one and had almost reached the stage that I had decided to give it a miss. In the end, I just decided to start writing something even if it turned out a little nonsensical.

So, after some procrastination, and contemplation, this poem Sunshine Burnt My Shoulder is my response to "Word Prompts Help Creativity/Week 15: Sunshine" by Brenda Arledge.

"Word Prompts Help Creativity / Week 15 is an article I write each week.

I choose a single word prompt and hope it inspires us to be creative.

You can write whatever you want. It can be a poem, short story, song or any combination.

The only requirement is that you try to relax and have a bit of fun while writing.

— Brenda Arledge

Sunshine Burnt My Shoulder

There’s sunshine on my shoulder

As we sat atop the boulder,

And I stretched my arms to hold her,

Flowing hair so soft and golden.


I was starting to feel bolder

So, “I love you!” is what I told her.

Those words no longer smoulder,

But I don’t think that they sold her.


Her response was somewhat colder,

“This isn’t the cold shoulder,

But Frank you are much older.”

Her words just bowled me over.


From her bag, she pulled a folder

That was in a clipboard holder.

“Will you please sign this with-holder?”

I just stared towards the folder.


“Who cares if I am older?”

I replied with voice a’faulter.

I didn’t mean to scold her,

But I felt my feelings moulder.


No more did I enfold her,

Or feel I should console her.

With each second I felt older

As sunshine burnt my shoulder.

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Image by manseok Kim from Pixabay

© 2021 John Hansen

Comments

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 31, 2021:

Thank you for reading Mark. A bit of a laugh is always a good thing.

Mark Tulin from Ventura, California on May 31, 2021:

Nice use of this form, John. Love your humor.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 31, 2021:

Hi Mary, good to see you. I am happy that you enjoyed this poem and that the ending surprised you.

Mary Norton from Ontario, Canada on May 31, 2021:

The poem brought a surprise and a smile afterwards. You are a poet, indeed.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 31, 2021:

Aww thank you Moondot. There have been some very good ones in response to this prompt. Blessings.

EK Jadoon from Abbottabad Pakistan on May 31, 2021:

What a lovely poem, Jodah. This is superb! I had no idea a poem on sunshine could look this good. You set a high bar with this one. Thanks for sharing with us.

Stay safe and healthy...

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 30, 2021:

Yes, I agree with your views on love, Nithya. It does take courage to open your heart. Thank you for the wonderful comment.

Nithya Venkat from Dubai on May 30, 2021:

Love is about being courageous enough to open your heart and let your feelings show. Who knows what will be the outcome but definitely worth the try. You rose above and beyond Brenda’s word prompt challenge, brilliant!

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Exactly, Flourish. Love is not will wine and roses. Thank you for reading and enjoying.

FlourishAnyway from USA on May 28, 2021:

I like poems that aren't straight all lovey-dovey (because life is like that) and you told this tale well.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Fran, your comments are always so generous. Glad you loved his poem. Thank you.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Linda, let’s say John Denver inspired rap haha. You are right it is no country roads though. It was fun for me to right, glad you felt that.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Yes, Peg, you are right. I was a bit slow off the mark but once I started writing it I did have fun. Glad it brought a smile.

fran rooks from Toledo, Ohio on May 28, 2021:

I love this poem! You are so talented and thank you for this piece.

Linda Lum from Washington State, USA on May 28, 2021:

I'm thinking John Denver, and then get whiplash. No gentle country roads here; John's rapping. What a lively, creative response to Brenda's prompt. Your Muse had fun with this one, and so did I.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on May 28, 2021:

This piece had me smiling. I can see that you had some fun with this sunshine prompt from Brenda.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Hi Brenda, it is fortunate your phone seems to be back in action again. Thanks for reading this and sharing the link. Yes, I agree about the need to use a phrase or song that sticks in our mind.

The poem is a bit of a strange one, sad but funny at the same time. I am glad you enjoyed it, and I am sure John Denver will forgive me. I have written an article a dedicated to him before. Have a wonderful weekend.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Thank you for reading Chitrangada. It is good that you were able to find this on your feed. I am often too slow at catching articles before they move to the niche sites, and for some reason they don’t all appear on my feed. Glad to hear you enjoyed the flow and rhyme, and yes, that stone couple was a nice addition. Have a great weekend yourself.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on May 28, 2021:

John,

I'm so delighted your muse decided to take part in this week's prompt.

Sometimes when a phrase gets stuck in our minds...we just got to go with it.

As you did in this wonderful poem.

Aww...it is so sad that his sunshine burnt his shoulders, but the story you tell is quite cute.

I can picture the look on his face when she tells him he is older & pulls out a folder.

Great job on this one!

That's a cute comment about John Denver...lol.

I posted a link in the word prompt article.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Haha Mel. My apologies to John Denver. When i was trying to write this I couldn’t get that song out of my head so I had to use it in some way for inspiration. I am glad you found this poem entertaining and worthy of reading.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on May 28, 2021:

Excellent response to the word prompt challenge.

Always a pleasure to read your poems. I loved the flow, the rhyme and the rhythm. The stone couple picture looks beautiful and very well complements your poem.

I missed this on my feed earlier, but finally I am glad that I am able to comment.

Thank you for sharing and happy weekend.

Mel Carriere from Snowbound and down in Northern Colorado on May 28, 2021:

Whoa! That was a slap in the face. John Denver is rolling over in his tomb, right about now, well at least his ashes are, and I know because they were scattered across the Rocky Mountains, in whose shadow I live. I can hear his burnt shoulders crying out in response to your irreverent spin on his famous song.

Very entertaining rhyme.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Hi Shauna, i wasn’t sure where this poem/story would go. I just let the rhyme (with shoulder) guide me by the words I could use and mould each line around. When I found that photo of the stone couple I thought it was perfect. I loved your comment.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Bill, I was reluctant to partake in this challenge as I first felt I couldn’t contribute anything original. I just couldn’t get the “sunshine on my shoulder” phrase out of my head so I just built a poem on that, and enjoyed writing it.

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on May 28, 2021:

John, your muse pulled through once again. This is a fun read and tells a story that I'm sure happens all too often. The symbolism of the stone couple at the end of the poem is subtle and in-your-face at the same time. Brilliant!

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on May 28, 2021:

Loved it! Great response to the challenge. I wish I could make time to take on some of these challenges. I feel like I'm missing a great deal by being so busy. Anyway, your writing is a pleasure.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Haha Ravi, so true. You have to see the positives in every situation and learn from it. Thanks for reading.

Ravi Rajan from Mumbai on May 28, 2021:

Wonderful John. Sunshine sure burned your shoulder but in the process, you got to know about love and its intricacies. Great response to Brenda's challenge.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Thank you, Vidya. It is great that you enjoyed reading this poem. It was fun.

VIDYA D SAGAR on May 28, 2021:

A great poem John. It was so much fun reading it. I loved the rhyme. Great work.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

I'm a sucker for rhyme too, Mr Happy. I have trouble writing anything that doesn't.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Thank you for reading Amara. This was fun to write. I appreciate your comment.

Mr. Happy from Toronto, Canada on May 28, 2021:

I'm a sucker for rhymes so this was really fun to read. Cheers!

Amara from Pakistan on May 28, 2021:

What a delightful read Jodah. Absolutely stunning.. I really ejoyed it.. You are a superb writer..

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Hi Pamela, it is good that you enjoyed reading this poem. Thanks for your comment on the rhyming words.

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on May 28, 2021:

This poem is a delightful read, John. I really loved all the rhyming words, and you surely met Brenda's challenge.

Misbah Sheikh from The World of Poets on May 28, 2021:

I just thought about it after having a cup of morning tea in my hand...Lol

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Haha Misbah, yes, you are right. When you have your wits about you you use sunscreen, but when in love you can't always think straight and risk it all.

Misbah Sheikh from The World of Poets on May 28, 2021:

If you ever see there's a chance that sunshine can burn your shoulder, it's always better to keep the sunscreen with you ;) But in love, not possible, right?

Risk it all then :)

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Good morning Misbah, I am happy to hear that this gave you a smile on waking. Thank you for reading and for your kind comment. Blessings to you also.

Misbah Sheikh from The World of Poets on May 28, 2021:

Wow..... I just lovedddddd it.....

Super Bravo Performance, John

I just woke up and the first thing I am doing is reading your poem. What a wonderful piece. Thanks for bringing a smile on my face so early in the morning. God Bless you and keeps you safe.

Blessings and Peace always

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 28, 2021:

Hi Umesh. Thank you very much.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on May 28, 2021:

Excellent. Well composed.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 27, 2021:

Hello Rosina, I am so glad you enjoyed this poem and it brought a smile. Thank you for the encouraging comment.

Rosina S Khan on May 27, 2021:

Great poetry indeed, John! It brought a smile on my face. I loved the sense of humor in the poem. Amazing piece of work. Really loved and enjoyed it. Have a good weekend. All the best.

John Hansen (author) from Queensland Australia on May 27, 2021:

Thank you Sankhajit. Much appreciated.

Sankhajit Bhattacharjee from MILWAUKEE on May 27, 2021:

“Who cares if I am older?”

I replied with voice a’faulter.

I didn’t mean to scold her,

But I felt my feelings moulder.

nice lines...l enjoyed your creativity

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