Stripped Down

Updated on October 6, 2017
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Shannon is a passionate individual whose feelings and thoughts sometimes spill onto the pages in the form of poetry.


Stripped down to nothingness

I am empty now

Void of any sense of purpose

With hands tied above my head

I am naked and exposed

Feeling ashamed and humiliated

Here for you to pick apart

You'll find nothing now of worth

I gave that all away

With trust and eagerness

Only to end up here

So go on, throw your stones at me

Beat me until I am bloodied and bruised

But what is it you have really proved?

© 2017 shanmarie


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      shanmarie 5 days ago

      Thank you, Michael. I appreciate your kind words. I'm working on a lighter piece with the same message you just gave. One about how people can encourage us when we're down rather than kick us while we're down. These deal words, as you put it, are about being kicked when down and knowing there's strength ringer back up again no matter. But the one coming is a true story of inspiration from a friend. Hope to publish it soon. Just taking longer because of a busy schedule.

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      DREAM ON 5 days ago

      I am back to feel the harshness of your words in your hub. The truth behind a real cruel world at times. How can we overcome? How do we rise above? If we have a strong inner power nobody can ever topple us. It gives us strength and power so that we can withstand any human insults and harm. Thank you again for sharing your incredible thoughts.

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      shanmarie 6 days ago

      Hi Tamara,

      Thanks for the heartfelt comment. It's good to know when something Ivette connects with someone else. Isn't that Egbert sharevwhatvwe write? It is for me. So that's the best kind of encouragement there is.

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      Tamara Yancosky Moore 6 days ago from Uninhabited Regions

      A deeply moving, and powerful poem. I understand this feeling too well. Writing is what has helped me to keep my sanity, and senses- what I have left, anyway. Well thank you for sharing such a descriptive piece, and helping me to see that when I feel this way, I am not alone.



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      shanmarie 2 weeks ago

      Definitely not a good place to be and I wouldn't want anyone to feel that way either. Thanks for stopping by. Good tinder you.

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      DREAM ON 2 weeks ago

      Very deep feelings I think we all have been there at one time or another. I am positive I don't like that time or place in my life and I wouldn't want my friends to be there either. Always good to vent and share. What a good choice of words that explain a lot.

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      shanmarie 5 weeks ago

      Thanks, Flourish. That's probably because this was something I was actually feeling at the time I wrote it. Writing this and letting those feelings out did wonders for letting go.

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      FlourishAnyway 5 weeks ago from USA

      We've all felt this at one time or another. You describe the vulnerability, emptiness, and shame well.

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      shanmarie 2 months ago

      That's a terrible feeling, Larry. Sorry to hear that.

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      Larry Rankin 2 months ago from Oklahoma

      That's how I end up feeling most the time. Nothing left to give.

      Wonderful poem.

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      shanmarie 2 months ago

      Thank you. Glad people seem to like the video since it wasn't what I really had in mind.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 2 months ago from Riga, Latvia

      Most creative and very expressive. Your poetic words certainly speak the truth. Great choice of video.

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      shanmarie 2 months ago

      Thanks, MzB. I appreciate that.

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      MizBejabbers 2 months ago

      You really are a good poet Shanmarie. I think this expresses despair quite descriptively.

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      shanmarie 2 months ago

      Interesting thing to be reminded of, Eric. I think I see why it reminded you of it. Thanks.

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      shanmarie 2 months ago

      Thanks, Jackie. It wasn't quite what I was looking for when I searched for a song, but it works, I suppose.

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      Eric Dierker 2 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Very cool. This reminds me of that great line from Janis Joplin: Freedom's just another word for nothing left to lose.

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      Jackie Lynnley 2 months ago from The Beautiful South

      Great poem and love that song I have not heard in years!

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      shanmarie 2 months ago

      LOL. Thanks, Clive.

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      shanmarie 2 months ago

      Gee, thanks Bill. What a compliment, especially coming from you! I feel like my writing is at its best when I write that way and channel emotions into something hopefully much bigger than myself.

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      Bill Holland 2 months ago from Olympia, WA

      Raw....honest.....gritty....painful....I think they all apply, and that means brilliant writing.

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      Clive Williams 2 months ago from Nibiru

      Mmmmm....Don't worry, I will get you clothes again.