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Shadows of an Empty House

Lorna is a published writer with a particular interest in narrative poetry, which she finds therapeutic.

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Sunlight stealing softly across the floor

Highlights a faded carpet of lost leaves

Rustling quietly in the breathless air

Where the grime of forgotten years

Elicits the lingering scent of solitude


An empty space of damp and decay

Hidden underneath layers of paper

Peeled back to reveal each life event

Immortalised in whispered memories

Paying homage to the passing years


The worn staircase without a destination

Plays host to a melody of fallen footsteps

Where carefree laughter’s timeless echo

Caresses the banister’s hidden grooves

Held lovingly within its splintered dreams


Heavy drapes hang on the breath of words

Created by the shadows’ muted tones

Gathered around the ancient dining table

Where the spirits of countless celebrations

Are shrouded in an intricate cloak of cobwebs


Wild roses grow around the garden swing

They fill the air with a faintly perfumed sigh

As they reign supreme in this untended garden

Where nature became their silent benefactor

A protector of shadows within the mists of time

© 2020 Lorna Lamon

Comments

Lorna Lamon (author) on July 14, 2020:

Welcome Monika and thank you for the lovely comments - appreciated. Take care.

Monika Kushwaha from India on July 14, 2020:

You drape the words so well in the curtain of loving memories that each word lines up it's own story.

Lorna Lamon (author) on July 02, 2020:

That's a good point Denise as my mum wouldn't buy a house once because she felt so much sadness behind its doors. I like to keep an open mind, however, I love the idea of trees retaining our memories. Even as a child I loved to climb into the branches of a tree and apparently (although I can't remember) I used to hug them. I think I was a weird kid.

Denise McGill from Fresno CA on July 02, 2020:

Wonderful or terrible. Depends on what went on in your house. I've thought that about rocks and trees. The trees are living. Do they know what we are saying when we stand near them? People claim house plants thrive when you talk to them. Do trees record our comings and goings over the centuries? Do they remember? Interesting thought.

Blessings,

Denise

Lorna Lamon (author) on July 02, 2020:

I also remember sliding down the bannister in order to get to the fridge before my brother raided it. I'm glad this poem brought back such fond memories for you Denise and wouldn't it be wonderful if walls could talk.

Denise McGill from Fresno CA on July 02, 2020:

The melody of fallen footsteps is what strikes me the most. I remember the footfalls of my little children trying to be quiet in the early morning but running through the living room to steal some snack from the kitchen before I woke. It still makes me smile to think of that. If only walls could record these things and play them back.

Blessings,

Denise

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 27, 2020:

Thank you for your kind words Manatita which are always appreciated.

manatita44 from london on May 26, 2020:

Exquisitely painted images, reminiscences and observations. Excellent work!

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 18, 2020:

Good day Miebakagh, I truly believe we will get through this and it will make us stronger. Take care.

Miebakagh Fiberesima from Port Harcourt, Rivers State, NIGERIA. on May 18, 2020:

Lorna, I believe so. But who know? I've been praying for this. God have mercy upon us and save the world. Good day!

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 17, 2020:

Good to see you Miebakagh and I'm glad you are all safe. I hope the world will return to normal sooner rather than later. Thank you for your kind comments which are always appreciated. Take care.

Miebakagh Fiberesima from Port Harcourt, Rivers State, NIGERIA. on May 17, 2020:

Lorna, goodmorning again. Yes, we'ar safe. It's a daily activity. Your poem speaks volume at each line. The sun, the rose, brings fond memories. Thanks for sharing.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 16, 2020:

Thank you Denise. I live in a very old house and the idea came from staring at the bannister, with memories of sliding down it. Glad you enjoyed this poem and I appreciate your visit. Take care.

Denise McGill from Fresno CA on May 16, 2020:

What beautiful word pictures! The scent of solitude! The bannister's splintered dreams. Such great wordplay. I'm in awe.

Blessings,

Denise

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 15, 2020:

I'm glad you enjoyed this poem Peggy. I live in a very old house which has been in my family for many years and this was my muse for the poem. Thank you for your lovely comments. Take care.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on May 15, 2020:

You brought this old house alive with vivid descriptions. Many memories were made in this abode. Despite its fading and somewhat derelict interior, there are still blooms in the garden outside. Nature, wild and unkempt, still thrives. You are a master of imagery!

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 14, 2020:

Hi Dora, I tried to create the life of the house through it's objects and I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for visiting and your comments are greatly appreciated. Take care.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 14, 2020:

Hi Lorna, I'm sorry to hear that you haven't been well and I hope you will feel better soon. I have missed you. I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem and I created this picture for you. Thank you for your lovely comments which I always appreciate. Take care my dear friend.

Lorna from USA on May 13, 2020:

Beautiful poem Lorna. The house reminded me of an olden days mansion during the Spaniard occupation in my native land. It's full of character and intriguing looks. I was out for almost a month. Just don't have the energy to do things. Have a great evening Lorna!

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on May 13, 2020:

So much activities packed within your lines. You keep the reader engaged. Good poetry!

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 13, 2020:

I love old houses John and I'm glad I was able to bring this one to life. I would have loved to have read those newspapers from another time. Thank you for stopping by and for your lovely comments which are always appreciated.

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on May 13, 2020:

Lorna, your expert use of imagery always brings the subject of your poetry to life. I could visualise myself walking through the house from your descriptions. It brought back memories of pulling up the lino in old houses to replace the flooring and finding old newspapers used as underlay. It was interesting to sit and read some news from long ago.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 13, 2020:

Good to see you Chardie and thank you for visiting and kindly commenting. I appreciate it. Take care.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 13, 2020:

Hello Lora, I still live in a very old house and there is definitely a different vibe to houses of this era. I wanted to create a piece which brought this house alive and I am glad I succeeded. I'm also glad it brought back lovely warm memories for you as well. Thank you for visiting and your thoughtful comments are much appreciated Lora. Take care.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 13, 2020:

Lovely to see you Devika and I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem as seen through the eyes of the house. Take care.

Devika Primic on May 13, 2020:

I loved it! The different perspective of art and this house looks perfect for this poem. Beautiful and unique!

Lora Hollings on May 12, 2020:

What a remarkably beautiful poem! I've always loved old houses. They are a repository of so many memories of the people that once lived there. It's as if they are alive in a sense as they are a witness to so many events that happened there. Your poem makes their existence come alive once more through the shadows of time. As I was reading, I couldn't help but think of an old Victorian home that our family once lived in and I remember so vividly the staircase as it seemed like so many stairs to climb as I was so little! I would love to go back and visit it one day. I hope with all my heart that it is still there! Thanks Lorna for bringing this beautiful old house that will endure the passage of time, in my mind, back to life once more.

Chardie Cat from Northern Mindanao, Philippines on May 12, 2020:

Beautiful. I see wonderful images while reading this poem. Amazing!

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

Lovely to see you Sowspeaks and I am touched by your kind comments. I am so glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for visiting. Take care.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

Hi Tiyasha, Your comments are always so generous and lovely. Thank you for visiting. Take care and stay safe my dear friend.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

Hello Maven, These are the thoughts I had when I wrote this poem and I'm so glad they resonated with you. Thank you for your kind and generous comments which I appreciate. Take care.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

Lovely to see you Pamela and thank you for your lovely comments which I appreciated. Take care.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

Thank you for your lovely comments Ivana - appreciated. Take care.

Ivana Divac from Serbia on May 12, 2020:

Very compelling. You have such an amazing way with words. Thank you for sharing!

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on May 12, 2020:

This is another beatiful poem that paints a beautiful picture i each stanza. I always enjoy your poems, Lorna.

Larry Conners from Northern Arizona on May 12, 2020:

Absolutely terrific imagery...I felt like I was in the house, smelling the odors of decay, imagining laughter and footsteps, long lost conversations...walking in the naturally reclaimed garden...all brought back memories from my childhood of a farmhouse long ago abandoned by neighbors....Thank you, Lorna, for this most impressive and beautiful narrative poem...

Tiyasha Maitra from Gurgaon on May 12, 2020:

Such beautiful imagery Lorna. I felt like I was reading a painting described with subtlety and grace. Thanks for sharing. Take care my friend.

sowspeaks from Bengaluru on May 12, 2020:

What vivid imagery ...that sense of decay and yet beauty....i am spellbound!!! Still soaking it all up . Thank you once again Lorna!

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

I'm glad you enjoyed this poem Chitrangada and I value your thoughtful comments. Thank you for visiting.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

Thank you Rinita and I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem. Your lovely comments are appreciated.

Rinita Sen on May 12, 2020:

The imagery is outstanding. Love the way you played with words like melodies of footfall, etc. The ending seemed too fitting. Amazing work.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on May 12, 2020:

This is brilliant!

What a wonderful imagery, in your poem! Sounds like a movie plot or the opening paragraph of a best seller novel.

Thoroughly enjoyable. Thanks for sharing.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem Kyler and I truly appreciate your thoughtful comments. Thanks for stopping by.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 12, 2020:

Thank you for your lovely comments Brenda which I always appreciate. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. Take care.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on May 11, 2020:

Lorna,

Your words always paint the perfect picture.

I'm not sure how you do it with such graceful and elegant words.

Truly enjoyed the read.

Thank you for sharing.

Kyler J Falk from Corona, CA on May 11, 2020:

Lorna, your way with words never fails to amaze me. The way you bring imagery to life through your words, the emotions it all conveys... I can't do it justice with my praise, but I offer it nonetheless.

Another breathtaking piece!

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 11, 2020:

Hi Mary, It does look a little like that house - creepy. I tried to see the house through its memories and I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem. Your comments are always appreciated. Take care.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 11, 2020:

Hi Ann, I tried to recreate the feelings of the house itself with the help of a few of its spirits. Thank you for your lovely comments which I always appreciate. Take care.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 11, 2020:

Thank you Liz - a snapshot of a past era. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and as usual I appreciate your comments.

Lorna Lamon (author) on May 11, 2020:

This is true Rosina it is the shadows of the past. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and I appreciate your comments. Take care.

Rosina S Khan on May 11, 2020:

The title "Shadows of an Empty House" gives the feeling of a haunted house but they are more of people who have lived and gone from the house. I especially like the last verse where "nature is the protector of shadows within the mists of time".

Liz Westwood from UK on May 11, 2020:

This is a very atmospheric poem. It's a little like seeing the scenes through a camera lens. You describe the scene in so much detail.

Ann Carr from SW England on May 11, 2020:

Amazing images and emotions you conjure up here, Lorna! I could see and feel the vulnerability of the house itself. I particularly like, 'The worn staircase without a destination plays host to a melody of fallen footsteps'. Superb.

Ann

Mary Borges from San Diego, California on May 11, 2020:

It's another amazing poem Lorna as you have a lovely way with words, and they make a lasting visual impression. You didn't need the photo but when I looked at it I thought it was the psycho house from the movie. Ha, ha. I had to share that thought. Your poem's home was warmer and much friendlier.