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Poetry : Little Susie

I have been writing poems and short stories for years, some of which I have published independantly. I also blog. Writing is a loved hobby.

The Early Years

Do you remember the very first poem you wrote?

I do. I keep a well-worn notebook of almost all my poetries, except some of the earliest ones. I wrote them by hand back when computers and laptops were virtually non-existent.

I sound positively ancient, don't I?

Nope, I'm not that old. It's just that back then, money was hard to come by, my parents worked hard for a living. We had just enough, though. Besides, everything was rustic and homely then, I never thought to ask for more. I happily wrote on paper using a pen or pencil, whichever was available.

Anyway, back to writing. I remember my first few poems I ever wrote. This one here is the second one I penned, titled Little Susie, inspired by my own life.

Gee I'm nervous to share it, it's so childlike, ho!

Anyway, here we go!


Little Susie

Little Susie, hey Little Susie,

Where are you going this early morn?

I'm going to visit my poor granny;

She's sick in bed where she lies with a moan.

Will she get better, Susie dear,

Will she get better from her fever?

She'll get better, stronger and stronger,

That she won't have to sleep on her bed of heather.

What if she dies, Susie dear,

What if she dies and leave you alone?

Well if she dies then I'll be free,

For I must admit, she's a bossy old crone!

Oh Dear!

In my defence, I was nine when I wrote this and didn't know any better. I thought I was being clever, yikes! Trust me, I got an earful from my older sister, which I rather deserved. But, she also encouraged my passion for writing back then, so the poem stayed as it was.

This poem drew from life experience, yes, but not from my real granny. My real granny is still living, bless her, and a sweet old woman. I wish her more years to come.

Anyway, this poem is very childish and child-like, a product of my childhood years, I think I'll keep it as is.


© 2019 Lynne Samuel


Lynne Samuel (author) from Malaysia on December 02, 2019:

So kind of you nto say, Denise. Thank you so jmuch.

Denise McGill from Fresno CA on December 01, 2019:

That is a clever play on words and delivers a surprise ending. Those are the best when you can't predict where it is going.



Lynne Samuel (author) from Malaysia on December 01, 2019:

So it is, Brenda. Some of our best years, I think, is from childhood.

Thank you.

Lynne Samuel (author) from Malaysia on December 01, 2019:

Oh I see. Understandable, manatita.

I am a sentimental person myself so I tend to hang on to any remnants of childhood I have, especially those I consider the best parts. I hope you have fond memories of yours.

Lynne Samuel (author) from Malaysia on December 01, 2019:

Thank you Luis. I have lots more of this *winks*

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on November 28, 2019:

Yes, it's interesting to go back through works of our writing from years ago.

Being nine is ok.. we all had those moments.

Great little read.

manatita44 from london on November 28, 2019:

Some. I do not use them as my poetry changed when I entered the spiritual life

Luis G Asuncion from City of San Jose Del Monte, Bulacan, Philippines on November 28, 2019:

Cool. This is great to read. I love reading poems.

Lynne Samuel (author) from Malaysia on November 27, 2019:

You're too kind. But thanks *smile*

I have a lot of these I wrote back then.

Do you still have your first poems?

manatita44 from london on November 27, 2019:

I think it's a joy and a blessing that you can find work you did at nine. It is a great piece too. After all, you were nine, right? Childlike, but not childish.

Lynne Samuel (author) from Malaysia on November 26, 2019:

You're welcome John, and thank you for reading. This gives me confidence to post my other childhood poems. Yours sounds very interesting and mature for a nine year old, wow... I'm going to look it up!

Lynne Samuel (author) from Malaysia on November 26, 2019:

Thank you Lorna, that is so sweet of you. My earliest poems are all short actually, this is the longest. I think 3 lines could work, maybe you could post them here *smiles*

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on November 26, 2019:

Hi Lynne. Thank you for sharing one of your very first pieces of poetry with us. Good job for a nine year old, and so glad it wasn’t about your own granny.

I wrote my first poem at about nine as well. I remember it was called “The House on the Hill” about two boys visiting a haunted house. Many years later I improved and added to it and published it here at HubPages for Halloween. I never throw any notes away so it is fun to revisited our early writing.

Lorna Lamon on November 26, 2019:

Such a wonderful and nostalgic look at childhood and your first poem. I loved it Lynne and I wish we could all see life through the eyes of a child. My first poem was about the sun and it only had three lines. Such a beautiful picture you have chosen for your piece - like a little angel.

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