Poem: I Admit

Updated on April 10, 2018
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Offer is not the same as share,

You claimed with care,

But I admit I am a selfish lover,

My eyes will not just hover.


You can be a fire starter,

That triggers my anger,

But I admit I am thunder,

That growls before lightning shudders.


You say that you only have eyes for me,

There is nowhere else you’d rather be,

But I admit my heart still itches to be desired,

Flattery hasn’t got me tired.


But somewhere in the dusty depth of my memories,

Waiting to be remembered and seen,

Is our film that I can’t leave behind,

And I play back what you said from time to time.


"Don’t go", while you clasped my hand,

My legs locked in hardened sand,

Your eyes stared into mine,

"Without you, I can't be fine".


Struggling to walk further,

I told you, "Only hold hands if we like each other",

But in the conventional relationship sense,

Or else this would be a love pretence.


You asked me with concern in your eyes,

"Is this really good bye",

"Are you not having me in your life",

So now I admit, I would have been a fool if I lost my chance to be your wife.


Do you find it hard to admit your weaknesses sometimes?

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© 2018 Li-Jen Hew

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      Li-Jen Hew 7 days ago

      Thanks haha. X)

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      Frank Atanacio 7 days ago from Shelton

      Again, Awesome...:) Shadow

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      Li-Jen Hew 8 days ago

      Hi Sean. Yeah, thanks a lot for the advice. x).

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      Ioannis Arvanitis 8 days ago from Greece, Almyros

      And very well you do! But I think is better to be wise, not scared! Ha! Ha!

      Don't let anything to scare you!

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      Li-Jen Hew 8 days ago

      Hahaha Sean, thanks! :) I'm still scared to say the word Love because I prefer to show it with actions.

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      Ioannis Arvanitis 8 days ago from Greece, Almyros

      Oh! How I love these beats of young hearts which create their world with passion! It was so vivid. You made me feel the "in love" situation, the need! You have a gift, young lady! Glad we have you here.

      I wish you the "in love" situation to become Love!

      Sean

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      Li-Jen Hew 11 days ago

      Hello Mark. Nice to meet you. Thanks for reading this poem and for the kind feedback as well. :)

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      Mark Tulin 11 days ago from Santa Barbara, California

      Love the battle within and the dialogue you’re having. Flows well.

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      Li-Jen Hew 12 days ago

      Hi Manatita. Thank you for stopping by and for the positive feedback. :)

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      manatita44 13 days ago from london

      Nice poem, Li.

      Great rhythm in your free verse.

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      Threekeys 13 days ago from Australia

      Relax...yes...need to do that:)

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      Li-Jen Hew 13 days ago

      Hi Charmaine. Thanks for the feedback and for sharing your experiences. Relax. :)

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      Threekeys 13 days ago from Australia

      This was hard felt.

      A push n pull feel to your poem.

      I know people that NEVER apologise.And there have been times when they should have for the wellbeing of the relationship. I on the other hand can be too revealing about my vulnerabilities. But now I am practising in protecting myself. Or perhaps I should say working at discerning how much to reveal and to whom. However in saying that I write and I write poetry. Am I a walking contradiction? Maybe....

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      Li-Jen Hew 13 days ago

      Hi Jodah, thank you for your kind comment. Yes, bitter sweet indeed! Glad you enjoyed it! :)

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      John Hansen 13 days ago from Queensland Australia

      Li-Jen, this is a bitter/sweet relationship you describe. Many such pairings are volatile at times and very loving at others, quite a balancing act to get things right. I enjoyed this.

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      Li-Jen Hew 2 weeks ago

      Haha, I noticed that you called me a cry-baby, Frankie.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      you noticed I called you a cry-baby.. or did you miss it on purpose? LOL

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      Li-Jen Hew 2 weeks ago

      I see, O'Brien or Frankie. x) That's a good consideration. :)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      No, she could have been nicer, so wondering where that would have taken her...:) That's what I meant cry-baby..

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      Li-Jen Hew 2 weeks ago

      Hello Frank. Thanks for your kind comment! Yeah, it's meant to be a bit mean haha...:) Road less travelled...how? Is it because she's a monster and the guy is the victim? x)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      Either way you read this poem it becomes the road less traveled, don't you think Li-Jen? Nonetheless I found your words touching, soft.. cruel in a good way and with a lover's leap concept... awesome :)

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