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Poem: Breeze

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Breeze

Wings fried in fear,

Unsteady flight in air,

Heart banging drums,

Fire stretch to scare.


Falling body,

Soul hanging loose,

Breeze to rescue,

When too close to roast.


Fire died down,

Blood flow like tears,

Soul felt sound,

Rocket like spear.


Used to circle aimlessly,

Used to hide shamefully,

I see the bright lights,

I am free.


About The Poem

It is not possible for a breeze to save a bird from a fire but in this poem, "breeze" actually represents unexpected opportunity and "fire" represents hopelessness. The bird felt hopeless and feared the worst outcomes. And when the worst outcomes happened, hope was not lost and it was proven wrong. An opportunity came out of the blue. The bird didn't give up on hope and believed in itself again. It finally got high in spirits and shoot up in the sky like a rocket!

Success is not final, failure is not fatal: it is the courage to continue that counts.

— Winston Churchill

© 2018 Li-Jen Hew

Comments

Li-Jen Hew (author) on June 07, 2018:

Haha, thanks Frank! Glad I made you laugh.

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on June 07, 2018:

Crazy knows Crazy.. I don't know you Li-Jen Hew.. but I love you girl.. you make me laugh .. no matter what mood I may be in..:)

Li-Jen Hew (author) on June 07, 2018:

Hahah...who's crazy? One of us has to be crazy for it to be crazy right? Oh...you started it. :)

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on June 07, 2018:

Well, lets just call it one of those things.. one of those crazy things...LOL..

Li-Jen Hew (author) on June 07, 2018:

Frank! Surely there's something new! You are here! :O Thanks!!

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on June 07, 2018:

Nothing new.. so I'm returning the favor of the visit through one of my favorites..

Li-Jen Hew (author) on May 05, 2018:

Thanks! I see.....but the mustache is vain enough to have all the supplies it needs. It has gel so that will do the trick! :)

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on May 05, 2018:

Li-Jen.. it's perfect.. however the mustache could use a trim...

Li-Jen Hew (author) on May 05, 2018:

Yes, I did draw the whole picture and the mustache lol.. and thanks for pretending its not a bird...X) ....Thanks also because I'm a bit lazy to redraw it cause its not the best. X)

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on May 05, 2018:

i forgot to ask did you draw the picture of the mountain or cliff the fire and the floating mustache? pretty good

Li-Jen Hew (author) on May 05, 2018:

Hmm...definitely I'm vain I guess but depends. Contradictory X)

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on May 05, 2018:

You mean you don't already? Aren't we so Vain... ( Not Kidding Here ) LOL

Li-Jen Hew (author) on May 05, 2018:

Lol.. I mean hope I make you feel good but I think you already know how to feel good hahaha. Vain? Just kidding. And thanks for the inspiration...Makes me think...should I have the initials C.B....C.B Hew...:P

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on May 05, 2018:

whatcha talkin bout? I accept all of your comments.. Cry-Baby

Li-Jen Hew (author) on May 05, 2018:

Hi Frank...Thanks for coming back here ..you're too kind and hope it's not a burden..:O You would do me a favour by accepting my comments on your page haha....:) Hope they have contributed positively.

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on May 05, 2018:

see you have nothing new I have to reread.. this and look at the drawing again.. have a wonderful day Li-Jen...:) Frank

Li-Jen Hew (author) on April 21, 2018:

Hello Hari. Thank you for the nice comment and for stopping by! :)

Hari Prasad S from Bangalore on April 21, 2018:

Freedom is well expressed. Great lines.

- hari

Li-Jen Hew (author) on April 20, 2018:

Hello Mary. Yes, that's right! :)

Mary Norton from Ontario, Canada on April 19, 2018:

In the midst of hopelessness the breeze came and brought hope - a way out.

Li-Jen Hew (author) on April 18, 2018:

Hi Jodah, thanks so much! Never give up! :)

Li-Jen Hew (author) on April 18, 2018:

Hi Sean. Thanks a lot! You too, keep up the positive spirit! :)

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on April 18, 2018:

Li-Jen, this poem is uplifting and offers hope when all seems lost. The short sharp lines are very effective. Good job.

Ioannis Arvanitis from Greece, Almyros on April 18, 2018:

I think I can see you in this beautiful poem, my friend, Li-Jei. Your faith and your hope. I like that spirit; I like it a lot. Beautiful work!

Thank you for sharing it.

May the Breeze of Love free us all!

Sean

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on April 18, 2018:

LOL silly

Li-Jen Hew (author) on April 18, 2018:

Haha..I guessed that but I don't remember when I said it. I don't keep track of my hmmms. Oh no! :O

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on April 18, 2018:

I am yes I am

Li-Jen Hew (author) on April 18, 2018:

Lol. U mean the " "? That could mean sarcasm or I'm just quoting you. It's the latter, no worries. X) ru copying me with hmm?

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on April 18, 2018:

why is your honestly in parentheses? " hmmm "

Li-Jen Hew (author) on April 18, 2018:

Hi Frank. Thanks for the feedback and thanks for your "honestly". :)

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on April 18, 2018:

This poem floated wonderfully in the breeze.. You have done a wonderful job Li-Jen honestly :)

Li-Jen Hew (author) on April 18, 2018:

Hi Manatita...Aww thanks! So kind of you! :')

manatita44 from london on April 18, 2018:

A most wonderful and ingenious , creative piece of poetry. Rhymes very well. Nice one, Li- Jen

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