Poem: Breeze

Updated on April 20, 2018
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Breeze

Wings fried in fear,

Unsteady flight in air,

Heart banging drums,

Fire stretch to scare.


Falling body,

Soul hanging loose,

Breeze to rescue,

When too close to roast.


Fire died down,

Blood flow like tears,

Soul felt sound,

Rocket like spear.


Used to circle aimlessly,

Used to hide shamefully,

I see the bright lights,

I am free.


About The Poem

It is not possible for a breeze to save a bird from a fire but in this poem, "breeze" actually represents unexpected opportunity and "fire" represents hopelessness. The bird felt hopeless and feared the worst outcomes. And when the worst outcomes happened, hope was not lost and it was proven wrong. An opportunity came out of the blue. The bird didn't give up on hope and believed in itself again. It finally got high in spirits and shoot up in the sky like a rocket!

Success is not final, failure is not fatal: it is the courage to continue that counts.

— Winston Churchill

© 2018 Li-Jen Hew

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      Li-Jen Hew 2 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Thanks! I see.....but the mustache is vain enough to have all the supplies it needs. It has gel so that will do the trick! :)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      Li-Jen.. it's perfect.. however the mustache could use a trim...

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      Li-Jen Hew 2 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Yes, I did draw the whole picture and the mustache lol.. and thanks for pretending its not a bird...X) ....Thanks also because I'm a bit lazy to redraw it cause its not the best. X)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      i forgot to ask did you draw the picture of the mountain or cliff the fire and the floating mustache? pretty good

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      Li-Jen Hew 2 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Hmm...definitely I'm vain I guess but depends. Contradictory X)

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      You mean you don't already? Aren't we so Vain... ( Not Kidding Here ) LOL

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      Li-Jen Hew 2 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Lol.. I mean hope I make you feel good but I think you already know how to feel good hahaha. Vain? Just kidding. And thanks for the inspiration...Makes me think...should I have the initials C.B....C.B Hew...:P

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      whatcha talkin bout? I accept all of your comments.. Cry-Baby

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      Li-Jen Hew 2 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Hi Frank...Thanks for coming back here ..you're too kind and hope it's not a burden..:O You would do me a favour by accepting my comments on your page haha....:) Hope they have contributed positively.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      see you have nothing new I have to reread.. this and look at the drawing again.. have a wonderful day Li-Jen...:) Frank

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      Li-Jen Hew 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Hello Hari. Thank you for the nice comment and for stopping by! :)

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      Hari Prasad S 4 weeks ago from Bangalore

      Freedom is well expressed. Great lines.

      - hari

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      Li-Jen Hew 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Hello Mary. Yes, that's right! :)

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      Mary Norton 4 weeks ago from Ontario, Canada

      In the midst of hopelessness the breeze came and brought hope - a way out.

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      Li-Jen Hew 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Hi Jodah, thanks so much! Never give up! :)

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      Li-Jen Hew 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Hi Sean. Thanks a lot! You too, keep up the positive spirit! :)

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      John Hansen 4 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Li-Jen, this poem is uplifting and offers hope when all seems lost. The short sharp lines are very effective. Good job.

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      Ioannis Arvanitis 4 weeks ago from Greece, Almyros

      I think I can see you in this beautiful poem, my friend, Li-Jei. Your faith and your hope. I like that spirit; I like it a lot. Beautiful work!

      Thank you for sharing it.

      May the Breeze of Love free us all!

      Sean

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      Frank Atanacio 4 weeks ago from Shelton

      LOL silly

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      Li-Jen Hew 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Haha..I guessed that but I don't remember when I said it. I don't keep track of my hmmms. Oh no! :O

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      Frank Atanacio 4 weeks ago from Shelton

      I am yes I am

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      Li-Jen Hew 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Lol. U mean the " "? That could mean sarcasm or I'm just quoting you. It's the latter, no worries. X) ru copying me with hmm?

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      Frank Atanacio 4 weeks ago from Shelton

      why is your honestly in parentheses? " hmmm "

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      Li-Jen Hew 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Hi Frank. Thanks for the feedback and thanks for your "honestly". :)

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      Frank Atanacio 4 weeks ago from Shelton

      This poem floated wonderfully in the breeze.. You have done a wonderful job Li-Jen honestly :)

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      Li-Jen Hew 4 weeks ago from Malaysia

      Hi Manatita...Aww thanks! So kind of you! :')

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      manatita44 4 weeks ago from london

      A most wonderful and ingenious , creative piece of poetry. Rhymes very well. Nice one, Li- Jen

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