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Poem: Abandonment

I am a writer. My passion is poetry. I feel words connect people together and help us to understand the feelings we share.

Number 1 song on your 14th Birthday

The Skylight Kicker issued a Memoir challenge to write about how a number one song on the day you were fourteen defines your life. How it connects to your life story.

The Skylight Kicker is the Flagstaff City-Coconino County Public Library’s online literary magazine.

Until recently I didn’t realize how a hit song on your fourteenth birthday could actually affect one’s life, but looking back now I can see it.

My song is “Cats in the Cradle" by Harry Chapin.

The poem I wrote, " Abandonment "

poem-abandonment

"Abandonment"

Blue eyes, blonde curly hair,
full of spunk,
a little girl lost,
feeling abandoned in a big empty house.

Yearning for the moments she used to know,
with family around
laughing, enjoying time together,
now suddenly shattered.

Her world crumbling apart,
sitting alone
wishing for the days of yesterday.

At each corner of her life
this broken record replays,
making moments she treasures fade away,
leaving her alone once again
with teardrops falling from her baby blues,
wondering why
nothing ever remains.

"Cats in the Cradle" by Harry Chapin 1974

Summary of poem

Abandonment is about a little girl who feels lost in a big empty house. Yearning for the family moments she used to know, but those times are now shattered. As she grows she watches the things she treasures most dissapear from her reach. Leaving her alone again wondering why this keeps happening.

© 2020 BRENDA ARLEDGE

Comments

BRENDA ARLEDGE (author) from Washington Court House on June 13, 2020:

Rhyme vine poetry,

Thank you.

So glad to see you again.

Take care.

BBYCGN from Uninhabited Regions on June 12, 2020:

A lovely poem, Brenda. And, the song is sentimental. Thank you for sharing. ❤️

BRENDA ARLEDGE (author) from Washington Court House on June 06, 2020:

Amani,

Thank you.

Sometimes poetry is sad.

Have a great day!

Amani Utembu from Nairobi -Kenya on June 06, 2020:

A little bit sad... But touching

BRENDA ARLEDGE (author) from Washington Court House on May 10, 2020:

Nithya,

Thanks for reading.

It is a sad fact. One which I wish we could change...but life keeps on turning.

Happy MOTHER'S DAY

BRENDA ARLEDGE (author) from Washington Court House on May 10, 2020:

Ruby,

Yes it does happen alot but I don't feel we really understand how it affects us until much later.

Thank God fir music! It's a wonderful thing.

Happy Mother's Day!

Nithya Venkat from Dubai on May 09, 2020:

Your poem touched my heart and I could feel the pain because of the abandonment. Nothing ever remains and it is a sad fact of life.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on May 09, 2020:

This is a sad event that happens much too often. I can relate, the last of 12 children, my mom leaving my dad when I was two, never knowing him. Growing up with an abusive stepfather. No wonder why music means so much to us. Cheers

BRENDA ARLEDGE (author) from Washington Court House on May 09, 2020:

Vidya,

Thank you.

I appreciate your kind comments.

Have a great day.

VIDYA D SAGAR on May 09, 2020:

We can empathize with the little girl. You have brought out the emotion of loneliness and abondonment very well, great poem Brenda.

BRENDA ARLEDGE (author) from Washington Court House on May 09, 2020:

BBYCGN - (RHYME VINE),

it is nice to hear from you again.

So glad to hear you thought it was beautiful.

Sorry about the sad memories.

Take care and stay safe.

BRENDA ARLEDGE (author) from Washington Court House on May 09, 2020:

Bill,

I would not have pictured you as a shy kid based on your work.

Your mailbag and travels with maggie both reach out to others.

I appreciate you reading my work and saying this one is powerful.

Have a great day.

BRENDA ARLEDGE (author) from Washington Court House on May 09, 2020:

Lorna,

Your words describe the wanting to hold on to those familiar things that make one feel safe.

I had forgotten about this song for years but it happens to alot of us.

Thanks for reading.

Have a pleasant day.

BBYCGN from Uninhabited Regions on May 09, 2020:

Beautiful poem Brenda. Love this song, too, and brings sad memories to me.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on May 09, 2020:

Powerful song, powerful poem, I think relatable to many of us. For me, being a shy kid, finding it hard to make friends, spending countless hours alone, yes, I can feel this.

Lorna Lamon on May 09, 2020:

We all want to cling to those memories or places which make us feel loved and safe. Your poem describes the feeling of loss when situations change and this safe life has disappeared. You have managed to create this feeling of abandonment throughout this poem. I also enjoyed the video - love this song. Great writing Brenda.