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Original Poem: "Summer God" with Commentary

Writing poetry became my major composing activity circa 1962, & Mr. Malcolm Sedam's creative writing class in 1963-64 deepened my interest.

Lilacs in Our Backyard

Lilacs in Our Backyard

Moss Rose

Moss Rose

Introduction and Text of "Summer God"

Each season enjoys its own special beauty and grandeur in the schema of a year’s cycle. Some folks love spring, others fall, while many are partial to autumn. Still others fancy winter in all its frozen glory. Thus, one’s favorite season as it takes center stage becomes the progenitor of all the others.

I happen to fancy summer as my favorite season; thus, in this poem, I pay tribute to the "Summer God," Who smiles and blesses creative souls. For it is, indeed, in summer that life-sustaining food is grown, as the other seasons wait their turn to participate in the yearly parade of colorful and fruitful periods of time.

The Prolific Season

My original poem is offering this tribute to the season of summer in five unrimed couplets, as it focuses on the theme, "The summer God has been so prolific that fall has material to work with." If spring/summer had not produced all the green foliage, along with all the fruits and vegetables that sprout in gardens and fields across the land, then fall/winter would have no materials for harvest.

Also would be lacking that green foliage offering the canvas upon which the rich, warm colors paint over those cool green shades. After the barren browning of the land during winter, the marvelous green cycle mercifully begins again.

(Please note: The spelling, "rhyme," was introduced into English by Dr. Samuel Johnson through an etymological error. For my explanation for using only the original form, please see "Rime vs Rhyme: An Unfortunate Error.")

Summer God

Spring lilacs hint at Your arrival
As does rain on blades of grass.

All summer You play hide & seek
In the moss rose.

Fall, You play Your game of colors
Dazzling me with harvest.

Winter finds You tempering me for the thaw
As the nights grow longer and colder —

Let me make my life a soft, sweet spring
That flows into You, O Divine Belovèd Summer!

Autumn Yard

Autumn Yard

Commentary

Because the phrase, "Summer God," functions as a metaphor for the Blessèd Divine Creator (God) in this poem, pronouns referring that Entity are capitalized. My original poem offers a tribute to its speaker's favorite season, as it gives a comporting nod to selected attributes of the other seasons.

First Couplet: Beginning the Focus

Spring lilacs hint at Your arrival
As does rain on blades of grass.

The first couplet begins the process of focusing on summer by focusing on spring. Because spring heralds the arrival of summer, the speaker feels that allowing spring to help introduce the main subject is in order. The beauty of spring "hint[s]" at the approaching of the following season.

Without a doubt, the fragrance of lilacs serves to symbolize the spring season; thus, it is lilacs that beckon the senses, awaking them to the coming season of summer, as it will furnish ever deeper sensory material. "Rain on blades of grass" also serves as the emblematic herald, as its fecund presence during the spring season motivates the grass to green and perk up from its lazy browns and beiges.

Thus, the three spring icons—rain, early blooming flowers, and grass turning fluorescent—serve as the perfect triumvirate trumpet, proclaiming the glory of spring while projecting the coming glory of summer. The God of summer has issued to spring the ability to create magic.

Second Couplet: Teasing the Speaker

All summer You play hide & seek
In the moss rose.

Summer finds the summer God teasing the speaker in the meek, little, delicate portulaca. The succulent leaf-stems of the plant offer a shining symbol of summer as they support the burgeoning blooms of delicate petals.

But the moss rose, as it spreads, will come and go. Those delicate blossoms vanish soon but reappear continually throughout the summer season, until per chance, too much hot sun turns them into stings of their former selves. Still the moss rose, like the lilac in spring, is a perfect iconic reminder that summer consists of the creativity wherein beauty bounds in blissful brightness.

Third Couplet: Dazzled by Colors

Fall, You play Your game of colors
Dazzling me with harvest.

Summer’s riotous colors take on a definite transformation in the next season. Fall’s autumnal glory consists of summer’s excesses and exists only because of summer. Without summer, there would be no green grass to turn brown, no green leaves to brown and fall, no harvest to harvest, no flowers to fade. The summer God has been so prolific that fall has material to work with.

If summer is the focal part of the year as a protagonist, then fall is the antagonist, dependent completely on the very fact that summer activity was so creative and active.

Fourth Couplet: The Tempering by Winter

Winter finds You tempering me for the thaw
As the nights grow longer and colder —

The speaker in winter feels "tempered" by the cold that begins its cover. From the summer heat through the fall's cooling, the speaker has experienced a slow change as the winter lengthens and lower’s the temperature. But this speaker is crediting the summer God with her ability to acclimate to such as is winter.

The time happens to be winter, but it is still the summer God who is in charge of the speaker’s ability to become accustomed to the cold. The relativity of it all speaks to the importance of what is what, who is who, and how and when things change and for what reason.

Fifth Couplet: Prayer to the Summer God for Blessed Warmth

Let me make my life a soft, sweet spring
That flows into You, O Divine Belovèd Summer!

Finally, the speaker addresses to the summer God prayer: she wants her life to be like spring flowing into summer. She wishes to anticipate the blessedness of warmth, color, and beauty that only summer holds.

While showing a devout appreciation for all the seasons, the speaker nevertheless reserves her softest spot, the loftiest seat in her heart, for spring and summer. She prays that her very life yield the fruits of spring and summer as she glides into the total unity with the ultimate Summer God.

(Note: A slightly different version of this poem appears in my published collection, Singing in Soul Silence: Voices of Faith.)

Snow: View from My Study Window

Snow: View from My Study Window

© 2016 Linda Sue Grimes

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