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Morning Dodoitsu

I can't seem to stop writing poetry or reading poetry. I think it is safe to say I love poetry and I love sharing great poetry with others.


Morning Dodoitsu

Dodoitsu is a Japanese syllabic form with four lines where the first three lines are seven and the last is five syllables.

Decided to walk alone

onto a well kept sidewalk

under the afternoon sun

snow crests the mountain.

Bird song returns to my ears

a fresh clean air fills my lungs

I lightly touch tender leaves

the pull of springtime.

These pushing buds mean so much

this struggle has new meaning

a need to remove all grey

greet sunshines garden.

Within moments the wind whoops

when the grey storm clouds bring hail

covers up white mountain tops

here I walk alone.

I decide comfortable home

offers what I need right now

and a chill that sneaks in

through down of my coat.

Grey clouds are never alone

they travel and stretch for miles

to bring this rain or this snow

where I am just one.

© 2020 Jamie Lee Hamann


BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on April 16, 2020:

Your words paint a scene of pure beauty.

I have not heard of this style before but I am certain you have done it justice.

I love how your words flow.

Thanks for sharing.

Verlie Burroughs from Canada on April 16, 2020:

I can always be sure learn something from your beautifully crafted poetry Jamie.

Jamie Lee Hamann (author) from Reno NV on April 16, 2020:

Thank you Sanjeev for reading. Jamie

Sanjeev Nanda on April 16, 2020:

Beautifully composed! Also, I did not know that a Dodoitsu can be so intriguing as a format. Good job on this one, Jamie!

~Sanjeev Nanda

Ann Carr from SW England on April 15, 2020:

Never heard of this form before. I will note it and try some of my own.

Great imagery here!


Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on April 15, 2020:

I loved this. Great images poured from the page.

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on April 15, 2020:

Great work on these dodoitsu. I had never heard of this form before but you nailed it.

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