Morning Dodoitsu
I can't seem to stop writing poetry or reading poetry. I think it is safe to say I love poetry and I love sharing great poetry with others.
Morning Dodoitsu
Dodoitsu is a Japanese syllabic form with four lines where the first three lines are seven and the last is five syllables.
Decided to walk alone
onto a well kept sidewalk
under the afternoon sun
snow crests the mountain.
Bird song returns to my ears
a fresh clean air fills my lungs
I lightly touch tender leaves
the pull of springtime.
These pushing buds mean so much
this struggle has new meaning
a need to remove all grey
greet sunshines garden.
Within moments the wind whoops
when the grey storm clouds bring hail
covers up white mountain tops
here I walk alone.
I decide comfortable home
offers what I need right now
and a chill that sneaks in
through down of my coat.
Grey clouds are never alone
they travel and stretch for miles
to bring this rain or this snow
where I am just one.
© 2020 Jamie Lee Hamann
Comments
BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on April 16, 2020:
Your words paint a scene of pure beauty.
I have not heard of this style before but I am certain you have done it justice.
I love how your words flow.
Thanks for sharing.
Verlie Burroughs from Canada on April 16, 2020:
I can always be sure learn something from your beautifully crafted poetry Jamie.
Jamie Lee Hamann (author) from Reno NV on April 16, 2020:
Thank you Sanjeev for reading. Jamie
Sanjeev Nanda on April 16, 2020:
Beautifully composed! Also, I did not know that a Dodoitsu can be so intriguing as a format. Good job on this one, Jamie!
~Sanjeev Nanda
Ann Carr from SW England on April 15, 2020:
Never heard of this form before. I will note it and try some of my own.
Great imagery here!
Ann
Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on April 15, 2020:
I loved this. Great images poured from the page.
John Hansen from Queensland Australia on April 15, 2020:
Great work on these dodoitsu. I had never heard of this form before but you nailed it.
