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My First Sonnet

Verlie Burroughs is a west coast writer from Vancouver Island.

my-first-sonnet

I amb Play

It’s easy really, take a bird in flight,
A piece of cake, or a cloud in the sky.
Gather them gently, careful not too tight,
And wrap them in two feet of ribbon ply.
Not Shakespeare? Ah, but do not weep,
The song resounds in a listener's ear,
As do eyes that share a vision seek
Forgetting of their momentary fear.
Tie a quick bow, the hearer will feel the beat.
A Sonnet speaks in a tone naturally,
If you forget to count, it will still be sweet
When your heart is in it gracefully.
And naught to worry if the lines don’t rhyme
Exactly, just that they arrive on time.

Thank You

Notes

Thanks to Jamie, Andrew, and Danielle.

© 2018 Verlie Burroughs

Comments

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on October 13, 2018:

Well Verlie, if you are really interested in checking my sonnets, here is a link to the first two I ever wrote in response to a challenge Bill Holland issued to me: https://hubpages.com/literature/Tales-of-Murder-an...

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on October 13, 2018:

Lora, thank you so much for your generous comment.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on October 13, 2018:

Thank you John. "A good Sonnet" is a good compliment to get. It's taken me awhile to figure out the format to even the most simple style, felt like a bit of a breakthrough. Nice that you are writing sonnets. I will have a look. Cheers!

Lora Hollings on October 13, 2018:

Lovely sonnet with some very thoughtful and meaningful phrases too! Thank you for reminding us how glorious sonnets can be.

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on October 13, 2018:

I love a good sonnet, though I have only written three so far. This is a good sonnet. I love it.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on July 15, 2018:

Thank you Rajan!

Rajan Singh Jolly from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar, INDIA. on July 15, 2018:

Just beautiful. I love it.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on July 04, 2018:

Mike, Good timing! Thank you for this, I seem to be taking a holiday today, hope yours is going well...Sonnets, and summer, and pastries, and my favorite people, I'm blessed.

mckbirdbks from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas on July 04, 2018:

Hello Verlie - I see I am late with the coffee, and glass domed pastry dish and praise. The sonnet challenge was no match for your writing skills.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on July 04, 2018:

Good morning Maria, Ah, it's a fogged in here, but supposed to burn off and be a 'scorcher'. Just having coffee and enjoying your visit. Gardens calling. Thank you m'dear, now where is that pastry tray when we really need it?!

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on July 04, 2018:

"And naught to worry if the lines don’t rhyme"

Your muse never steers you wrong, dear V.

What a lovely song as well... thanks for the morning peacefulness.

Love you, mar

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on July 02, 2018:

Dora, thank you, I'm hoping :)

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on July 02, 2018:

Great first try. Bet there are lots more where this fine sonnet came from!

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on July 01, 2018:

Hello Tim, thanks so much for the encouraging words.

Tim Truzy from U.S.A. on July 01, 2018:

Excellent sonnet. Congratulations. I've yet to write one. But yours is beautiful.

Keep up the great work.

Sincerely,

Tim

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on July 01, 2018:

Rinita, thanks for posting your Sonnet link!

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on July 01, 2018:

Ms Nellieanna, thank you, I am truly humbled by your comment.

Nellieanna Hay from TEXAS on July 01, 2018:

Verlie, your poetry sings in any style or key!

Rinita Sen on July 01, 2018:

Verlie, here's my first and (so far) only sonnet. Originally written in 2012, republished today. Let me know what you think when you can spare some time.

https://letterpile.com/poetry/Incense-A-Sonnet

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on July 01, 2018:

Rinita, thank you for your most positive comment. It's good to know that I'm not the only one who has written only one. My goal was to write one, and now that's done I want to write another. Happy you can appreciate, looking forward to reading your Sonnet!

Rinita Sen on July 01, 2018:

Glad you did this, Verlie, and oh so beautifully! I wrote my first sonnet some 6 years ago, it is one of those poems that I unpublished in my frenzy. I need to go back, and republish it. Till date that is the only sonnet I have written. They are a hard form of course, but more than that I feel the content has to fit. It has to come from within, and nudge you.. "Write me, write me, write me". That hasn't been happening for me.

With your sonnet, inspiration is back. "The song resounds in a listener's ear,

As do eyes that share a vision seek

Forgetting of their momentary fear." Indeed, no other form could've been better for such lines.

I wrote too much, but only because I love your poetry too much!

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on June 30, 2018:

Thanks, yes, that sums it up.

manatita44 from london on June 30, 2018:

They are not hard. Try 10 syllables in every line. Let every other line rhyme.

Split it in three stanzas and finish with a rhyming couplet. 14 lines in total. Let it be about something 'light' like love. There are more rules of course, but that's a great start.

The flow can be a problem. So change a word if another will flow better. Keeping the syllable the same. A bit like my Incantations to Love. Peace.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on June 30, 2018:

manatita, thank you. Sonnet has eluded me, but I persist :)

manatita44 from london on June 30, 2018:

A good take on Sonnets and a noble effort for yourself in your own inimitable style. Well done!

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on June 30, 2018:

Thanks Mark!

Mark Tulin from Santa Barbara, California on June 30, 2018:

That’s exactly what I believe about rhyme. Sweet sonnet.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on June 30, 2018:

Kim, good to see you. I'm pretty sure if I can do it, you can do it too. We shall see. Meanwhile your poetry is sublime. Thanks so much for following my writes, I really appreciate you!

Kim Baker on June 30, 2018:

Absolutely beautiful Verlie!. I can't write a sonnet as I don't understand basic English. Well done Verlie this takes skill to do. I hope someday I learn how to write a Sonnet. Until then, I thank you for the pleasure you have given me through your wonderful poetry in the form of a Sonnet. Best wishes always..Kim x

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on June 30, 2018:

Thank you Bill! You are a star...

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on June 30, 2018:

I will leave the sonnets to talented writers like you. My job, then, is to just enjoy them, and this one I do.