"My Aim" - A Pantoum Poem of Hope

I have written and published many poems all my life, including a self-published poetry book.

"My Aim"

My bed hummed my name;

I passed up quality rest.

My eye is on my aim.

My mind is on my quest.

I passed up quality rest,

To dance around town all day.

My mind is on my quest,

As I pushed slumber away.

To dance around town all day,

I'm dedicated to my to-do list of needs.

As I pushed slumber away,

I pulled out life's weeds.

I'm dedicated to my to-do list of needs,

As I lined up my goals.

I pulled out life's weeds,

And placed tree seeds in the holes.

I will watch my trees grow;

My eye is on my aim.

In steps, conquer a sleepless show;

My bed hummed my name.

[2012]

© 2012 Alyssa Scheidemann

Comments

shoaib malik on March 31, 2015:

very good

Alyssa Scheidemann (author) from Southwest Florida on May 16, 2013:

Thanks! :)

ocfireflies from North Carolina on May 16, 2013:

What a cool take on the pantoum form. Very much enjoyed.

Gianandrea Maoli from South Carolina on May 13, 2012:

Really good! "My mind is on my quest." That line is going to stick with me for awhile. We often ask for rest from our daily demands, but deep down there's always something going on out there that we need or really want to do.

Gelbee on March 22, 2012:

Nice write...I really liked the image of "life's weed's"

Jaggedfrost on March 21, 2012:

This looks like a modern take on ancient poetry forms that call for both the repeated refrains and the beginning and end drawing to the center. The form I am thinking of escapes me but it is biblical in nature. I feel something sexual and a few things that feel drug related but it is encoded well such that it could be just a worship of the season. It is interesting at any rate. Cheers.

Alyssa Scheidemann (author) from Southwest Florida on March 20, 2012:

Thank you :)

RTalloni on March 20, 2012:

Thought provoking…poignant.