Loneliness--A Poem

Updated on October 24, 2017
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Words, wordplay, reading, and writing have been favorites of Liz's since early childhood. She enjoys exploring science and science fiction.

Loneliness

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How do you describe

the feeling; the despair?

How do you tell about

...alone?

No friends to talk to

or share your space.


Alone.

All a - lone; by myself

be - side myself.

What image will conjure

the feeling

for another to see?


Compare it to jail?

No, not quite.

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Locked in, though;

that seems to fit.

A room, but empty of toys.

Nothing to do, to see

or touch.

You can't get out;

there is no key.

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I enter the room;

the door closes

and is gone.





(Originally written July 1987, 
under my former name, C.E. Carl)
(Revised October 2017, C.E. Elias)

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      Liz Elias 6 weeks ago from Oakley, CA

      Thanks, Audrey!

      Glad you liked it. I've been in that place before; that's how I was able to paint the picture. It can also be from the sensation of being "alone in a crowd."

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      Audrey Howitt 6 weeks ago from California

      This is palpable in its feel Liz--I love being alone, but this sort of loneliness is like an abyss--

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      Liz Elias 2 months ago from Oakley, CA

      Thank you, Brian; it is indeed a very uncomfortable place to be. I know what you mean, exactly, by feeling 'alone in a crowd.' I, too, was always painfully shy. I've overcome it to some degree, but it still impacts me.

      Thanks much for your insightful comment.

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      Brian Leekley 2 months ago from Kalamazoo, Michigan, USA

      That is scary when the door disappears, leaving you, metaphorically speaking, walled in.

      I've experienced loneliness most acutely in a crowd of sociable people, as my inhibitions wall me into my isolated space.

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      Larry Rankin 5 months ago from Oklahoma

      Wonderfully said!

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      mythbuster 5 months ago from Utopia, Oz, You Decide

      Thank you for sharing this descriptive view of being alone and of loneliness. I like the line, "A room, but empty of toys." This line has a lot of impact for me. Again, thanks for sharing :)

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      Liz Elias 5 months ago from Oakley, CA

      Hi, Audrey! Thank you so much. I am touched that this poem is striking such a chord with people.

      I guess loneliness is not an uncommon malady.

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      Audrey Hunt 5 months ago from Idyllwild Ca.

      A touching, descriptive interpretation on loneliness. This is wonderful!

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      Liz Elias 5 months ago from Oakley, CA

      Thank you, Mark, for your praise of this poem. I'm most pleased you liked it; it is one of the ones that just sort of 'came to me' out of the blue.

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      Mark Tulin 5 months ago from Santa Barbara, California

      Beautiful poem, Lizzy on such a difficult topic. Liked the way you spaced the words on the page and broke some into syllables. Anyone reading it I’m sure will feel less lonely.

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      Nell Rose 5 months ago from England

      Always good to see you Lizzy! :)

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      Liz Elias 5 months ago from Oakley, CA

      @ Verlie; Nice to meet you, and I thank you for your kind words. I'm pleased you found this old poem so meaningful.

      @ Nell; Hi there, my friend! You are so right, that it can weave itself into your dreams, and all your life. Escape takes true hard work. Thanks so much! I'm pleased and honored that you found this to be 'powerful.'

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      Verlie Burroughs 5 months ago from Canada

      Perfect Lizzy, you nailed it! I sense a kindred spirit in this old poem, (old, but still so, timeless) thanks for posting.

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      Nell Rose 5 months ago from England

      Powerful stuff Lizzy. And yes loneliness can get you like that. In fact it can even enter your dreams, as I know. good to see you writing again!

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