Incense - A Sonnet

Updated on July 1, 2018
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Rinita is a creative writer, with focus on poetry. She delves into several forms including Haiku/Senryu, Sonnets, Free Verse, and Prose.

Burning Incense
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The Poem


Bereaved, forsaken, lonely, dying luck

Another figure passing undeterred

Embarrassed, fluttered, never looking back

Damp incense doesn’t burn, the man inferred


Red hair, freckles on his chin, he still smiles

Another sun goes down, closing the day

Returns with a penny or two with him

Damp incense set aside for thanks and pray


A foggy morrow will bring no more hopes

Yet he sets foot on the cold winter snow

Until the moonset he gazes and waits

Feet numb from wind like a venom arrow


Red cheeks turn white, a passerby returns

Miles from his cold shroud, a damp incense burns


Explanation

This is the first time I tried my hands on a sonnet. The inspiration for this poem comes from two different sources. One is a story that I had read in childhood named "The Little Match Girl", and two is the child I watched the other day standing in the cold trying to sell incense sticks to complete strangers.

A word about sonnet: A sonnet is a form of poetry that consists of 14 lines. Each line has 10 syllables, and the pattern is that each non-stressed syllable is followed by a stressed syllable. The lines can rhyme in any order but the last two lines must form a couplet.

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    © 2012 Rinita Sen

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      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        13 months ago

        Thank you, John. Children in penury really move me. I don't know what to do about it so I write poems. Thanks again for reading.

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        John Hansen 

        13 months ago from Queensland Australia

        Rinita I love this too, not just the sonnet itself but the inspiration behind it. I remember the story "The Little Match Girl" but the girl selling incense sticks must have really added to it.

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        16 months ago

        Appreciate your appreciation, Verlie, and thank you for the enthusiasm! Happy sharing.

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        Verlie Burroughs 

        16 months ago from Canada

        Oh, so beautiful Rinita! I love it! The pathos is carried in every line, wafting in the sweet scent of incense. I'm happy to see you've posted this today. Sonnet on Poet...

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thank you Integrity. Glad you liked it.

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        IntegrityYes 

        7 years ago

        That poem is nice.

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Wow.. I am so humbled by your second visit lyricwriter. Sincere appreciations.

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        Richard Ricky Hale 

        7 years ago from West Virginia

        Well worth a second read Senoritaa. I love how you explain your poetry. That really helps me understand it better.

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thank a ton epi for that heart warming comment from the cold lakeside. I hope you see many more warm days, and we share many more good reads on here.

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        epigramman 

        7 years ago

        ..not too sure how poetry works - I just write it with no worries as to form or tradition - but I always know what I like - and me likey this - very much so and I will burn my last incense stick for you as they send my still body over the calm lake - and I wake up and yell - hey wait a minute there's lots more SENOIRITAA to read so buzz off and let me be to say OLE I will see you another day from lake erie time ontario canada 9:18am

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thank you Audrey. That's a story that had touched me rather deeply, hence the influence. Have a great weekend.

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        Audrey Howitt 

        7 years ago from California

        Beautiful imagery! It does have a bit of the little match girl feel about it. Lovely work!

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thanks a ton Eddy. That comment means a lot to me. You too take care.

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        Eiddwen 

        7 years ago from Wales

        You certainly do breathe life into your words.

        Awesome and an up up and away without a doubt.

        Take care and enjoy your day.

        Eddy.

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Your comment made me smile lyricwriter. Thanks a bunch for those heartfelt words.

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        Richard Ricky Hale 

        7 years ago from West Virginia

        Up, awesome, beautiful, and interesting votes. This was a great poem Senoritaa. Perfect title. You can take the most simple of things and turn them into gold. Your are the definition of poetry.

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thank you Crystar. So glad you liked it.

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        Crystar 

        7 years ago

        Very beautiful. I really like it.

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thanks a lot AE. Yeah the real stories of these kids move me to the core. Can only spread the message through my words. Thanks for visiting.

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        Ruby Jean Richert 

        7 years ago from Southern Illinois

        Lovely,Loved the story behind the sonnet..Awesome..

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thanks a ton Frank.

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        Frank Atanacio 

        7 years ago from Shelton

        Senoritaa you are a poet up and awesome!!!!

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thank you so much Sueswan. Appreciate your visit and vote.

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        Sueswan 

        7 years ago

        Hi Senoritaa

        "Feet numb from wind like a venom arrow."

        Amazing imagery. I could feel the cold wind.

        Voted up and away.

      • Senoritaa profile imageAUTHOR

        Rinita Sen 

        7 years ago

        Thanks a lot Caroline. Glad you liked it.

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        Caroline Marie 

        7 years ago

        Love it Senoritaa. Your use of words is real nice. Good imagery. :)

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