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In The Dark Alley

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Ravi is a traveler and foodie who loves to visit off-the-beaten-track places and understand the culture, history and customs behind them.

Dark alleys can be frightening places and a lot of unsightly things can be seen, heard, or experienced within its stuffy confines

Dark alleys can be frightening places and a lot of unsightly things can be seen, heard, or experienced within its stuffy confines

This tanka poem is written as a challenge to the sentence prompt given by John Hansen.

Dark alleys can be frightening places and a lot of unsightly things can be seen, heard, or experienced within its stuffy confines. This Tanka poem reflects on some of these unpleasant experiences. In this poem, the 1st sentence “In the dark alley” is the prompt taken from John Saul’s chilling book Unwanted.


In the dark alley

angry volcanoes erupt

within her scared soul

as she battles the shadow

of a crazy psychopath.


In the dark alley

dreaded fire ants devour

his bodily parts

as a golden tooth glitters

from his decomposed body.


In the dark alley

an alien terror grips him

as the brave copper

steadies his quivering hands

to fight the shifty killer.


In the dark alley

a chuckle escapes his lips

as the fake beggar

slowly removes his makeup

and straightens his broken legs.


In the dark alley

carnal passions consume him

as the street hooker

plunders the loaded wallet

of her drunken customer.


In the dark alley

mighty arms lift my body

as a do-gooder

once again dropped me back home

senseless in drunken sopor.

Comments

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks Rosina

Rosina S Khan on March 11, 2021:

I like this poem. It brings into light all the darkness of a dark alley. Well-crafted too. Thanks for sharing, Ravi.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks Flourish

FlourishAnyway from USA on March 11, 2021:

This was excellent, very macabre in all the right ways!

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks Brenda

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on March 11, 2021:

I love this poem usung the sentence "in the dark alley".

It's a bit different than what I thought from the challenge, but using the whole sentenve works quite well too.

Great job.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks Bill

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on March 11, 2021:

Wonderful response to the challenge, my friend!

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks Devika

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on March 11, 2021:

You definitely created a perfect poem that fits the challenge. A great thought here and I like it.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks, Manatita.Glad you liked it.

manatita44 from london on March 11, 2021:

You seem to be a Master of the dark, Ravi. Macabre! Ha-ha. You like it?

Exquisitely written and yes, a bit different from the others but why not? There are many colours in a garden of Love. Om Shanti!

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks Chitrangada

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on March 11, 2021:

This is a wonderful response to John’s challenge. You have done a wonderful job.

The dark alleys are frightening, and you brought it alive by your well composed poem. Thank you for sharing.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks Misbah

Misbah from The Planet Earth on March 11, 2021:

Great Job Ravi,

I liked the poem, I agree with John it is really a different exposition to the challenge, but it's lovely

Blessings

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 11, 2021:

Thanks John

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on March 11, 2021:

Wow! Ravi, this was a different interpretation of the challenge, but I love this dark tanka style poetry. You did a great job using “in the dark alley.”

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