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I shall stay till end

Umesh is a freelance writer contributing his creative writings on varied subjects in various knowledge and educational sites in internet.

Preface

When we enter our adulthood we make friends and with a few of them we might have a relationship also and with one of them it may culminate in a serious one which might become a relationship for the whole life by accepting the person as our life partner. But how to find out the inner person in him or her? That is the quest undertaken in this poem. Only after knowing the person fully it makes sense to go for a life time relationship because life time relationship is a commitment between two people.

Poetry type

I have tried to compose this poem in a rythmic form and first line of each of the stanza is only three words. Further, no line goes beyond five words. I will be happy to call this a three-five rythmic poetry if my fellow poets accept the nomenclature.

Poll

I shall stay till end

The outer beauty,
So attractive and appealing.
The appearances,
So stylish and appeasing.

Like a thing,
Packed in golden foils.
Like a thing,
Wrapped in shining oils.

Shall I stay,
Or just like that leave.
Without exploring,
What lies beneath.

Choice is mine,
But one should take chance.
You can't judge it,
In a single glance.

Let me delve,
Deeper in my friend.
If it is really worth,
I shall stay till end.

© 2020 Umesh Chandra Bhatt

Comments

Umesh Chandra Bhatt (author) from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on August 29, 2020:

SKMUNSHI, thanks a lot.

SKMUNSHI on August 29, 2020:

One more nice one

.But before trying to understanding him or her one has to devel deep into self to understand true self which it self a bigger challenge.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt (author) from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on August 29, 2020:

DRRAO, thanks a lot Rao sahib.

DRRAO on August 29, 2020:

Enjoyed reading your poem.Topic selection and description are nice

bhattuc on August 29, 2020:

Sangita, thanks a lot for your lovely comment.

Sangita Joshi on August 28, 2020:

That is a lovely poem - both in structure and in thought.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt (author) from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on August 26, 2020:

Gyro, appreciate your beautiful comment.

Gyro celestial from Philippines on August 26, 2020:

I would always choose the inner beauty....this wont fade and this makes us human....

bhattuc on August 04, 2020:

Rajan, thanks a lot for your beautiful comment.

bhattuc on August 04, 2020:

Jade, thanks a lot.

Rajan Singh Jolly on August 03, 2020:

You have very succinctly summed up a lot in this short sweet poem. Thank you.

Jade Anibor on August 01, 2020:

Lovely!

bhattuc on August 01, 2020:

Lorna:

Thanks for such an elaborate comment. It has strengthened my views. Highly appreciate.

Gypsy Rose:

So kind of you and thanks for your visit.

Dora:

Thanks for your crisp and lovely comment. Stay blessed.

Linda:

Thanks a lot. You are a source of encouragement for me. Appreciate.

Linda Crampton from British Columbia, Canada on July 31, 2020:

I like your poem very much. You've shared some important points for people to consider.

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on July 31, 2020:

Short, sweet and clear; and the making of a good friendship. It takes time to forge a good relationship.

Gypsy Rose Lee from Daytona Beach, Florida on July 31, 2020:

A most wonderful and heartwarming poem,

Lorna Lamon on July 31, 2020:

It's always worth getting to know someone before judging them. All too often we form an opinion of someone based on their outward appearance, and we are usually wrong.

I loved this poem Umesh which reflects the need to never give too much value as to what is on the surface, otherwise we miss the true value beneath.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt (author) from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on July 31, 2020:

Ankita, thanks a lot.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt (author) from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on July 31, 2020:

Lora, I am amazed with your analysis. Well said and I thank you for sparing your time and such a meanigful elaborate comment. God bless you.

Ankita B on July 30, 2020:

Beautifully described poem.

Lora Hollings on July 30, 2020:

When I read your wonderful poem, Umesh, what comes to mind is “All that glitters isn’t gold” and “beauty is in the eye of the beholder,” or maybe more accurately, beauty is in the mind of the beholder. If we judge beauty on such a superficial level, then we totally overlook most of that person’s worth such as their mind, character, values, and capacity to love! It seems to me that we’re sure missing a lot! “Looks can be deceiving,” another great quote which comes to mind. Your thought provoking poem makes us realize just how much we miss when we judge someone only by their physical appearance. I really enjoyed your poem and its great message.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt (author) from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on July 30, 2020:

Flourish, so kind of you. For going so minutely in my work. Wholehearted thanks. Stay blessed.

FlourishAnyway from USA on July 30, 2020:

I like the notion of delving deeper. We need to explore what is below the surface. There are attractive exteriors but people can be ugly inside and that’s hard to fix. If you value what’s inside the outer beauty grows on you. Plus there’s always makeup, surgery, and other external fixes.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt (author) from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on July 30, 2020:

Liz, thanks a lot for your nice words and encouragenent. Highly appreciate.

Liz Westwood from UK on July 30, 2020:

I like the very valid emphasis you place on inner beauty. You have chosen your words well in this skilfully written poem.