Haiku Diary 07-14-17: The First RusMongChi (RMC or Mongku) Verses Ever Crafted in World History!

Updated on July 18, 2017
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Haiku honchos declared most haikus lack literary value. A Lawgiver is needed to uphold the honor of Poetry and Poets. Jose steps forward.

You must have heard about the Mongolian barbecue.  It's about time you learn about the Mongolian sandwich.
You must have heard about the Mongolian barbecue. It's about time you learn about the Mongolian sandwich.

July 14, 2017 / Odiongan

Japanese poetry is founded on two building blocks -- the triku (5-7-5) and the biku (7-7). The three haiku genres (hokku, senryu and zappai) utilize the triku alone. But the other famous short Japanese poetic form -- the tanka (5-7-5 7-7) -- uses both the triku and the biku, wherein the triku is called the "upper poem" and the biku the "lower poem".

Incidentally, the Iberian nations and their numerous descendants in Latin America and anywhere else in the world may choose to translate triku as "tresku" and biku as "dosku". It's their call, not mine.

Haiku means "a haikai verse", indicating the origin of this verse form. Hokku, senryu and zappai all trace their ancestry to haikai renga, a kind of linked verses that were publicly and collaboratively composed in Japan in ancient time. It was a popular form of entertainment during those days.

Now, haikai renga (haikai for short and also called renku meaning linked verses) happened to utilize both the triku and the biku. Haikai was conducted as a poetic exchange between two or more poets. The first verse called "hokku" used the triku form and was usually composed by the best poet in attendance. The second verse was usually couched in the biku form. The whole poetic exchange itself proceeded in an alternating pattern of triku and biku.

I am impelled to discuss these matters today because when I woke up this morning, there was an idea in my mind that I was trying to mold into the haiku form or else the tanka form but couldn't. So by accident and necessity, I ended up inventing a new poetic form -- what I call the RusMongChi (pronounced the way the first syllable of the three countries involved are pronounced) in memory and honor of Mongolia, a landlocked country totally sandwiched by Russia in the north and by China in the south.

If RusMongChi (syllabic count: 7-7 5-7-5 7-7) is difficult to your tongue or to your memory, just call it by its abbreviation of "RMC" or by its nickname of "mongku".

Now, tidy up yourself and prepare for the camera. Give it your best pose! This is a historic moment and the spotlight of history is upon us. You are witnessing below the first appearance of the first ever RusMongChi in the world.! And if you so choose, you could have a happy time narrating to your children and grandchildren that you were among the first to craft the sandwich-like poem called RusMongChi invented by the bard from the Far East.

The first ever RusMongChi in the grand history of cosmos

ordinary citizens
have their own privileges

the high and mighty
cannot freely roam around
and stay unbothered

popular celebrities
cannot wander undisturbed

Ten Rules in Writing a RusMongChi (a.k.a. RMC or mongku)

Post Script the Day After

1. Write with sense.
2. Adhere to the RMC syllabic scheme (7-7 5-7-5 7-7).
3. Keep to a single theme or topic which could be anything.
4. Make your wording and phrasing artful.
5. Try to make each line a complete phrase.
6. Try to make each substanza a complete thought.
7. Rhyming is not required; nor is it discouraged or prohibited.
8. Rhythm is also not required; nor is it discouraged or prohibited
9. All poetic techniques from East and West can be employed.
10. Feed your readers with a nutritious sandwich.

Compose a RusMongChi and post it in the comment box below

As a final note, the three parts of a RuMongChi can be joined together, leaving no spaces among them. Or they can be spaced apart from each other, thus forming three distinct substanzas. The rule is similar to the one in sonneteering wherein the octet, sestets, quatrains, tercets and couplets -- as the case may be -- can be separated or joined together.

I am creating a poll below to find out who are interested to be among the first composers of RuMongChi. Kindly post your finished verse in the comment box below so I can record your literary feat and historic composition, thank you. I shall provide a space right here for the first 100 composers of RusMongChi. Who are going to join me in this exclusive club?

100 RusMongChi Pioneers Club

POET .................................................................................. DATE SUBMITTED

1. Jose Rizal M. Reyes ........................................................ July 14, 2017
2. Nelson M. Reyes (no relation to me but an FB friend) ..... July 15, 2017
3. Aine Albancis Losauro ..................................................... July 15, 2017
4. Jez Rico Cuenta ............................................................... July 15, 2017
5. Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan ........................................... July 15, 2017
6. Randy Salvador N. Ugay .................................................. July 15, 2017
7. Danny Gallardo ................................................................ July 15, 2017
8. Adrian K Montojo .............................................................. July 15, 2017
9. Bilshan F. Servañez ......................................................... July 16, 2017
10. Andrew Alan Buhman ..................................................... July 16, 2017
11. Melchor Espeleta Orpilla ................................................ July 16, 2017
12..
13.
14.
100.

Poll for haijin, minstrels, sonneters and other bards out there

Do you want to try composing a RuMongChi?

See results

Questions & Answers

    Comment Section: Post your RusMongChi verses here.

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      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        23 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        This hub's first recorded updating was July 18, 2017. But on July 15, the HP editor informed me that Nelson Reyes, Aine Alarba Losauro, jez rico cuenta, Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan, Randy SN Ugay and Danny Galardo had just posted comments. Other bards followed in succeeding days.

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        23 months ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        Wow, Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo posted several mongku verses and in four languages yet -- English, Tagalog, Asi and Onhan. We will enter her name in the 100 RusMongChi Pioneers Club after 1 or 2 other poets submitted their poems. Touching or editing the body of the hub/article cause it to be unpublished for 24-48 hours for the usual review procedure. So we shouldn't do that so often.

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        Adrian K Montojo (ianism) 

        2 years ago

        food chain’s apex predators

        powerful Aquila soars

        flying and circling

        amazing graceful creature

        a hunter and prey

        rules of eat or be eaten

        a single shot took it down

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        Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo 

        2 years ago

        Rain might be angel's teardrops

        when it touch the ground seeds sprout

        Plants then grow so proud

        with leaves and flowers from buds

        Dancing with the winds

        Beautiful like daffodils

        Fragrant flowers in late spring

        MCRR 2017

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        Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo 

        2 years ago

        I now believe ghosts are true.

        Sound of a chair being dragged;

        Oh, but I'm alone!

        Now the chill runs down my spine.

        I hurry to the wake.

        Since my presence seems needed.

        I shall bid my last respect.

        MCRR 2017

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        Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo 

        2 years ago

        My mom is so beautiful.

        With her smile, I'm so beguiled.

        How pure her heart is.

        So loving and so thoughtful.

        God gave her bonus.

        She is nine decades on earth.

        Hurrah to centennial year!

        MCRR 2017

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        Maria Crozalle Reyes Raymundo 

        2 years ago

        Oh, sunflowers have blossomed!

        They tilt to sun's direction.

        My heaven on earth.

        When they bloom they quench my thirst.

        Yellow flower heads.

        Sun like, they scatter on earth.

        Humbly with great uniqueness.

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        Two fine RusMongChi verses from Rosario B. Villaluz. One about a tough weather and a "great conspiracy theory". The other about clock watching early in the morning to avoid being late.

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        Rosario B. Villaluz 

        2 years ago

        five sharp, dings my alarm clock

        half awake, half asleeping

        fifteen minutes passed

        again, the alarm clock dings

        got up so swiftly

        bend my knees and pray shortly

        must be up or get tardy

        RMC#2 @ Rosario B. Villaluz

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        Rosario B. Villaluz 

        2 years ago

        Sun declines to illumine

        Tough winds gusting aimlessly

        Clouds concealed the moon

        Stars mortified to come out

        Milky way show's elusive

        And one downcast soul

        Universe waging a plot

        Great conspiracy theory!

        RMC#1 @Rosario B Villaluz

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        I'm facing a major test

        after 57 years

        I need to go out

        from the familiar confines

        of my comfort zone

        there is no turning back

        the moment of truth has come

        RMC #2 July 16, 2017

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        Aine 

        2 years ago

        ...

        I have been there to see you!

        Yes! not long ago I came.

        I took a quick look

        of what you are doing there

        but I missed the chance.

        You must be waiting

        for me for long to come by

        #RusMongChi

        #Mongku #4

        By Aine Losauro

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        rsnu-06 

        2 years ago

        in darkness they left abode

        half-conscious, hunger-stricken

        gaunt eyes needing sleep

        breathing laboriously

        as cold wind oppressed

        the wild howled with nameless pains

        as blood forged a testament

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        Here's the first mongku written in the Pangasinense language by Melchor Espeleta Orpilla. He also crafted an English translation of his piece.

        Ligsay la'y sakëy tëkap

        Abokay la'y san-dapag

        Bila'y kon aklat

        Kaplesa'y panusulat

        Kagnapa'y piaët

        Luan malikët to tintak

        Dala'n kulay to'y magkët

        -----

        (English translation)

        I have written a chapter

        Just turned some pages

        My life is a book

        Being written with a quest

        For its sheer moments

        Sweet are the tears of my ink

        And colored with crimson red

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        Last night I dreamt of flying,

        Soaring till my eyes opened.

        I walked in sadness

        All day, recalling that dream.

        Till I understood:

        Put your dreams into practice,

        And soar above life's problems!

        #1RusManChi

        Andrew Alan Buhman

        ........................................................

        The poem above was posted by Andrew Alan Buhman in my FB wall. Just like with the poem of Bilshan, I am reposting it here to show his right to be included in our exclusive 100 RusMongChi Pioneers Club.

        Thank you everyone for responding to my invitation to write an RMC. The quality of your pieces are superb, certainly above average.

        I have also noticed that Aine Albancis Losauro has crafted 2 RMCs, Jez Rico Cuenta composed 4 pieces including the first Tagalog RMC, and Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan 2 verses. Really, really amazing talents.

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        mongku 1001

        a spark jumps the stepladder

        followed by a booming clap

        niter fills the air

        the spores are getting active

        on decayed matter

        august happily trundles

        to deliver my mushrooms

        The RMC above was posted by Bilshan F. Servañez elsewhere. He tagged it as "mongku 1001" presumably to indicate that it is a higher form of poetic art.

        I remember that when Bilshan crafted his first haiku, he designated it as "haiku 101" -- the same way college subjects are designated like Accounting 101 or Philosophy 101 for example.

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        I have added the names of fellow bards Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan, Randy Salvador N. Ugay, Danny Gallardo and Adrian K Montojo to the 100 RusMongChi Pioneers Club. Thank you everyone and wishing you and your loved ones a blessed day!

        I will also add the names of Bilshan F. Servañez and Andrew Alan Buhman because they also crafted an RMC each although they posted them elsewhere.

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        Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan 

        2 years ago

        I wear the rarest jewels

        molten by an artisan

        whose handiwork gleans

        in the seamless canopy

        of heavenly breeze.

        I wear them around my neck-

        wondrous arms of my children.

        © Carolyn Gutierrez- Abanggan

        #2 RusMongChi

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        rsnu-06 

        2 years ago

        wearing expensive black suits

        sipping the fruit of the vine

        leathered couch hugging

        chiseled bodies of those who

        get hungry by choice

        claims of love for all mankind

        begging bread crumbs for the damned

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        Randy Salvador N. Ugay 

        2 years ago

        wearing expensive black suits

        sipping the fruit of the vine

        leathered couch hugging

        chiseled bodies of those who

        get hungry by choice

        claims of love for all mankind

        begging bread crumbs for the damned

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        Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan 

        2 years ago

        scrawny lil bodies wasting

        under a queer, moonless sky

        my heart groans in pain

        for the short-lived innocence.

        taking alms in dirt

        ©Carolyn Gutierrez-Abanggan

        they hug themselves tight against

        the harsh windy night. eyes shut

      • Enia Aine Alarba profile image

        Aine A Losauro 

        2 years ago from Philippines

        RusMongChi Poetry

        ...

        RusMongChi poetry born

        In the fourteenth July morn'

        Friendly unique style

        that fits my poetic mind

        Hail with the founder.

        A bard from the far east bay

        To pen this as liberty

        Mongku #3

        By AineLosauro

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        jez rico cuenta 

        2 years ago from philippines

        wailing wowan in the crowd

        carry on her arms her child

        lifeless,innocent

        wretched moments to view there

        killed by stray bullets

        let tears flows incessantly

        to commend the glory of war.

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        jez rico cuenta 

        2 years ago from philippines

        sa liwanag ng buwan

        sumisilip sa dilim

        sa mga tala

        na lubhang maririkit

        doon ikaw mamanhik

        sapagkat makikinig

        sila sa iyong hibik.

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        jez rico cuenta 

        2 years ago from philippines

        The Clouds seem so dark today

        the cold air contains somberness

        Wind drifted the leaves

        heap in the ground waiting firm

        to be shove away.

        It's ironic just like leaves

        we need some force to take heed.

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        Jez Rico Cuenta has joined the 100 Members Only RusMongChi Club!

        Yes, Jez, it's a matter of destiny. There are people who don't believe in coincidences, including myself.

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        jez rico cuenta 

        2 years ago

        it was destiny for me

        when the universe conspire

        to introduce me

        Birth of this great poetic style

        The RusMongChi poem.

        now my turn to give a shot

        my piece on RusMongChi style.

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        Wow, your RMC production is 200% greater than mine, Aine. You are the first being in the universe to have written 2 RMC verses!

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        Aine A Losauro 

        2 years ago from Philippines

        Thank you Lord of Poetry JRMR

        Let me pen my second RusMongChi

        As I sat down in my bed

        There's a blue song in my head

        The night was so cold

        Like a winter wind soft-blows

        My heart sigh sadly

        The missing warmth of your breath

        A blue song I always heard

        Mongku #2

        by AineLosauro

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        Ah, Aine couldn't be outdone. That's a superb RusMongChi, Aine. You are surpassing your own poetic ability.

      • Lord of Poetry profile imageAUTHOR

        Jose Rizal Reyes 

        2 years ago from Tabing Dagat, Odiongan, Romblon, Philippines

        That's a great piece, Nelson. I am pleased with your prompt reply. Thank you very much and kudos!

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        Nelson M. Reyes 

        2 years ago

        As I look at the bamboos

        The east wind blow towards it

        I can see a smile

        In its swaying leaves and trees

        Telling me something

        You are one of the few here

        That can see me dance and sing

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        Aine 

        2 years ago

        Upon the sun's arrival

        Flowers in the gardens bow.

        How are you master

        Our kind energy giver

        Here are your servants

        Sun smiles in return greetings

        Spreading his golden rays crown.

        Mongku #1

        by: ainelosauro

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        Nelson M. Reyes 

        2 years ago

        As I look at the bamboos

        The east wind blow towards it

        I can see a smile

        In its swaying leaves and trees

        Telling me something

        You are one of the few here

        That can see me dance and sing

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