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'Dusk' in Haiku and Other Poems

Verlie Burroughs is a west coast writer from Vancouver Island.

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Breaking the Rules

There are so many rules with Haiku. It amazes me that such a little tiny poem could have so many rules attached. For one thing, I don't think they are supposed to have a 'Title'. But I've given mine titles anyway. Let's just call it poetic licence, shall we?

Dusk

Dusk hangs lightly
softly whispering a song
long into nightfall

Feathers

Etched light between bronze
leaf and white flower, hidden
hummingbird pauses

Spring

Cherry tree blossoms
sun-warmed, white, frilly, flirting
awaiting the bee

What about Rhyme?

I've heard (many times) that a Haiku is not supposed to rhyme. Another rule broken here.

Barn Swallows

They returned today
from a long journey away
right out of the blue

Beach Holiday

A white horse glides
Full Moon rides the sky
at low tide

Siesta in a Treetop

Afternoon sunlight
warming drowsy birds -- dreaming
voluptuously

Face Up

In Snowdrops nodding
bed, one Dandelion smiles
face up to the Sun

Disclaimer

I can't honestly say, I don't really know, if any of these poems would be considered technically correct 'Haiku' in the traditional sense. But I've tried to write them in the spirit of the genre, to capture a moment in nature that tells the reader what season of the year it is. And, to hopefully gives the reader a sense of being there at that moment.

Further Reading:

A wonderful inspiring article by Hub Pages author and poet Linda Crampton - Haiku and Three-Line Nature Poems: Facts and Examples

Ten Thousand Words

© 2020 Verlie Burroughs

Comments

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on June 06, 2020:

Thank you very much.

Nithya Venkat from Dubai on June 05, 2020:

A lovely collection of haiku, I enjoyed reading.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on February 25, 2020:

Mike! Thanks! Good to see you. Been missing you. Hope you are well.

mckbirdbks from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas on February 25, 2020:

American/Canadian Haiku our own brand. These are charming. You accomplished the mood you set out to reach.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on February 19, 2020:

Hi Genna thank you for the read and your lovely encouraging words, got me smiling here,

Genna East on February 19, 2020:

Beautifully rendered, Verlie. Haiku isn’t easy as the rules can make us feel as though we are in handcuffs, or in reins and harness. Your make it look easy. Lovely read...thank you.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on February 17, 2020:

Manatita thank you, I appreciate your thoughtful response. Yes 'change' is the key I agree.

manatita44 from london on February 17, 2020:

Lovely! It is we in the West that has made it so complicated. Anyway, what you have done, to my mind, is beautiful! I have seen two of the three lines rhyme, but not intentionally. This can happen.

Linda C has done an immaculate job in exploring Haiku and its nature both in the West and Japan. I just read her thorough piece.

Now just as music and tradition is connected, so too Haiku and sutra/sloka/psalm/beatitude are connected. You will know that life is evolving all the time, as is life-energy and things change.

The ancient Rishis and Seers used very short forms of communicating deep or sublime Truths. David did this in his Psalms and Christ in his sermons. The early Zen Masters still had the idea, that is to say, using short verses to illumine or enlighten our Hearts and minds.

Modern haiku does have a flavour of this but has moved on somewhat. Like I said, life evolves and things change, even if still having an invisible connection like with music, culture and traditions.. Peace.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on February 15, 2020:

Nice to see you Mar, thanks for your sweet comment. Avett Bros have a gospel, grew up playing in church sound, great harmonies, I love it.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on February 15, 2020:

Thanks Eric, Yes, any kind of 'micro' poem nature related seems to fit. It's good to start young with writing, great your son is so keen.

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on February 15, 2020:

Your haiku collection rocks, dear Verlie - perfect in expression and enjoyment.

I have grown to love The Avett Brothers, thanks to you - listening now.

Have a peaceful weekend. Love, Maria

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on February 15, 2020:

Cool way to start a day. My son wrote a Haiku that followed no rules. I think just 3 lines as a rule works for me. Thanks for this.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on February 14, 2020:

Hey Bill, Thank you for your always generous support.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on February 14, 2020:

Hi Lorna, thanks so much, I appreciate your feedback.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on February 14, 2020:

Technically correct or not, I love them and I love your talent. Thank you for beginning my day with these lovely images, delivered with that special Verlie touch.

Lorna Lamon on February 14, 2020:

Even though I don't practice this particular style, I did enjoy reading these poems. I actually prefer the idea of not following the rules as the poems you have written are truly lovely.

Verlie Burroughs (author) from Canada on February 14, 2020:

Thanks John. I know it's okay to break the rules, but it's always good to know the rules you're breaking right? Yeah Linda's article is definitely worth a read. Loads of info on Haiku there.

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on February 14, 2020:

This is a lovely collection of haiku, Verlie. I am no expert either and rules are meant to be stretched if not broken. Who says they can't rhyme if you want them to? Well done. Now I am off to check out Lind's article.