Updated date:

Jesus, Can I Talk to You For a Minute?

Donna is a lifelong poet and writer, she shares her love of God, and in helping others draw from His strength to get past life's struggles..

Jesus, Can I Talk to You For a Minute?

Hello…. excuse me, sir... Can I talk to you for a minute?

Wait… Where are you going? It will only take a second…I promise

Please let me catch up to you... she tries to catch up to Jesus and says,

"What is this that you are carrying and may I help you carry that?"

It looks very heavy and you don’t look so good….

She runs to catch up to him to get a closer look

Oh my, you look very bad and it appears that you are severely hurt….

Jesus struggles to tell her he's on his way to deliver a gift...

But you're hurt, what gift is so important that you can't stop for rest?

Jesus keeps walking towards Golgatha...

His time has come in obedience to His Father

Where are you going and what has happened to you?

Jesus just keeps walking struggling with all his might

"The gift, I must move on for your gift..."

Wait…what? For me? A gift for me? But... I...

What do you mean… for… me….?

Tears start flowing gently down her cheeks

You're doing this... for…. me?

But why? I don't understand... Jesus

But…. but… I don’t deserve this…. gift… you said… a gift for me, right?

I don’t understand… I’m filled with this endless love for you….

I should be giving you many gifts, Jesus I love you...

What does all this mean… she cries now more than ever…? what is this gift…

I… I… I don’t deserve this… she's weeping from the depths of her heart

She walks next to him and keeps asking him why?

She wants to take the weight off his bruised shoulders

Let me carry it for you… she says…. he says… "no…no…no…."

"I do this for you my …. child… so all the world can be saved that believe..."

Look at me …. please turn and look at me …. Jesus! Jesus! They'll kill you!

He keeps walking… carrying…. this weight… carrying his cross...

As they slowly… nail his hands and feet with no care at all….


The Roman soldiers pull the cross up and it thumps violently into the hole...

She looks up to where he is hanging on a tree…

The sunshine glares in her eyes… she weeps and weeps

She sees the silhouette of this man…Jesus... Oh... Jesus... I love you

She can’t bear to look…. yet… she cannot bear… not…to…

She gets closer and as she looks up... he says….

IT IS FINISHED: and he bowed his head and gave up the Ghost.



She couldn’t believe her eyes…. he died… on that tree…

For me…. she cried and cried and cried…

And prayed, “Father, I am not worthy… yet… you gave your life…. for….me…”

She was so sad and then… she felt a whispering wind engulf her being…

A comfort… a Light in the dark… her soul felt light… she felt loved

She repented of her sins… and welcomed her Saviour into her heart…

Into her life… HE became her life… Her first love…

She was set free… free …. all because…

John 3:16 King James Version (KJV)

“For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life.”

Thank you, dear Jesus, for saving me.. for providing the only way to our Father in heaven…

Thank you for sending the Comforter to help us along the way….

Thank you, Jesus, I love you!

© 2020 Donna Rayne


Donna Rayne (author) from Sparks, Nevada on March 01, 2020:

Thank you very much, William! Have a wonderful day!


Donna Rayne

William Kovacic from Pleasant Gap, PA on March 01, 2020:

Such a powerful piece, Donna and the truth of it should hit home for anybody.

Donna Rayne (author) from Sparks, Nevada on February 29, 2020:

Thank you so much and I am happy that it touched your heart!


Donna Rayne

Travel Chef from Manila on February 28, 2020:

This is the best way to remind each one of us how Jesus sacrificed for us because of his love to everyone. Such a wonderful piece.

Donna Rayne (author) from Sparks, Nevada on February 27, 2020:

Thank you, Peggy, I appreciate that.

God bless,

Donna Rayne

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on February 27, 2020:

What a beautiful way to spread the word of God. Great job, Donna!

Donna Rayne (author) from Sparks, Nevada on February 26, 2020:

Thank you all so much. Through the day, just a little whisper to God or Jesus, tell him you love him and see how much your day gets better and better!

God bless, Flourish, Manatita and Rochelle!

All my best,

Donna Rayne

FlourishAnyway from USA on February 26, 2020:

This was very emotional for believers.

manatita44 from london on February 26, 2020:

Loving and inspirational piece. God bless you, Donna. Love to your family.

Rochelle Ann De Zoysa from Moratuwa, Sri Lanka on February 26, 2020:

Profound and thought provoking :) God bless you!

Donna Rayne (author) from Sparks, Nevada on February 25, 2020:

Thank you very much, Ms. Ruby!

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on February 25, 2020:

This was touching and a wonderful way to spread the gospel! Thank you.

Donna Rayne (author) from Sparks, Nevada on February 25, 2020:

Thank you all so much for reading my poem, it delights my soul that it touched yours!

Blessings always,

Donna Rayne

Linda Courtney from Bloomsburg, PA on February 25, 2020:

Very moving. My eyes started filling up.

Miranda Blanks from New York, New York on February 25, 2020:

This is such a Beautiful poem.

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on February 25, 2020:

This is beautiful as the story of Jesus, his sacrifice, neer gets old. His grace is so wonderful You wrote a wonderful story.

Paul Crum on February 24, 2020:

Donna, this is great remainder that God's love for us was such a precious gift. This was a real eye opener. Thank for writing a great poem .

Donna Rayne (author) from Sparks, Nevada on February 24, 2020:

Thank you Brenda, I prayed for inspiration before I started writing this poem and I truly felt led by the Spirit! So glad you liked it, my friend!


Donna Rayne

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on February 24, 2020:


This one is beyond awesome.

It catches your attention at every detail.

Gotta post this one...

Enjoy your day!

Donna Rayne (author) from Sparks, Nevada on February 24, 2020:

Thank you very much! Stay blessed always,

Donna Rayne

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on February 24, 2020:

This is how teaching the Grace and Charity or our Lord of all, in love of all should be. You just reminded me how much I love being owned as treasure by Jesus.