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Ravi is a traveler and foodie who loves to visit off-the-beaten-track places and understand the culture, history and customs behind them.

A Viator poem on a brave soldier

A Viator poem on a brave soldier

This poetic form is called the Viator. It was created by Robin Skelton, the author of the bestseller “The shapes of our singing”.Viator is the Latin name for Traveller.

It consists of a poem made up of stanzas in which the first line of the first stanza travels through the poem moving to the second line in the second stanza and so on until the poem ends with the line with which it began.


Challenge for you.

1.Select any sentence from any book/phrase/quote

2.Write a Viator poem in which the sentence travels through the stanzas

3.Enjoy the experience.


My example is as below...

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As he lay in the twilight between life and death,

evanescent images torment his delirious mind.

He shuts his eyes not wanting to see any more

while hiding behind the pain within his gaping wounds.


A vagrant landmine exploded somewhere.

As he lay in the twilight between life and death,

he sees an obscure village nestled within snowy hills,

waiting anxiously for the return of her brave son.


He sees fireworks rupturing the icy skies, mountains of sweetmeats everywhere

and a towering pride shining through the feeble eyes of his father

as he lay in the twilight between life and death

fighting desperately to reverse the roulette of fate.


As the devils of death tightened their grip,

the vultures assembled before his wrecked self.

An inky blackness overwhelms the soldier

As he lay in the twilight between life and death.

Comments

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 29, 2021:

Thanks Rosina

Rosina S Khan on March 28, 2021:

Great poem. Wonderful & intriguing challenge. Thanks for sharing, Ravi.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 27, 2021:

Thanks DEvika

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on March 27, 2021:

Hi ravirajan01 sounds like a challenge worth trying and you give good advice.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 27, 2021:

Thanks Manatita

manatita44 from london on March 27, 2021:

Interesting poem!

Reminded me of the classic called Bingen on the Rhine. Ends with Bingen on the Rhine, at the end of every stanza.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 27, 2021:

Thanks Chtrangada for the comments

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on March 27, 2021:

Nice poem and Interesting challenge.

Thank you for sharing.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 27, 2021:

Thanks Ann

Ann Carr from SW England on March 27, 2021:

Poignant, well-written.

Ann

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 27, 2021:

Thanks Vanita

Vanita Thakkar on March 27, 2021:

Interesting challenge.

Sad poem.

Ravi Rajan (author) from Mumbai on March 26, 2021:

Challenge for you - write a Viator poem

1.Select any sentence from any book/phrase/quote

2.Write a Viator poem in which the sentence travels through the stanzas

3.Enjoy the experience.

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