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My Morning Surprise: A Tanka Poem

Catherine's writing reflects her life-long love of nature. She advocates for sustainability and respect for all living things.

Fall leaves blanket the morning lawn.

Fall leaves blanket the morning lawn.

A Poem in Japanese Tanka Form


Crimson leaves scattered

Dampened, pressed into the grass.

Such artful promise

Abandoned by distraction.

My child's origami.


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© 2012 Catherine Tally

Comments

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on March 27, 2020:

Thank you, Larry! I'll admit that his one is my personal favorites. Always good to hear from you! Take care and stay well. Cat:)

Larry Conners from Northern Arizona on March 26, 2020:

How did I miss this one..???

Absolutely beautiful, this simple Tanka poem is a visual delight...an origami of color, of nature's eternal rhythms...

Thank you for this insightful and lovely Tanka...Larry

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on February 08, 2020:

Thank you!

franchesca-hp on February 07, 2020:

This is nice! :)

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on April 15, 2015:

since you haven't written anything new I'd just visit old favorites, maybe the lines would sound new..:) bless you

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on March 29, 2015:

Thank you, John! I take this as the highest of compliments:)

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on March 29, 2015:

How did I miss this one before Cat. The most beautiful "tanka" I have read. Such beauty displayed in so few words.

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on February 16, 2014:

Hello Senoritaa,

Thank you for the lovely comment! It makes me happy to hear that I've inspired you! Take care-

Cat:)

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on February 16, 2014:

Good morning, Audrey! I couldn't ask for a nicer compliment since we have so many talented poets here- you being among my favorites. Thank you for your continuing encouragement and for sharing my work. I appreciate it so much!

All the best,

Cat:)

Rinita Sen on February 15, 2014:

Beautiful! I actually went back to Origami after reading this.

Audrey Howitt from California on February 15, 2014:

This is still one of the best poems on HP!

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on January 31, 2014:

Thank you, Eddy! I appreciate your stopping by.

Cat :)

Eiddwen from Wales on January 30, 2014:

Beautiful and I now look forward to so many more.

Eddy.

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on January 23, 2014:

Hello Debora, Thank you for your thoughtful comments and kind encouragement. Take care!

Cat :)

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on January 23, 2014:

Thank you, Rebecca! :)

Debora Wondercheck from 1518 Brookhollow Drive, Suite 15, Santa Ana, CA, 92705 on January 23, 2014:

Very inspirational to the poets intrigued by both haiku and tanka forms! Well captured outdoor scenes featuring delicate moments that reflect the changing of the seasons. It has captured the fleeting moments in time reminding the beauty of everyday life and also the brevity of life.

Rebecca Mealey from Northeastern Georgia, USA on January 23, 2014:

Very nice! A good tribute to my favorite season!

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on January 22, 2014:

It's always nice to see you, Audrey- thanks for stopping by w/ your kind words! I hope all is well with you.

Take care,

Cat :)

Audrey Howitt from California on January 22, 2014:

Just gorgeous!

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on January 16, 2014:

Thank you, Frank! I hope you have a great day :)

Frank Atanacio from Shelton on January 15, 2014:

wow cat beautifully written

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on April 10, 2013:

Audrey,

Thank you for the wonderful compliment! I really appreciate your encouragement and take it to heart. My best, as always,

Cat :)

Audrey Howitt from California on April 10, 2013:

This is such a fine piece of writing-I am sharing it and hope others read it--just beautifully done!

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on February 04, 2013:

Hello Audrey,

I have such admiration for your work, so your praise for mine is especially appreciated. I love your newest Fired Breath in the JuJue form and promise to give it a try. Thank you for the lovely compliment!

Cat:)

Audrey Howitt from California on February 04, 2013:

What a beautiful piece--poignant and multi-layered--I loved it!

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on January 25, 2013:

Hello, Colin. I hope you are keeping snug with your precious cats, good music, and pot of tea. I can only imagine the wind chill factor-brrrr! I was mesmerized when I saw The Doors in the theater. Val Kilmer was fantastic as Morrison! Since Jim settled in LA when at UCLA, he played the local clubs. For me, both the Doors and the Byrds epitomized the late 60s LA music sound, and I was glad that I got to see them! I will check out the Hendrix link. Thank you for that!

Sending you warm wishes too. . .

Catherine :)

epigramman on January 25, 2013:

Just dropping by dear Catherine - to wish you well - and to thank you for your poetic love of nature - I receive a lot of morning surprises up here across from the lake too - especially watching the sunrises across the water during all 4 seasons - but it is a very nasty winter day today with high winds and blowing snow - a good day to be inside and do some cleaning and listen to some nice music - I hope sincerely all is well with you these days and tonight I will watch Oliver Stone's The Doors , again, I saw it once at the theatre when it came out and I bought it cheap on dvd yesterday - sending you warm wishes as always, my friend , and an interesting documentary I saw on Jimi Hendrox.

Apparently he was murdered not death by suicide or misadventure - someone poured too much wine down his throat and he drowned.

Check it out on google under : Was Jimi Hendrix murdered?

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on December 21, 2012:

Hello Audrey,

Thank you for your thoughtful comment. It's much appreciated, as always. My best wishes to you for a happy holiday season.

Cat:)

Audrey Howitt from California on December 21, 2012:

Beautiful, especially the ending!!

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on November 19, 2012:

Good morning, Genna. It's always a pleasure to hear from you! Thank you for your kind compliment. I'm glad you like the imagery! My best wishes to you for a Happy Thanksgiving and holiday season.

Cat :)

Genna East from Massachusetts, USA on November 19, 2012:

'Children's Origami' -- what a perfect description! Up + on this clever poem. :-)

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on November 12, 2012:

Hello d.william,

I'm glad you enjoyed my poem which creates a picture in few words. Some fans of lyrical or rhyming poetry find the Japanese styles to be simplistic and have little appreciation for the discipline involved. Some haiku translations are done in a rhyming couplet style. Thanks for stopping by to read and comment. I really appreciate it!

Cat :)

d.william from Somewhere in the south on November 12, 2012:

Great poem. Concise and succinct. Great job.

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on November 11, 2012:

Hi Susan,

I really appreciate your kind compliment. Thank you!

I send my best and hope that you are enjoying the change of seasons and looking forward to the upcoming holidays. I'm preparing to write a hub about my Top 10 rock &roll LPs.

Cat :)

Sueswan on November 11, 2012:

Hi Cat

Beautiful and delightful!

Voted up and beautiful

Have a great week. :)

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on November 05, 2012:

Good morning, Tom! It's always a pleasure to see you, especially since it's a sign that you have power restored. I've been very concerned for those of you in the Northeast and hope that you weren't seriously affected. Thank you for both your loyal following and thoughtful comments. I sincerely appreciate them! I wish you all the best.

Cat:)

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on November 05, 2012:

Hello Nellieanna. How nice it is to see you here! Thank you for your sweet comment. I appreciate your stopping by.

My best to you,

Cat :)

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on November 05, 2012:

Good morning, arb :) I always enjoy seeing you here and appreciate your comments. After noticing that my poem was lacking a verb, I went back and made some adjustments. Sometimes I get a rush of inspiration with little time for writing. Now I am going to treat myself to the backlog of others' hubs that I have been wanting to catch up on. I hope you have a delightful day! Thanks for stopping by.

Catherine Tally (author) from Los Angeles on November 05, 2012:

Hi Mhatter,

I appreciate the kind comment. Thank you!

I made a small change. Let me know what you think!

cat:)

Thomas Silvia from Massachusetts on November 05, 2012:

Very beautifully written poem, well done !

Nellieanna Hay from TEXAS on November 04, 2012:

What a lovely expressive simplicity! I felt I had observed the origami-like random arrangement of the leaves with you.

arb from oregon on November 04, 2012:

Beautiful, as are the children who left them behind!

Martin Kloess from San Francisco on November 03, 2012:

very well expressed. Thank you.