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Poem: An Ode to Opacity


I’ve enjoyed writing for many years. I'm dedicating more time to the craft in my retirement days.

The Challenge from Ann Carr

Ann provided the following definition in the article she authored, "Around the Corners: Poetry Inspired by Patricia Scott's Words, and a Challenge!"

Definition of a Good Poet: Patricia Scott, a fellow hubber, thinks that 'writing poetry takes a special talent,' which she describes as "a way to see around the corners and over the hills and under the seas and through the wind"...

Ann then tossed out to all fellow hubbers the following challenge:

Challenge! Choose one (or more) of the four criteria above and write about it - poem or prose.

An Ode to Opacity

What lies ahead
I cannot see
But the river
Knows the way
Around the bend

Photo Courtesy Ann Carr

Photo Courtesy Ann Carr

What’s o’er that hill
I cannot say
But the breeze
Knows the way
And how to wend

Photo Courtesy Ann Carr

Photo Courtesy Ann Carr

What’s ‘neath the waves
I cannot know
But the power
Of their pull
Still tear and rend

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Photo Courtesy Ann Carr

What calls the wind
I cannot hear
But the trees
Brace their roots
Prepare to fend

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Photo Courtesy Ann Carr

If I could see and say
And if I could know and hear
Would the boughs still sway?
Would the tides still rear?

If I could know and hear
And if I could see and say
Would the mount stand clear?
Would the turn straight away?

What lies ahead
Don’t tell me, please
What’s o’er that hill
Stay with the breeze
What’s ‘neath the waves
Remain a tease
What calls the wind
Belongs to trees

I’m content in just not knowing
Why the wind it is a-blowing
What the ocean is not showing
If the peak continues growing
And where the river is a-going

So let that stream just slowly bend
And the breeze its routing wend
Wondrous waves can tear and rend
While the trees stand fast and fend

For me I think I’d rather
Not see from here
The end

Photo Courtesy Ann Carr

Photo Courtesy Ann Carr

"I'm glad I didn't know the way it all would end, that way it all would go..."

"The Dance"

Written by Tony Arata

Performed by Garth Brooks

© 2020 greg cain


greg cain (author) from Moscow, Idaho, USA on June 05, 2020:

Thanks, Brenda. You always have such thoughtful and encouraging comments, and I do appreciate that. Hope you've had a good week.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on May 31, 2020:

Wonderful job penning this one for the challenge.

I think you are right...somethings are better without knowing ahead of time.

I love how you took each one separately. Excellent words for each one.

Then tied them all together at the end.

Perfect video with Garth Brooks song.

Enjoy your day!

greg cain (author) from Moscow, Idaho, USA on May 25, 2020:

Thanks, Lora. I worked quite a while on this, had a very good time putting it together. Your kind words make me feel like it was time well invested. Have a good week!

greg cain (author) from Moscow, Idaho, USA on May 25, 2020:

Thank you, Rinita. Very kind compliment, much appreciated. Like most of us, I think, there are days when the right words seem to come, other days when they resist. Be well, and have a good Monday.

greg cain (author) from Moscow, Idaho, USA on May 25, 2020:

Thanks, Devica. I do appreciate that.

Lora Hollings on May 24, 2020:

I love your poem, Greg. It is beautifully conceived and expressed. There has to be some mysteries that we just don't know all the answers to. Life is much more interesting that way! Great job with this challenge.

Rinita Sen on May 19, 2020:

Your take on the challenge is brilliant. Let nature flow the way it does. We are insignificant beings that do not always need to know what course she takes. Your style is refreshing, too. Carefully chosen words.

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on May 16, 2020:

Your response to Ann Carr's challenge is perfect and well written. I see your talent and from a creative mind.

greg cain (author) from Moscow, Idaho, USA on May 16, 2020:

Hey, Bill - thanks much my friend. You made my day with the feedback, as well. Enjoy your weekend.

Hey there, Ann - I appreciate also all your kind words. I am going to take the weekend off and work in the yard and in the garden, but I am excited to get back to things Monday morning. Be well.

Nithya - thank you for the feedback, and as an accomplished poet (I visited your blog site and especially enjoyed the poem about the pup!), I'd encourage you to take this one up, too. Be well, and have a good weekend!

Nithya Venkat from Dubai on May 15, 2020:

I enjoyed reading your poem, a great response to Ann’s challenge.

Ann Carr from SW England on May 15, 2020:

I've just re-read this and it still blows me away! Outstanding!

Hope you have a good weekend too.


Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on May 15, 2020:

Bravo, Greg! Seriously good stuff here. You are a very good writer, and you've got game in poetry and prose. You made my Friday with this quality piece of writing.

greg cain (author) from Moscow, Idaho, USA on May 15, 2020:

Hi Ann - thanks so much. I really do appreciate the super kind words. It was a great challenge, and I had a lot of fun working this up, I worked diligently at the two (or more!) different rhythms, as you noted, but I never thought I'd hear a work of mine labeled "ethereal." Thanks for that, and I hope you get lots more takers. Good weekend!

Shauna - thank you, as well. Your positive encouragement and far-too-generous praise has been an inspiration to me throughout this week. I love this line, too, and perhaps it's something you should carry a bit further: "bask in her glory, see a difference each story." Mother Nature might be proud to receive such praise in person. She might like it also if you expounded on that. I think I would. At any rate, you clearly got where I was going with this and I appreciate that, too. Good weekend!

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on May 15, 2020:

Great job, Greg! I love the sentiment. Let's not delve into the whys and wherefores and just appreciate the flow of nature. To bask in her glory is to see something different with each story she has to tell.

Ann Carr from SW England on May 15, 2020:

This is outstanding, Greg! You've crafted this so well and you've brought it right back around. The rhythm is perfect, in both sections. This has an ethereal quality.

I agree wholeheartedly with your sentiments here.

Thank you for such a great response to my challenge!


(In case you don't realise, you ARE a good poet.)

greg cain (author) from Moscow, Idaho, USA on May 15, 2020:

Hi Shauna - this is what you call a rookie mistake. I am actually still working on the article, adding pictures, etc., and hit publish accidentally. Oops. Thanks for the point out, though!

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on May 15, 2020:

Greg, there's nothing here. :-(

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