Wine Sunsets

Updated on August 27, 2016
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we were raised on wasps

cleaned our teeth with stingers

after feasting

on poisons left behind

in pockets carefully lined

with the plumes of vagrancy


we tasted the wine left behind

at parties where

only the best mingled

clothed in customary blanketed emotions

sweeping aside alien lovers


ducking under tables

we laughed at them

turning our teeth outward

to fetch flies

circling in fathomless trajectories

at sunset.

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    © 2016 Audrey Howitt

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        Audrey Howitt 

        17 months ago from California

        Thank you Cynthia--sometimes I wonder where this stuff comes from--but I have learned to trust my process

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        Audrey Howitt 

        17 months ago from California

        Thank you Vellur!

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        Audrey Howitt 

        17 months ago from California

        Thank you MsDora!

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        Audrey Howitt 

        21 months ago from California

        Thank you Manatita!

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        Audrey Howitt 

        2 years ago from California

        Thank you Flourish! I wasn't thinking rats, but I can see how you took that out of this piece!

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        Cynthia B Turner 

        2 years ago from Georgia

        Hi Audrey, I had to leave a comment about such a powerful poems. It is so well crafted. It moved me but it's difficult to put a finger on why. "We cleaned our teeth with stingers" is a vivid image but when you try to identify who the we are, it slithers away. Loved this. It's a poem I would read multiple times and get something different each time. Peace and take care.

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        DDE 

        2 years ago

        A lovely poem and so filled with beauty.

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        Nithya Venkat 

        2 years ago from Dubai

        A string of images passed through my mind as I read your brilliant poem. Great write.

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        Deb Hirt 

        2 years ago

        The feast begins at the proper time in a most unsupplicated way.

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        Dora Weithers 

        2 years ago from The Caribbean

        Dramatic and playful! Excellent poetry.

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        Audrey Hunt 

        2 years ago

        Magical! You, lady, are the Einstein of poetry with Mozart as a backup!

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        Peggy Woods 

        2 years ago

        That line about the party attendees "clothed in customary blanketed emotions" is so apt. Many people behave differently in social situations compared to when they are relaxed at home. Your poetry brings up many different thoughts and ideas after reading it. I also agree with FlourishAnyway as to her thoughts about the rats. Well done Audrey!

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        Cynthia Calhoun 

        2 years ago from Western NC

        Beautiful! I have always, always loved your poetry with its beautiful images. I don't know what it is, but I find it more approachable than other poetry: you just have a way with words that takes me to another world and I love it! I've missed you!

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        Linda Crampton 

        2 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

        Your poem is filled with vivid and intriguing imagery, Audrey. I get new ideas each time I read it. Thank you!

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        Catherine Tally 

        2 years ago from Los Angeles

        Our invisible demons are rarely absent! I love your imagination, Audrey, and your mastery of words. It's always a pleasure to read your work!

        My best to you, Cat:)

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        Faith Reaper 

        2 years ago from southern USA

        Brilliant, Audrey!

        Your words certainly paint a visual.

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        manatita44 

        2 years ago from london

        This one was painted most powerfully! A strong, sensitive poem. Brilliant!

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        Audrey Howitt 

        2 years ago from California

        Thank you Mike!

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        Rachel L Alba 

        2 years ago from Every Day Cooking and Baking

        It reminded me of pretty little fairies flying around and nobody sees them.

        Blessings to you, Audrey.

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        Richard Francis Fleck 

        2 years ago from Denver, Colorado

        Richly imagistic poem that works on the imagination.

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        Bill Holland 

        2 years ago from Olympia, WA

        I have run out of words to describe your exquisite poetry. You truly are a wonderful talent.

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        Ruby Jean Richert 

        2 years ago from Southern Illinois

        I thought of the poor waiters who watched the wealthy eat and drink wine, hoping they would leave a taste to savor. Very creative!

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        John Hansen 

        2 years ago from Queensland Australia

        I like Flourish's take on this poem. Reminded me of a Salvadore Dali painting. Very appealing.

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        FlourishAnyway 

        2 years ago from USA

        You probably didn't intend this at all, but this makes me think of rats hiding out at a fancy party or at the fringes of polite society mocking those who would be disgusted if only they knew. They're waiting for a feast of crumbs.

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        mckbirdbks 

        2 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

        There is a richness here, not often found.

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