Waiting for the Mourners to Arrive

Updated on February 14, 2018

Dr. Ariel Rivera was standing in front of a pine casket in the center of a church on East Main Street. There was a body of a small child in the casket waiting for mourners to arrive. She ran her fingers along the smooth pine and then brought it to her nose for sniffing. The child was lifeless but she sensed a hint of satisfaction coming from the body.

She thought about the autopsy and wondered why must a life go so young. Was there any reason for it?

She closed her eyes and prayed silently with her lips moving softly. The child was six years old and never knew what living really meant.

“What was your last thought?” she whispered. “What did you feel when death crossed your path?”

The doctor walked away from the casket and stopped at the wooden doors. On each side of the doors were pools of holy water designated for dipping. She wiped her hands on her jeans and then put a finger in the water. She made a cross motion close to her face and then paused briefly.

“I don't know how that will help,” she said without turning around. “Heaven take you, I hope.”

She walked out the door and stood at the top stair and she looked down. She had the urge to kneel and pray, but she did not. There was no reason for it. The child was already dead.

“Family?” someone said.

She turned around and saw the priest standing by the doors. He was very thin and balding. His skin was almost dry, but he had a friendly approach.

“No,” she replied.

He looked confused.

“I did the autopsy,” she added.

He nodded.

“So young,” she said.

The priest folded his arms across his chest and smiled. “He will cross the ocean with God.”

“The ocean?”

“God takes the little ones across water so that there will be no chance of fire. He will never take a glimpse of Hell. It's his way of keeping the spirit clean and pure.”

“I've never heard of that,” she said.

The priest smiled.

The doctor took a few moments to digest what the priest said. Finally she allowed those words to enter her consciousness. She then realized that the child's spirit would walk on water like Jesus did until he reached the gates of heaven.

The doctor laughed, more from nerves than anything else, and the priest understood.

“Life and death,” the doctor started. “It must look enormous to the spirit of a young child.”

“Perhaps, but with God walking along side the child, it would not be a long journey.”

The doctor looked down at the priest's shoes trying to avoid his eyes. “I have so much to learn.”

Laughing, the priest put his hand on her shoulder and said, “We all have so much to learn. But remember, no matter how long or short life is, God teaches us more when we are with him. That youngster will benefit from death which will make up for the loss in living. Pray that we all can be happy for him.”

“Easy said then done,” she replied.

“You can spend a lifetime worrying and visualizing or even imagining death, but if you do that, life will sneak past you. Pray for the dead briefly, and pray for the living often.”

The doctor smiled. It was an empty smile, but a smile nevertheless.

© 2018 Frank Atanacio


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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      hey Lisa, Long time.. hope all is good and Happy way belated New Year..:) Frank

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      Lisa Williams 2 weeks ago from Florida

      This is a beautiful story,Frank! As always, your beautiful attention to detail, brought me into the church with the Doctor, Priest, and little boy.

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      Frank Atanacio 2 weeks ago from Shelton

      hey Genna East thanks for stopping by..:)

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      Genna East 2 weeks ago from Massachusetts, USA

      I really liked this short, Frank. (You do this so well.) There is so much behind the priest's words, and his closing remark to the doctor is just perfect. Nicely done. :-)

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      Frank Atanacio 3 weeks ago from Shelton

      thank you Coffee Queen

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      Louise Powles 3 weeks ago from Norfolk, England

      That's a lovely story, Frank. It was very touching and moving to read.

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      Frank Atanacio 3 weeks ago from Shelton

      thank you Peggy

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      Peggy Woods 4 weeks ago from Houston, Texas

      What a beautiful way to think of children passing from this life to the next. I enjoyed reading this one Frank.

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      Frank Atanacio 4 weeks ago from Shelton

      thank you for reading MsDora and PIR mudasir... bless you borg

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      Dora Weithers 4 weeks ago from The Caribbean

      You probably know that I totally love the spiritual perspectives in this article, including the priest's which is also new to me (making me smile). Death seems so friendly and peaceful here.

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      PIR mudasir 5 weeks ago

      Itz very real and intresting sir

      It gave me the immence pleasure while reading!

      Thnx a lot

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      Frank Atanacio 5 weeks ago from Shelton

      Hari and Flourish anyways, Shyron and Eric thank you guys for stopping by the mourning... bless you all

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      Eric Dierker 5 weeks ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Frank this is very very good. Your theology is wonderful like your writing.

      I generally do not go to funerals. It just unnerves folks when I am smiling the whole time.

      Souls never die.

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      Shyron E Shenko 5 weeks ago from Texas

      Frank, this is an interesting conversation between the Priest and the doctor. I had not heard what the Priest said about walking on water, but I do understand that.

      Blessings my friend.

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      John Hansen 5 weeks ago from Queensland Australia

      Something a little different from you Frank, but wonderfully constructed and written. Pulling at the emotional heartstrings again.

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      FlourishAnyway 5 weeks ago from USA

      I don’t think parents ever get over a child’s death. We tell ourselves many things to comfort one another, but it’s a sorrow so deep. This showed emotional complexity and depth and you expressed it masterfully through few words. Brilliantly done.

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      Hari Prasad S 5 weeks ago from Bangalore

      The conversation is realistic and expressive.

      Birth and death are like graduation if the life is a university.

      - hari

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      Frank Atanacio 5 weeks ago from Shelton

      thank you Peg Cole bless you

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      Peg Cole 5 weeks ago from Dallas, Texas

      This story is deeply touching and meaningful. Always sad to think about the passing of a child. The toy on the photo of the casket flower spray really brought the message home. I loved the phrase, "Pray for the dead briefly, and pray for the living often." Such good advice.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 weeks ago from Shelton

      No Jive, Clive? LOL thanks my friend

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      Clive Williams 5 weeks ago from Jamaica

      This is real frank. very real.

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      Frank Atanacio 5 weeks ago from Shelton

      Thank you so much Nikki, Nell Rose, Bill, Maryam, Manatita and of course Robin for your wonderful comments .. bless you guys

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      Nell Rose 5 weeks ago from England

      Wow! so deep, yet the words are awesome! I thought this was so good! nice one!

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      Bill Holland 5 weeks ago from Olympia, WA

      You do flash fiction so well. It's not as easy as it looks. In fact, it is too difficult for this novel writer. Well done, Frank.

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      manatita44 5 weeks ago from london

      I laugher when Rivera was questioning the child and I laughed again when the priest was giving advice and the simple innocent response of the doctor. I feel that they enhanced an already beautiful piece of writing. Cool!

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      Maryam Rehman 5 weeks ago from Pakistan

      Very touching Frank. Specially, 'Pray for the dead briefly, and pray for the living often.' :)

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      Nikki Khan 5 weeks ago from London

      An amazing note on praying for yourself and for others who are alive or died.Its beautifully woven to get the best out of it as always.Loved it till the end Frank.God Bless you.

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      Robin Carretti 5 weeks ago from Hightstown

      Very well said about death and the visual side how kids reach out to us we all imagine this but living and enjoying life I feel our time on this good earth goes really quick