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The Spooky Outcome of Shoeb’s Creative Writing

I discovered my passion for writing after I quit my day job. So I began to write fiction stories, self-help books, and articles, blogs, etc.

Shoeb had just got his M.Sc degree in Software Technology from abroad and had returned home. He met one of his close friends, Ashraf who showed him a site where he could submit creative article stories and earn good money. Shoeb loved the idea and read some of the stories in his friend’s account that he had authored.

Shoeb felt inspired by the idea. He too started to think creatively to write stories. He wrote the summary of the first article as follows:

Junaid, a guy aged 18 years had been cursed by a witch so that whenever he was alone, he heard voices in his head. He complained to his parents, and he saw a doctor who gave him medication. But in vain. He tried a series of reputable doctors to cure his problem, but they all failed. His parents gave up, and so did Junaid.

Junaid learned to live with the voices in his head. Sometimes they were good and encouraged whatever he did, and sometimes they could be obnoxious and gave him a hard time. 20 years passed by, and the witch who placed it on him returned.

She asked puzzled, “Aren’t you curious how to remove it?” Junaid, much older and mature now, simply shrugged and said, “I am used to it.”

Shoeb meant to elaborate the above story to about 1000 words and submit it online. He did it within a week. He felt jubilant when his first creative article got published and thought of surprising all his loved ones. But none of them congratulated him nor showed appreciation. He couldn't understand why.

Pic1: Shoeb Working Hard at Creative Writing

Pic1: Shoeb Working Hard at Creative Writing

Shoeb met his friend, Ashraf, who gave him the idea of creative writing in the first place. Ashraf said, "Don't worry. Elderly people are too traditional and cannot take in innovative ideas. Just wait until you are paid well for your stories, and they will be happy.”’

Shoeb felt encouraged after this conversation with Ashraf. He thought of his second creative story, which he intended to submit online again to the site Ashraf showed. His next story’s summary followed as below:

As Mother Fairy instructed, Cinderella left the ball before midnight, leaving behind one of her shoes in her hurry. Later she heard the declaration of the prince that he was ready to marry the girl whose foot would fit the missing shoe.

Cinderella realized she was only infatuated with the prince and never really loved him. So, when the prince came to her home, only her stepsisters tried very hard to fit the shoe on their foot and yet, they couldn’t.

But Cinderella stayed behind and didn’t show up. She was dressed in a servant’s clothes, and the prince hardly noticed her nor recognized her.

Shoeb decided to extend the story to much greater detail and vividness, which in fact, he did and submitted it to the site online and felt satisfied. He noticed after each submission of his stories, his loved ones went more and more aloof.

He thought to himself, “I will prove to them what I am doing is worthy, and I am loving it completely. I am already earning money. When I earn enough, they will be contented, I am sure.”

Shoeb’s next creative story involved modifying the "A Princess and the Pea" story.

It was raining profusely. Suzie, a girl of 20 years got lost in the walking trail through the woods and was completely drenched in the rain. She could see the castle on the hilltop nearby and knew that the prince who lived there was looking for a real princess.

Suzie thought of playing a trick. She went to the castle. Her whole full-length dress dripped water on the ground at the entrance. She said simply, “I am a real princess. Please let me in so that I can escape the rain.”

All the people at the castle gathered together to see if she were a real princess. They couldn’t tell. After all, Suzie looked very beautiful even in her wet dress. They let her in, and the Queen asked her to stay the night.

Under Queen's order, underneath 50 mattresses, a pea was placed on the bed foundation. On top of all of the mattresses, Suzie had to sleep the night.

Suzie had a scrumptious dinner with the entire extended family and eyed the prince from time to time.

Next, it was time to sleep. Suzie used a ladder to climb to the top of 50 mattresses. Everyone left her, and she was allowed to sleep.

The next morning, while having breakfast, the Queen asked, “How well did you sleep last night, Princess Suzie?” Suzie confessed, “I only wanted to get out of the rain. So, I faked everything. I am no princess, and I didn’t feel the pea under the mattresses and slept well on the contrary. Thank you so much for your cordiality. I am ready to leave now.”

The Queen and family were speechless and let Suzie leave the castle. They were all completely spellbound at Suzie’s canniness.

Shoeb sent it off online to the site to get published after expanding it and adding much more substance and liveliness to it. He basked in glory. He didn’t care if relatives would have nothing to do with him. His Mom and sister were still at home with him. He was grateful for that.

Shoeb closed his eyes and thought of the next creative story.

A girl of 15 years borrows her deceased father’s cloak because it’s raining heavily outside. As soon as she steps out on to the street, she is amazed that she can read everyone’s thoughts.

Pic2: An Amazing Cloak of the Deceased Father

Pic2: An Amazing Cloak of the Deceased Father

Shoeb felt tired and thought he would relax going out to Ashraf's place. On the way, he met his sister, who was wearing a cloak to keep out from the rain.

She said, “Going to Ashraf Bhaiya’s place? Will you talk about your next creative story to him?”

Shoeb felt offended. “How do you know I am going to Ashraf’s place?”

His sister replied, “Just a guess!”

She further added, “Plan to stay there only for fifteen minutes, Shoeb Bhaiya?”

Shoeb was even more surprised. She was reading all his thoughts.

His sister was fifteen years old, and the cloak she was wearing belonged to his deceased father.

Shoeb realized, to his extreme horror, that the spooky unthinkable had happened. His most recent creative idea had taken on a life of its own!

All his relatives gathered at Shoeb’s place that night. They said, “We told you not to write creative stories. We warned you. Now see what is happening, Shoeb.”

Shoeb reflected and said, "Yes, I understand now. I don't mean to write creative stories all my life. I will stop doing so. I will start looking for a job in the field of Software Technology, matching my skills and expertise."

All the relatives, mother and sister embraced Shoeb. Yes, there was love and affection in the family again.

Poll Time

© 2020 Rosina S Khan


Rosina S Khan (author) on October 09, 2020:

Thank you, Ann for your comment. You are an established writer, and I wouldn't argue with you. Yes, Shoeb should have followed his passion.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 09, 2020:

Anupam, thank you for your opinion and your comment. Yes, I feel Shoeb should follow his passion- in fact, that was what he was doing until he experienced the spooky effects, which he didn't like. If he changes his mind, we cannot force him. He should follow his heart.

By the way, Anupam, Shoeb is the main character of the story while Junaid is the character of Shoeb's first creative story.

Thank you for stopping by and dropping in an insightful comment.

Ann Carr from SW England on October 09, 2020:

I think he should continue writing. I would!


Anupam Mitu from MUMBAI on October 09, 2020:

Interesting and gripping story Rosima. Even I believe that one should go with one's passion. If Junaid enjoyed writing so much, he must continue. I loved Cinderella's story. I was waiting for the ending..

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

Yes, the family is together and seems to want the best for Shoeb. While he does have a creative side, the spooky effects changed his mind.

There is a possibility that he could write creative stories as a side hustle after he overcomes the horror he felt initially when the spooky effect was obvious to him.

Thank you, Fran, for reading and for your inquisitive comments. Truly appreciated.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

Yes, you are right, Denise. Shoeb didn't think in such broad terms. The fact that his younger sister was reading all his thoughts just like the girl in his last planned creative story offended and disturbed him.

Besides, he didn't like the family pressure either. To ease things, he opted for working in an office in Software Technology, which is his real field of expertise.

Thank you so much for your very insightful comments. I really appreciate them.

fran rooks from Toledo, Ohio on October 08, 2020:

Another unique story. I wonder if he could have done both. He definitely has a creative side. I am glad that the family is 'together' in a sense. I hate confrontations.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

Yes, Chitrangada, right we evolve and grow in life all the time. Shoeb may change his decision over time or he may not. He may be more interested in his real field of expertise, Software Technology and may be earning better living. Or, he may revert to writing creative stories again in distant future. Time can tell.

Thank you for your insightful comments. Truly appreciated.

Denise McGill from Fresno CA on October 08, 2020:

I think if these come true, he could write stories that would bring the world into a better place, end hunger and homelessness, end famine and war, end hate and prejudice. Why give all that up just because it is a bit spooky?



Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on October 08, 2020:

Nice and engaging story, and you have kept the interest of the readers, till the end. I will go with the majority opinion, which the other readers have already said. However, I do believe that we constantly evolve and grow in life. What’s true today, may not be so in the future.

Thanks for sharing this.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

We all aren't perfect and have our flaws, not being able to accept some of the things. I guess it was Shoeb's little flaw of nature who couldn't accept something spooky like that. Up until that everything was okay.

It was just that little thing that bothered him so much that he decided to quit writing. Additionally, all loved ones were happy with his choice. This is also a way of life. He continues the path of life he desires.

Thank you, Brenda, for reading and for your splendid comments. I really appreciate them.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on October 08, 2020:


This one is a great story.

It captures one's attention the whole way through...this style of writing is fantastic.

I do wish he would not give up so easily. He didnt pay attention to them before so why now when he is so close to a masterpice.

Yes it can be spooky with it invading your life but that is what life is all about.

Taking chances & living our dreams.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

I am glad you enjoyed the tales within the story and the story itself. What can be done? Shoeb hates anything spooky and therefore, his decision.

Thank you, Ankita, for stopping by and commenting. I truly appreciate it.

Ankita B on October 08, 2020:

Great story. I really enjoyed reading Shoeb's creatively written tales although it turned out to be spooky. I too think he should continue writing creative stories. It was a wonderful read, Rosina.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

I am so pleased that you enjoyed my short stories within the longer one. Yes, Shoeb can perhaps find other creative outlets of his choice. We needn't decide for him. He will, I am sure. Thank you, Peggy, for your witty and meaningful comments. Very much appreciated.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on October 08, 2020:

I enjoyed your short stories within the longer one. As to expressing Shoeb's creativity, perhaps he is going to find other creative outlets? We can all speculate as to which path he would choose.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

Yes, how right you are! That should have been interesting and passionate for Shoeb. A great idea that didn't come across my mind. But his loved ones are too traditional and wouldn't like him to try anything online for a living. Thank you, Dora, for your splendid comments. I do appreciate them.

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on October 08, 2020:

You used an interesting and unique format, including a story within a story. Good! Shoeb could have tried something unique too, by writing both creative and technical articles.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

Your comment made me smile, Bill. Thank you for your insightful comments. Truly Appreciated.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on October 08, 2020:

Very spooky twist to this one. Of course he should keep writing his stories. Who could resist that kind of temptation?

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

That is exactly what Shoeb didn't like- he didn't like his creative stories to come true in life. Otherwise, he was okay with writing. And on top of there was family pressure. Thank you, Pamela, for your insightful comments. I really appreciate them.

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on October 08, 2020:

This is a very interesting story with all the overtones of horros when those stories come true. I think Shoeb should continue writing even if his stories are coming true, as maybe that will change or we sure don't know what is next. I think it is fun to anticipate the next story

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

Probably Shoeb should have continued with his writing but somehow it would have been very hard for him to continue with all his family and loved ones against the idea. Besides, most of all he didn't like the spooky effects his writing resulted in.

Thank you, Lorna, for your suggestion and meaningful comments. It makes me super happy when you say that my own creative flair is becoming more obvious. I am also delighted that after all, you enjoyed the tale.

Lorna Lamon on October 08, 2020:

I liked the edgy feel to this story Rosina, however, I feel that Shoeb could have had the best of both worlds by continuing with his writing. You have managed to convey the feelings of his family and their traditional way of thinking against a background of Shoeb's creative talent.

I feel that with each story your own creative flair is becoming more obvious. Well done Rosina, I enjoyed this spooky tale.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

I am very happy you enjoyed the story and my imagination in creating it. I am really thankful for that. By the way, Lora, I really meant canny which means sharp-witted, and its noun form is canniness. I have checked it in the online dictionary while writing the story. I hope you understand. Yes, I will try to keep my work up to the mark. With all my fellow writers and well-wishers around in the community, I really wish to soar.

Lora Hollings on October 08, 2020:

Rosina, I really liked the way you used your imagination in this story, weaving together fairy tales, superstitions, and a family who is more interested in controlling Shoeb then in his own happiness and fulfillment. You did a very good job at drawing me into to this story. I just wanted to point out a typo or a misspelled word. I think you met Suzie's candidness instead of canniness. Keep up the excellent work! I really enjoyed your story.

Rosina S Khan (author) on October 08, 2020:

Yes, that's one way of looking at it. It amused me and made me smile. Yes, Shoeb has to make sure that his creative stories all have happy endings. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading and for your perspective of the story. I liked it too.

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on October 08, 2020:

This was wonderful, Rosina. Susan a unique story. As a creative writer I would be devastated if I had to stop writing poetry and short fiction etc, so I voted that Shoeb should continue despite his stories starting to come true. He just has to make sure they all have happy endings haha.

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