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The Boat Ride

Updated on December 29, 2016
Engraving of the Titanic by Willy Stöwer.
Engraving of the Titanic by Willy Stöwer.

I almost missed the boat

That sinking ship

I didn't know it was barely still afloat

So I held on and tried not to slip


I gave it one hell of a try

Playing it confident and cool

Greeting everyone who walked by

Ah, but was I also a fool?


Movin' and schmoozin'

Oh, I thought this ship

Would keep right on cruisin'

Never to end, no, not this trip


I was a welcome guest

Among those who are, no doubt,

On the exact same quest

To quench that lingering drought


I suppose, though

That even the life of the party

Must eventually go on home

Tucking memories inside the heart, see


Parties can only last so long

Sailing into the night's deep blue

Only to fade with the coming dawn

Leaving in its wake a skeleton crew


So here's to what might have been

Here's to whatever lies ahead

And to what could be again

'Cause it's not over till we're dead


Keep that music playing

When the lights are growing dim

No worries even if the boat is swaying

For if it sinks, one must only learn to swim

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      Bill Holland 4 months ago from Olympia, WA

      Metaphors ooze from this powerful poem, and I love metaphors. :) Happy New Year, Shannon!

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Thanks, Bill! It started out as a more direct and simplistic metaphor. I intended for it to be one of my short , quick poems when I jotted down the idea for it. Thought it just needed a little editing. But a little editing turned into this. And then, for some reason, I thought of "The Great Gatsby."

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 4 months ago from The Caribbean

      I like the blunt philosophical truths. "Parties can only last so long." "Itt's not over till we're dead." Good poetry.

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Thanks, MsDora. I'm often blunt and say exactly what's on my mind. However, I am also told it sometimes comes out more abrasive than I intend or even feel. And then I inadvertently offend someone. But I can't help how people choose to interpret me, sometimes even after I explain myself for clarification. The nice thing about poetry is that I don't have to explain because it's (especially this one) open to interpretation.

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      Eric Dierker 4 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      I often think along these lines. A funny thing about that, I actually think I like thinking about boats more than being on them really. Thank you for this.

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Hi Eric,

      I don't mind boats that much. But I haven't been on them often and I've never been on a big ship. I think, though, that I'd like to take a cruise some day.

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      Hari Prasad S 4 months ago from Bangalore

      Superb.

      - hari

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Thank you, Hari.

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      Maria Jordan 4 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

      Wise and optimistic reality interwoven in these lines, dear Shannon.

      I had only heard one Gotye song...this song from The Great Gatsby is a powerful choice.

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      Paula 4 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Shan...This is a winner IMHO..and I'll tell why I say this. I especially enjoy poems & stories that allow the reader's imagination to run wild. It seems to me that each person can translate this poem in whatever direction their heart and thoughts take them.

      It's also fascinating to read it more than once with a different drift each time.

      This is the perfect work of art for a professor to open for a lengthy class discussion in translating & appreciating poetry.

      Excellent. Paula

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Thanks, Maria. I'm glad you like that song. My internet is not high speed and it didn't stream very well when I tried to listen. But I heard enough to get a sense of the melody and looked the lyrics up online. So I've not really heard it. Good to know it works.

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Wow, Paula. Your humble opinion humbles me! And now I'm at a loss of words for a reply to you.

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      Paula 4 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

      Hey....You can be humble if you like, it's OK....as long as you recognize, "when you're good, you're good!"

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Awwwww, shucks! . . . Where's the bashful emoji?

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      Shyron E Shenko 4 months ago from Texas

      Beautiful, Shannon, I love it, very emotional, I agree with Paula.

      "when you're good, you're good"

      Blessings my friend.

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Thank you, Shryon. Hope you have a wonderful year ahead. Blessings to you too.

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      Gypsy Rose Lee 4 months ago from Riga, Latvia

      Loved the poetic boat ride. Love that ending and so true you only have to learn how to swim. Happy New Year to you and yours and many blessings.

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      Missy Smith 4 months ago from Florida

      Love the poem, Shan. Love the last lines the most;

      Keep that music playing

      When the lights are growing dim

      No worries even if the boat is swaying

      For if it sinks, one must only learn to swim

      Many Blessings to you and your family! Happy New Year!

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Thanks, Gypsy! I hope your year has gotten off to a great start!

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      Shannon 4 months ago from Texas

      Hi Missy,

      Thanks. I'm glad you like those lines. I try to stay positive no matter what comes my way. It's not always easy, but I belive there's always hope for something better. So that comes out in a lot of what I write and I think that no matter how someone chooses to interpret this one, it still has a positive note with the ending. :)

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      Faith-Hope-Love 3 months ago

      One Word. Excellent. Keep them coming.

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      John Hansen 3 months ago from Queensland Australia

      Another very interesting poem from you, Shanmarie. I especially like the last stanza. Good job.

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      Shannon 3 months ago from Texas

      Thank you, Faith-Hope-Love. I'm sure more will come. I just can't say when or how often.

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      Shannon 3 months ago from Texas

      Thank you, Jodah. I like a positive ending. :) Glad you like it.

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