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Raindrops and Teardrops Per Brenda’s Prompt

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13th Prompt from Brenda Arledge

Brenda Arledge has given us a prompt 13 weeks in a rom, and this week the prompt is raindrops. I felt this word gave us several thoughts, and I started thinking about it. I like to take my time and think about what I will write.

I have now written an acrostic poem and a short story to meet this challenge.

Acrostic Poem

Raindrops are like teardrops

Always will be ready to flow

In response to hurt and pain

No smiles and no more glow

Do not despair and cry today

Reign in your tears and pray

Or understand this won’t stay

Pull up those bootstraps

Say no to tears, push them away

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Teardrops

Jennifer closed the drapes as she was tired of watching the storm. Tom had left in a hurry in response to her angry words, and she knew he would not be back for a while. He had slammed the door, jumped in his sporty car and sped away.

Jennifer was hurt and teardrops flowed down her face. Oscar, her tuxedo cat, rubbed against her legs and meowed as he sensed something was wrong. Jennifer reached down and scooped him up. She put him in her lamp and snuggled with him.

Tom is a six foot tall, good looking man with green eyes and dark hair. He did not like Jennifer questioning his motives, and he was going to spend the money for that motorcycle whether she liked it or not. He had driven home drunk the night before, then when he woke up Saturday morning all he could talk about was buying a motorcycle. Some guy he met in the bar last night was selling one. He thought it was a good deal, and he had always wanted one despite the ongoing money woes.

Jennifer was concerned about the bills and how much Tom was drinking lately. They both had college loans to pay off, and they lived in a small apartment. Jennifer cried until she was out of tears.

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When Jennifer woke up Sunday morning Tom had not come home. She knew they couldn’t go on like this. She called her Aunt Lorie, a wise lady, as she had always felt close to her. She knew her parents would give her the ‘I told you so’ line. She pulled her long auburn hair back and slipped on a pair of jeans and an old shirt.

Once Jennifer got to her aunt’s house she started to cry before she could tell her aunt about the problem. After several minutes when she became more composed she told her aunt what was happening with Tom.

Her aunt looked into her blue eyes slowly and said, “What do you want to do?”

“I don’t know,” said Jennifer.

“Well, you need to decide if you want to end this marriage or if you want to see if it can be fixed.”

“I want to fix it if possible”, said Jennifer.

“Then, you need to tell Tom exactly that,” said Aunt Lorie. “Communication is everything in any relationship. Yelling or being angry will not fix your problems.”

“I don’t know if Tom will do anything different,” whined Jennifer.

“Well, maybe it is time to present an ultimatum”, said her aunt. “As I said, communication Jennifer!”

“I know you are right Aunt Lorie, and I will try”.

When Jennifer went home Tom was in bed. Later that afternoon when Tom arose Jennifer was ready to talk to him.

“Tom, if you want this marriage to work you have to get some help with your drinking. I don’t want to be angry with you, and I want us to move forward together. I want us to be happy like we were two years ago when we married.”

“I know”, said Tom. “I can’t seem to stop drinking, Last night I drank so much I passed out in the car. I don’t really want to stop drinking but I know it is a problem.” Tom looked down as teardrops ran down his cheeks.

Jennifer was glad to hear Tom admit he had a problem. I know of a center that can help, Tom. I love you, and I want our marriage to work.”

“I love you too Jennifer. I haven’t meant to hurt you.”

”I know Tom. I really do.”

Tom entered rehab that day. Jennifer was so happy that he was getting help. There were no teardrops that day.

Raindrops Keep Falling on My Head

© 2021 Pamela Oglesby

Comments

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 18, 2021:

Hi Shauna,

Yes, I wanted to do something different this time, so a story it was. I love happy endings also. I am glad you liked it.

Thank you for your comments.

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on May 18, 2021:

Pamela, it's so nice to see someone write a short story based on Brenda's prompts. You did a fine job of the poem and the story. I'm so glad Tom and Jennifer are working towards mending their marriage. Hopefully, they'll only cry tears of joy from now on.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 12, 2021:

Hi Ann,

I did think the teardrops and raindrops went well together. I'm glad you liked the poem and story.

Thank you for your comments. Stay well!

Ann Carr from SW England on May 12, 2021:

I love this, both your poem and your story. It's a great idea to link the raindrops with teardrops - very similar aren't they and both can bring a refreshing change!

Ann

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 12, 2021:

Hi MG,

I appreciate your very thoughtful comments.

MG Singh from UAE on May 12, 2021:

A beautiful poem and story that reveals your sensitive mind. You have encapsulated feelings so nicely in this poem and story, making me think.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 12, 2021:

Hi Audrey,

I always like happy endings too. I am glad you liked by effort.

I appreciate your comments. Stay safe and healthy!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 12, 2021:

Hi Cheryl,

I appreciate your comments and I am glad you liked to response to Brenda's prompt.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 12, 2021:

Hi Flourish,

Of course Tom will get help as we couldn't have a happy ending otherwise. Thank you for your comments. Take care.

Audrey Hunt from Idyllwild Ca. on May 11, 2021:

You rose to the challenge with your lovely poem and creative short story. I love happy endings. Thank you, and Brenda for this prompt.

Cheryl E Preston from Roanoke on May 11, 2021:

Absolutely charming.

FlourishAnyway from USA on May 11, 2021:

Good job with the challenge. I'm glad that Tom is getting help with his problem before it gets even worse.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Peggy,

Of course Tom gets the help as we love happy endings. I appreciate your comments, as always. Hope you atre having a good week.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on May 11, 2021:

You did a great job with this challenge with your poem and short story. I hope that Tom will get the help he needs to recover. No more teardrops need be shed!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Ms Dora,

You summed the story up perfectly. Care and communication is the only good way to live.

I appreciate your comments.

Blessings.

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on May 11, 2021:

Jennifer set the stage for moving ahead by advising her husband that she wanted happiness, not hurt. He needed help and was open to receiving it. Care and communication saved the day. Good lessons here. Thanks for a good read.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Igra,

I am glad you liked the poem and story. I thought comparing teardrops to raindrops was a good idea.

Thank you so much for your very nice comments.

Blessings.

Iqra from East County on May 11, 2021:

Hi Pamela, How are you?

you have responded beautifully to Brenda Arledge's prompt. I loved comparing the raindrops to teardrops, as well as the short story. Of course, Pamela you are the best writer.

I really enjoy.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Misbah,

I am glad you enjoyed the poem and the story. I thought teardrops and raindrops worked well together.

I appreciate your comments, as always.

Much love and blessings.

Misbah Sheikh from The World of Poets on May 11, 2021:

Hi Pamela,

I enjoyed both the poem and the story. The poem is so lovely. You are doing so well. The comparison between raindrops and tears is beautiful. A perfect response to Brenda's prompt.

Blessings and Love with lots of smiles

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Linda,

I took a couple of days to write and revise the poem and particularly the story. I do love happy endings. I also enjoy the challenge of writing an acrostic poem.

I appreciate your comments, as always Linda. Take care and God bless you.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Brenda,

You have pulled out all the important points of the poem and the story. I do believe in open communication as I don't think there is any other way to have a good relationship. I thought using teardrops worked well with our prompt, 'raindrops'.

I appreciate you carefully looking at each part of the poem and the story. Thank you for your generous comments. Blessings.

Linda Lum from Washington State, USA on May 11, 2021:

What a beautiful weaving of poem and story together; you told the story so well. I could feel the pain of both individuals, and so glad that a happy ending is in store for them. You rose to the occasion and met Brenda's challenge. Well done, my friend.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on May 11, 2021:

Pamela

You have written an excellent piece on this one.

An acrostic poem & a story.

Raindrops are the perfect comparison for tears.

You also remind us to pray & tell us these tears will go away.

I love this part:

Pull up those bootstraps

Say no to tears, push them away

In your short story you once again use teardrops to represent raindrops.

This story is very heartfelt & touching with a strong message.

No matter how upset we may be, don't just close the door.

Open and Honest Communication is the key to a good relationship.

This is a wonderful story with a happy ending.

I'm so glad she could talk with him and he was ready to get the help he needed.

So often, things don't go this way.

I love how early in the story you show her genuine feelings and love for him. It's evident that despite her tears, she is only worried about him.

That's love.

I will post a link in the article.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Kyler,

Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments. It sounds like your childhood was rough, but here you are! Take care.

Kyler J Falk from California on May 11, 2021:

Heck yeah, that acrostic poem hits deep. It takes me back to my childhood, but in a way that makes me proud of how hard I had to work to stay alive.

It's strange how easily a great author can throw you into situations they never meant to with their words, and you are nothing less than a great author, Pamela!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Lorna,

I love the challenge of writing an acrostic poem, so I am glad you enjoyed it and the story. I guess I only write happy endings.

I appreciate your nice comments. Blessings.

Lorna Lamon on May 11, 2021:

I love the comparison to raindrops in your acrostic poem Pamela, which I enjoyed reading. The story had me hooked and I love a happy ending. Great writing on both counts.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Chitrangada,

I thought teardrops worked well with raindrops. I am glad you liked it.

I appreciate your reading and your nice comments. Blessings.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi Bill,

Thank you for your thoughtful comments. I have been just writing poems to Brenda's prompts but decided to do something different this time. Ultimatums sometimes work, but we all like happy endings.

Hope you are having a good week!

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on May 11, 2021:

This is a beautiful response to the word prompt, Raindrops! I liked it when you associate raindrops with teardrops!

The poem and the story are well expressed and an engaging read! Thank you for sharing this!

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on May 11, 2021:

A poem and a short story! That is what I call a response to a challenge. Well done, my friend. The story hit home for this recovering alcoholic. Sometimes ultimatums are what's needed to right the ship in a relationship.

Well done and Happy Tuesday to you, my friend.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on May 11, 2021:

Hi John,

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the story. I appreciate your comments, as always. Blessings.

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on May 11, 2021:

Great job on the acrostic poem and the short story, Pamela. I enjoyed both.

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