Potty Mouth: Comedy Flash Fiction by cam

Updated on August 8, 2017
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Potty Mouth

"I just don't think I can do it anymore." Ralph shook his head and stared down at his shoes.

"What made you decide never to kiss another woman? said Craig.

"I watched a video at my dentist's office." Ralph tossed his hands up in despair and flopped onto the couch.

"A video of what? Some guy telling you not to kiss women?"

"This guy makes a lot of sense. He backs everything up with facts."

"So what's the basic premise?"

"The mouth is a warm, moist environment, perfect for growing all kinds of bacteria. Really, you should see the pictures of these things. They're like all the most horrible, strange, mutant, hairy monsters from outer space that you've ever seen in sci-fi and horror films, except these guys are real, and they live on your tongue."

"You mentioned facts at one point in this conversation."

"Well, try this one on for size. The human mouth has one hundred million microorganisms per milliliter of saliva. A public toilet only has thirty-two hundred."

"So you'd rather kiss a public toilet than a woman?"

"I'd be thirty-one-thousand times less likely to catch some dreaded disease."

I'm going to ignore the fact that you actually did the math."

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There was a knock at the door, and Craig opened it. "Oh, hi, Jonesy. Come on in. We're just discussing the reason Ralph has decided never to kiss another woman for the rest of his life."

"Filthy mouths," said Jonesy.

"Not you too?" Craig shook his head and went into the kitchen.

"Oh, you're the kind of guy who thinks that when he goes out on a date it's just him and the pretty lady. Well there's a whole colony of freakish devils lurking you know where." Jonesy opened his mouth and pointed inside. "Lala land, that's where you live, Craig, lala land."

"Ok, smarty pants, what do you do when a woman wants to kiss you?" Craig sprayed Lysol on the countertop and wiped it off.

"Just what you're doing right there, buddy, I purify." Jonesy held up his index finger as though he were making an important point.

"Purify? With what?" said Ralph. "Don't tell me you gargle with Lysol."

"With one of these." Jonesy produced a small, gel filled capsule from his pocket. Just pop it into your mouth before you start kissing and your mouth will be as clean as a baby's behind."

"I don't think I like the analogy," said Ralph. "And besides, that only means she would be protected from my mouth, but what about me? There she sits, ready to get it on, and she's got a loaded weapon for a mouth. I go in for a little smooch and she lets me have it with both barrels, little hairy creatures blasting from her mouth into mine. It's practically murder, I tell ya."

"Wait, I'm not finished," said Jonesy. While you're kissing, you push the remainder of the capsule into her mouth. If she's sufficiently distracted by your kissing prowess, she won't notice.

"That's disgusting," said Craig.

"You mean just like that we can both be sterile kissing machines?" Ralph rose from the couch.

"Certainly. I use it all the time. But remember, it all depends on kissing prowess."

"You might want to practice that prowess thing on the mirror in your bathroom, Ralph." Jerry continued wiping the counter.

"Could I use that one, Jonesy? I'd like to try it tonight with Janis." Ralph held out his hand, and the hope for any future romance landed in his palm.


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"Well that was a very sensual movie." Janis sat in Ralph's car outside her apartment. "It kind of left me feeling a little frisky if you know what I mean." She giggled and snuggled as close to Ralph as the console between them would allow.

Ralph slipped the gel capsule into his mouth.

"What did you just put into your mouth?" said Janis.

"Nothing," said Ralph. "I didn't put anything in my mouth."

"Yes you did. I saw you put something in your mouth."

"Don't be silly, Janis. Come here and kiss me." Ralph held Janis and their lips touched. She was beginning to moan a little and Ralph was getting excited.

"What was that?" Janis jerked away from Ralph.

"What was what?"

"You just slid something into my mouth with your tongue." Janis reached into her mouth and extracted the remainder of the gel capsule. "What is this, Ralph?"

"It's just a little something to clean your mouth."

"You think I have a dirty mouth?"

Ralph began to explain and fortunately lived to regret it.


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"Hi Ralph. How'd the date go last night?" Craig held the door open for his friend to enter.

"You know that little pill Jonesy gave me?"

"You mean the one that was supposed to give you both mouths as pure as the wind driven snow?

"Actually, Janis's mouth got quite a bit dirtier after I tried to use it."

"OOH, that doesn't sound so good."

"I was doing pretty well digging my way out of a very deep hole and tried one more time to explain."

"One explanation too far, huh?"

"Yep. I used the public toilet analogy."

"So then what happened?"

"We went into her apartment, and she took me into the bathroom."

"I don't like the sound of this."

"She said if I ever wanted another kiss from her, I had to lick the toilet."

"And you said, so long, sweet cheeks, and walked out, right?"

"Craig, I really like this girl."

"Don't tell me you licked the toilet, because if you do tell me you licked the toilet, I'm throwing you out of my apartment."

"Which is exactly what she did after I licked the toilet."

"Out."

"But....."

"Out."

"Just one more thing, Craig, then I'll leave."

"What is it, potty mouth."

"Can I borrow your Lysol?"


With a Fresh Lemon Flavor

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        Chris Mills 14 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        Shauna, I am so happy to see the word funny in reference to one of my attempts at comedy. I know it isn't Seinfeld, but It's mine and I'm proud of it. Thank you your comment.

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        Shauna L Bowling 14 months ago from Central Florida

        Gross but funny, Chris! Brings a whole new meaning to the term "potty mouth"!

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        mactavers, so nice to see you here. Thank you for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        cindyvine, another word I would not have expected. Entertaining? Thank you. That is music to my ears.

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        Coffeequeeen, The word laugh after one of my comedies? Miracles do happen. Thank you. I've worked hard on this genre. Maybe something is happening. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        Randi, thank you. I have already gotten my prompts for the competition, and I did not get comedy in round one. I got suspense. I can do suspense. I appreciate your comments very much.

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        Venkatachari M, It is so gratifying to read the word, funny, following a comedy I wrote. Thank you for that wonderful compliment.

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        mactavers 15 months ago

        Loved it!

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        Cindy Vine 15 months ago from Cape Town

        Entertaining!

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        Louise Powles 15 months ago from Norfolk, England

        That story made me laugh. Really enjoyed reading it. And I love the images too.

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        Randi Benlulu 15 months ago from Mesa, AZ

        Very funny and engaging. And believable! You definitely have a winner here. I loved it!

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        Venkatachari M 15 months ago from Hyderabad, India

        Chris! This is very funny and entertaining. I am all at smiles reading the ending. What a great story!

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        MizBejabbers, What kind of stew, I might be interested. Sorry to ruin your lunch. But I'm glad you stopped by to read. Nice to see you.

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        I'm glad you laughed, Ruby, and also glad you told me so. That's the only way to know if my comedy is actually beginning to be funny. I think I saw a notification that you posted a hub today. I'll get over and take a look.

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        Ruby Jean Richert 15 months ago from Southern Illinois

        Well you made me laugh. Poor guys. I guess they never heard of tic tacs. lol...

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        Becky, preteen boys....that is exactly the level of maturity I wanted for these guys. Can you imagine how un-funny this story would be if these were three mature adults?

        "Well, Craig I read in a medical journal that the human mouth is quite dirty. I'm inclined to never kiss another woman in my life. What say you, my friend?"

        "I say that's a bit of an overreaction, Ralph. Why don't we do some more reading in those journals of yours and see what we can find. Oh, look, our friend Mr. Jones just arrived. Lets see what he has to say about this issue."

        Mature is not funny. :)

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        Doris James-MizBejabbers 15 months ago

        Ewwwww. I opened this on my lunch hour and started reading. Would anyone care for the rest of this stew?

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        Martie Coetser 15 months ago from South Africa

        Oh my gosh, I love kissing, but hence I will always remember this story! Urgh!

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        Larry Rankin 15 months ago from Oklahoma

        Very humorous:-)

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        Becky Katz 15 months ago from Hereford, AZ

        You always do Chris. Sometimes, the creepy or ugh factor, outweighs the laugh though. I definitely was reminded of pre-teen boys in this.

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        Becky,I knew I could make you laugh.

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        Becky Katz 15 months ago from Hereford, AZ

        hahahagah

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        Eric, Thanks for the enthusiastic response. It is nerve racking for me to write comedy. I have learned, though, that to do it right, I have to let go of inhibitions. It's beyond the inhibitions where the humor lies, at least that's where I am at the moment with this genre.

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        Chris Mills 15 months ago from Missoula, Montana at least until August 2018

        Becky, you know what I love about you? No BS. You say what you think and that means a lot. Thanks for reading. I hope you recover quickly.

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        John Hansen 15 months ago from Queensland Australia

        This was hilarious, Chris. If you draw comedy at the NYC challenge, and the prompts fit, you have a winner. Great job.

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        Eric Dierker 15 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

        I just love it. I needed a boost and I sure got it. In this home we think potty stories are the funniest. A cool part to this is tooth brushes in the bathroom get the almost invisible mist from a toilet flushing. hihhiihi

        Boy you better let me see your entry. Or should I not use that term here?

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        Becky Katz 15 months ago from Hereford, AZ

        Sooo sick that I am appalled.

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