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My Foreign Queen, In Response to Bill's Challenge Prompt 4


Manatita is an esteemed author living in London, UK. He writes spiritual books, flash fiction and esoteric poetry, his favourite genre.

Rules or no rules

According to Bill, there are no significant rules. A Flash Fiction or story of about 500 words or 2,000 for the short story, if you like. Bill and I are similar. We don't adhere strictly to rules. Nevertheless, I have included the one photo prompt for this piece.

Reading Bill's Hub with link below, will tell you all about the value of prompts for those who need this. Peace.

My Queen



We met on the internet and I was immediately captivated! That enchanting smile, as pure as the radiant moon … those deep brown alluring eyes, as if scanning into my joyful heart for affinity. I listened, she chatting away from behind the screens, telling me of her hopes, her visions of tomorrow … a life with us together … boy! Did my blood rush!

Her voice was sweet, charming, eloquent … scholarly, but with a sweet simplicity of dress, yet fitting for a Queen. She wore a Dhuku Gele head-wrap, ebony eyes gleaming like the sun, surrounded by trees in the National Park, where her video was made. She wore a pink blouse, neatly tied at waistline, flowing in symmetry with her extended colourful skirt, laced with Caribbean flora and coconut palms.

Sebeena kept giggling; I could feel a sweet naiveite and burst of emotions, as our spirits merged, even with me just sitting in front of my computer screen … she, in a distant land. I was immersed in love, with this stunning and charismatic beauty.



The Story

It all happened by chance one year ago. She was looking for a guy and I was looking for a girl. She was twenty-five, with me just turning thirty. A perfect match in age, I thought. We were introduced by online friends, who had studied both our works and felt that we would be suited to each other.

Two passionate writers, we shared much in common and she would often tell me of her dreams and aspirations, how she saw life, her moral values; sense of adventure and creativity. Time passed and we were like the moon and stars, sharing our lustre, finding space for each other … playing with our closeness and warmth, with great fervour and zest.

It was inevitable that we would meet someday … we both knew that this was only a matter of time. So here I am, standing outside a train station in Dacca, Delhi, awaiting my beloved one.



The train was exactly as she described it. Green front with a beige top, light green on the sides. Not fancy, but safe, sturdy, reliable. It was bang on at 1500 hrs. I first heard the hooting sound, then the bounding metallic roll and screeching halt, as the brakes were applied. I saw the bellow of smoke at the rear and the beautiful scenery, like forest trees, paying silent homage from the background.

I saw the inspector up front, casually patrolling the line with his smart navy-blue uniform, to include his military-looking cap. Hands in pocket, he strolled calmly forward and all seemed well. Across the tracks and to the left of the train, was a pink carriage, probably a combination of fuel, food, men and maintenance, but I was eager and too busy looking for my Sebeena to notice much.

Suddenly she appeared, like a royal princess, wearing her head-wrap like a Queen would wear a tiara, sweet neck decorated with ornaments and draped in clothing of the finest silk. I rushed forward, unto the gravel track, as she opened the carriage compartment and leapt straight into my arms.

Manatita, The Lantern Carrier. 29th February, 2020


Writing prompts

© 2020 manatita44


manatita44 (author) from london on March 05, 2020:

Thanks me Dear.

Too true. Appreciated!

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on March 05, 2020:

You reveal your romantic heart whether your write poetry or prose. Beautiful story. Beautiful photos. Good read!

manatita44 (author) from london on March 04, 2020:

Ah John.

I actually knew one from school.

Back to your sentiment. So charming ... so sweet. Welcome here. Much gratitude

John Brown on March 04, 2020:

It is such a captivating love story. I love every bit of it.

manatita44 (author) from london on March 03, 2020:

Thank you, my Didi Ji.

I was thinking of you a.m. Not sure why. Perhaps I'll remember later. Peace!

P.S You will like my last Hub.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on March 03, 2020:

Beautiful and romantic love story. A great response to the picture prompt.

Your description of Sebenna is beautiful.

And they lived happily, ever after—-. I like happy endings.

Thanks for sharing.

manatita44 (author) from london on March 01, 2020:


Another romantic? I suppose you have to be, with such an eye for the aesthetic and ethereal.

That is part of my background, but we discussed 'time' a moment ago, didn't we? (Chuckle) What I wish to do before Grace takes this body, is a Magnum Opus of Poetry and to tell spirituality in a simple way, using our Christian scriptures. I'm nearly done and have been nearly done for 4 years! As is with the poems. I have 800, enough for 4 books! I need to leave a divine legacy.

"MY Supreme, my Supreme, my Supreme,

Do give me, 48 hours a day, to accomplish,

Everything thing that I need to accomplish,

Every single day." - Sri Chinmoy

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on March 01, 2020:

You took Bill's photo prompt and ran with it creating a beautiful love story. Well done, Manatita! You should do more like this!

manatita44 (author) from london on March 01, 2020:

Hi Miz,

Once started, it flowed too perfect for any other ending. Haha. Thank you so much.

Hi Chris,

You mean you would have killed the buzz? Aah! Thank you so much!


Verlie, happy endings can be very beautiful sometimes. Thank you so much!

Doris James MizBejabbers from Beautiful South on February 29, 2020:

You did a wonderful job, Manatita. That was a nice ending because so many online romances end up in disappointment. The photos you added were very beautiful, too.

Chris Mills from Traverse City, MI on February 29, 2020:

Oh, I am so glad you are not me. I think we both know how this story might have ended if I were driving. Beautiful—beautifully written every step of the way. You did not disappoint.

Verlie Burroughs from Canada on February 29, 2020:

Vivid story telling Manitita. I like your approach. And the happy ending!

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:

My forte also, Pamela.

I grew up as a short story and poetry writer.

Your sentiment is heartfelt and loving. Thank you so much!

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on February 29, 2020:

This is a beautiful love story, Manatita. Sebeena was described as such a beautiful woman and I hope their love lasts forever. This was such a beautiful love story to be told in such a few words. You surely met the challenge and then some.

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:

Ah Donna

So you are a romantic too? Awesome! Thank you so much!

Donna Rayne from Greenwood, Indiana on February 29, 2020:

Manatita, this is such a beautiful love story and at the end when you were waiting for her to get off the train, I was hoping she would come out soon rather than not show up at all!

Love it!

Donna Rayne

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:


There is always something sweet and special, as well as intriguing and adventurous about these relationships. Eric seems to be saying he met his wife on line. They can work.

Thank you so much. You sweet romantic soul!

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:

Well Lorna,

I grew up as a Creative Writer and both Language and Literature, are my best subjects. Thank you for your wonderful sentiment. Highly appreciated.

You know in Theatres, we have scrub nurses, surgeons, anaesthetists ... so speciality is great too.

Lorna Lamon on February 29, 2020:

Romance is still alive Manatita and how well you capture its beauty. A lovely story captivating in its telling and accompanied by beautiful photos. I envy the ability to write stories, something I have never been good at. I shall have to stick to poems. An enjoyable read and I love a happy ending. Well done.

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on February 29, 2020:

Manatita, this is such a beautiful love story. I hope their love continues to grow and nurture each other.

I once met someone online. We had a brief, but very hot relationship once we met in person. We even lived together for a while. Turns out, though he was a raging alcoholic. I ended the relationship knowing it was not healthy for me or my young (at the time) son.

Your story is enlightening and bright with promise.

Great job!

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:

Thank you My Bhaia Ji. Are you going to try? Appreciate your fine sentiment. Hare Krishna

Venkatachari M from Hyderabad, India on February 29, 2020:

A very beautiful and natural touch to the scenery. I enjoyed your story a lot, Manatita. Your narrations are excellent appealing to the heart.

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:

Thanks John.

I gave this one a light touch. Appreciations.


I wanted to stay romantic for Love's sake. Lol. Thank you so much!

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on February 29, 2020:

Such a romantic! Lovely story with a happy ending. I enjoyed reading your story. Happy trails to you...

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on February 29, 2020:

A very pleasant story with a happy ending manatita. Nice photos too, and I loved the song African Queen.

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:


Didn't you get my mail? Let me know.

Thanks for the lovely sentiment. Om Shanti!

Rosina S Khan on February 29, 2020:

Cute story with a happy ending. I loved it. Thank you for contributing a piece of lovely fiction, Manatita.

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:

Haha. Bill,

I did it without the photo. It is actually different but the photo helps. My mind is filled with fertile imaginations. Lol. Thank you so much!

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on February 29, 2020:

Absolutely beautiful! Your description of Sebeena is perfect. Without the photo I could still picture here. Well done my poetic friend. You crossed over into prose, but it is still poetic.

blessings always

manatita44 (author) from london on February 29, 2020:


Sweet Chuckle. Yes, I understand, Bro. I almost ended it with marriage, but one aspect of the Flash is to leave you guessing. Ha ha. Thank you and especially as you can identify from experience. Not me though. Just Flash! Haha.

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on February 29, 2020:

Well this is wonderful. I met my wife and then left across the Pacific. We courted through the Internet. 20 years later our marriage is safe.

Of course I loved the ending.

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