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Money Can Not Take The Place Of Love: Flash Fiction

I love to write flash fiction, using a moral standard to not pass judgement until you look deeper inside.

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Eva Needed Her Father's Love Desperately.

The lights flickered. A wolf howled in the distance, She had no where else to go, so she reluctantly rang the door bell.

The maid, Stella answered and said, " Eva where on earth have you been? I've been so worried. " Eva stood looking down and answered, " I have no one else to turn to. " Her father, Andrew yelled, " Who is it Stella? " The maid answered by taking Eva by the arm and ushering her to her father's office. He immediately saw who it was and spun around in his chair.

Eva thought, " Just like every day of my life, I'm invisible to him. He didn't even know I was gone or what I've been through this past six months. "

Stella took her by the hand, leading her to the kitchen and asking, " are you hungry? " Eva hated to admit she was, but since doing drugs she could hardly tolerate food.

Stella prepared her a nice bowl of soup, which she consumed in a flash. She then went to her room, everything looked the same except her bed was neatly made.

The night she left came back vividly. She was seventeen, had just graduated high school. Her mother had died when she was ten. Her father had treated her like a visitor, only speaking to her when she annoyed him.

Stella had been like a mother to her and she loved her, but she desperately needed her father's love.

The night she left he had yelled, " Go to your room and stop bothering me. " She went but was furious. She thought, " I wonder if I disappear will he miss me, or even know I'm gone? "

They lived on the outskirts of Chicago. Money was no object. She always had enough for anything she wanted.

The night she left, she hailed a cab and went to the city, finding a club with loud music and a crowd her age. She joined in and soon was drinking alcohol, then was given some speed. She got higher than a kite. The next six months were spent drinking and doing drugs.

One morning she woke up feeling terrible and missing home. Now she's wondering why she bothered coming back.

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Eva knew she didn't want to do drugs and drink alcohol, she also knew she needed an education so she registered at a small college close to home.

She promised herself that she wouldn't bother her father.

The stock market was his God.

She remembers when she was little she would venture into his office to watch the ticker tape until he would notice she was there, then telling her, " Go to your room. " The words still hurt.

It was September and classes were starting. She was busy and happy in a guarded way. She had an uneventful four years, graduating with a degree in teaching. She was happy to be teaching in the same school that she'd gone to. Her class consisted of junior high students, a class of twenty two,

She continued to live at home and staying out of her father's way.

One evening as she drove into the driveway an ambulance came with sirens blaring. She ran into the house and was met by Stella who told her that she had gone into her father's office to clean and found him slumped over in his chair. She quickly called the ambulance.

He died on the way to the hospital.

Post Note: The moral of this story, " Money can never take the place of love, so live happily and love deeply.

Comments

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on June 08, 2020:

Hello Brenda, sorry for being late. Thank you for the nice compliment. I love writing flash fiction.

BRENDA ARLEDGE from Washington Court House on June 03, 2020:

You have a flare for writing short stories.

It is a shame that dad didn't understand how love could enrich his life.

Awful thst he didn't treat the daughter well after her mother's death.

Important reminder to live happily and love deeply.

Have a great day!

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on December 05, 2019:

Hello Nithya. I agree with your comment. There should be nothing more important than family. Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

Nithya Venkat from Dubai on December 04, 2019:

Great story, great write. You have woven the moral through the flash fiction. It is sad that she never got the love of her father. He missed out on the best part of life-having a daughter.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on December 03, 2019:

Hello Sara. I totally agree with your comment. Just because you give birth doesn't mean you will be a good parent. Thanks so much for your wise input.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on December 03, 2019:

Hello Marieta, So glad you liked my story. Thank you.

Sara Sarwar Riaz from Michigan, USA on December 01, 2019:

Oh I missed reading your flash fiction. I love how 3 different aspects of life and relationships were defined in a rather brief collection of words. A young girl who had lost and found her way back in life. A father who had prioritized wealth over relationships. And a mother figure, who proved not all relationships are derived from blood. Very well conceived and written !

Marieta Maglas on December 01, 2019:

Beautiful story, thank you for sharing.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 30, 2019:

Hello Linda. I agree with your comment completely. Having money is not a sin, the sin is loving it more than family and not sharing with the less fortunate. Thank you for stopping by Ruby's place.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 30, 2019:

Hello Luis. Glad you liked my story. Thank you for stopping by.

Luis G Asuncion from City of San Jose Del Monte, Bulacan, Philippines on November 30, 2019:

Even if not a happy ending, however, the construction of the story is good. Thanks for it.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 30, 2019:

Hello Chris. So happy you found my story insightful. I knew a man like this. The daughter was ok. Thanks for coming to read my story. I like to write happy endings, not this time.

Linda Rogers from Minnesota on November 29, 2019:

The moral of the story is so true. What did he gain from worrying about money & the stock market. What is money if you can't share with and for the ones you love. Sad story that shows that dad missed out on the best gift of his life.

Luis G Asuncion from City of San Jose Del Monte, Bulacan, Philippines on November 29, 2019:

I love this story. Thanks for sharing. God bless

Chris Mills from Traverse City, MI on November 29, 2019:

Of the three characters in your story, I feel most deeply for Eva's father. Eva and Stella have a chance to be emotionally healthy and to learn to love others. Her father never allowed himself to venture in the direction of nurturing relationships. Beautiful and insightful story.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 27, 2019:

Hello Manatita. He waited too late to show any love, perhaps he had none to give. It seems his love was money. Thank you so much. Your input is always wise.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 27, 2019:

Hello Luis, so happy you liked my story. Thank you for stopping by.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 27, 2019:

Hello Nikki. You are so generous with your comments. Thank you so much. Have a wonderful Thanksgiving!

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 27, 2019:

Hello Paula. I love for you to come and visit. Have a wonderful Thanksgiving! Go easy on the turkey. Hee..

manatita44 from london on November 27, 2019:

Its sad that she never really got his Love. Again, perhaps he did not have any to give. So many humans walk around in great pain.

Luis G Asuncion from City of San Jose Del Monte, Bulacan, Philippines on November 27, 2019:

This is a good story. I love it. Thanks for sharing.

Nikki Khan from London on November 26, 2019:

I loved it, Ruby darling. Such an influential lesson this Flash Fiction teaches us. Love is most important than anything else, for sure. Thanks for reminding us once again, my dear.

Very Happy Thanksgiving!

Blessings.

Suzie from Carson City on November 26, 2019:

Ruby girl.....Hope you have a wonderful Thanksgiving! Be safe, healthy and Happy! Love ya, Paula

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 25, 2019:

Hello Audrey, always nice to see you. Glad you liked this. Enjoy every day my friend. Thank you.

Audrey Hunt from Pahrump NV on November 25, 2019:

Nice flash fiction with a powerful message. I like this, Ruby. Enjoy your day!

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 25, 2019:

Hello Mike, so good to see you back on HP. Don't you think you should be writing about Trump? Hee..Hint Hint. Thank you...

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 25, 2019:

Hello John. Happy you like the song and my sad story. Thanks for coming by.

mckbirdbks from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas on November 25, 2019:

Hi Ruby - Nice story, as always with a strong moral point. Good to read a story from you.

John Hansen from Gondwana Land on November 24, 2019:

Nice story as always, Ruby. It is a moral that we should all take note of "money can't buy love." A perfect song to include by the Beatles too.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 24, 2019:

Hello Genna. He was so busy making money, he had no room for a child. Stella was a God send. So good to see you. Thank you...Hugs.

Genna East on November 24, 2019:

The tragic figure in this story is Eva’s father. To leave this earth without ever knowing/giving love. What a hollow epitaph. Thank goodness for Stella and the love she gave to Eva. I think this is what saved her. Her future still holds promise and hope. A poignant story dear Ruby. Hugs my friend and best wishes for a warm and happy Thanksgiving. :-)

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 24, 2019:

Hello William. I saw the prompt picture and came up with this story. I really do not know why? Always happy to see you. Thank you...

William Kovacic from Pleasant Gap, PA on November 24, 2019:

And what a moral it is . . . As I said before, flash-fiction amazes me. And you do it so well, even including a moral. That's missing from a lot these days. Thank you, my friend.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 23, 2019:

Hello Juliet, so nice to meet you. I agree with your statement. Times have certainly changed, so many young people are not taught directions or not given the love they so desperately want. Thank you for reading and commenting.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 23, 2019:

Hello Peggy. This is fiction, but I've known someone who put money before his family. Thank you for the Thanksgiving wish. I hope you have a great one. Thank you.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 23, 2019:

Hello Bill, good to see you. Your comment is true, and thanks for coming to read my story.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 23, 2019:

Hello Mar. It is a sobering story for sure. I've missed you. I know you needed some time off from writing. I miss Mike too. Thanks for coming to read my sad story. Hugs.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 23, 2019:

Hello Devika. Your comment, so very true. Thank you much.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 23, 2019:

Hello Umesh, nice to meet you. Happy you found my story interesting, Thank you.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 23, 2019:

Hello Clive. You got it right, and I agree. Thanks for coming to read.

Juliet Christie Murray from Sandy Bay Jamaica on November 23, 2019:

This story is a situation that happens almost every day .There are so many lonely young individuals who walk the walk of loneliness. Wishing they had the love of a mother or father.it would be good if sometimes we stop to listen .sometimes to the unspoken word. Just.lend a listen ear and lend a helping hand like stella.this can make all the difference.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on November 23, 2019:

Money can buy many things, but most of the truly important things in life have to be earned in other ways. True love cannot be purchased. This is a sad story, but a good one. Wishing you love and happiness as we celebrate Thanksgiving this year.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on November 23, 2019:

Any story about love is a good story, my friend. The message is eternal. For those who do not hear the message, sadness awaits.

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on November 23, 2019:

A beautiful, yet sobering, story, dear Ruby. The moral of this tale is wise and ever true.

Happy and peaceful Thanksgiving to you.

Love, mar

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on November 23, 2019:

A great story! I believe that money can't buy you anything of value it is what one has within that counts the most and your story is well told of this meaning in it. Money can't replace sentimental value.

Umesh Chandra Bhatt from Kharghar, Navi Mumbai, India on November 23, 2019:

Good story. Interesting one.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 22, 2019:

Hello Pamela. So glad you approve of my story, Thanks for a comment that is encouraging. Thank you.

Ruby Jean Richert (author) from Southern Illinois on November 22, 2019:

Hello Eric. I'm glad you gave Gabe an extra hug, Thank you much for coming to read this flash. Peace.

Clive Williams from Jamaica on November 22, 2019:

I totally agree. Money can be replaced, or remade. Your life and family cant. Good write.

Pamela Oglesby from Sunny Florida on November 22, 2019:

That is the perfect moral for this type of story. Life is too short to only care about money. I like your story and it illustrates your point very well.

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on November 22, 2019:

Wonderfully done. I will give Gabe extra special hug today. You reminded that "I" need it. This confusion so many of us fathers have is just a mystery.

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