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Little Brick House

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Little Brick House

The cute little brick house looks perfect from the outside. The yard is always mowed with the edges trimmed. The flowers are beautiful. The two cars sitting in the driveway were recently washed and waxed. Julie kept the inside just as immaculate as the outside. This brick house isn’t fancy, but it always looks good. The problem is on the inside.

Sandra, a 16 year old, is lying on her bed crying. Her long red hair is tangled and her blue eyes are puffy from the tears. Sandra is slim and has a beautiful smile. Even her room is spotless, which might be considered unusual for a teenager.

She was told to not come out of her room today. Her father is mad as she got two Bs on her report card and especially because she came home late from school. Her father has not always been so strict, but only since her older brother was killed by a drunk driver while he was riding his bicycle. Her father grew angry and bitter following the death of his son.

Tom is a six foot tall, muscular man that shares Sandra’s red hair. Julie, Sandra’s mother, is a blond with dark brown eyes, and very quiet most of the time. Tom is a manager at a local credit union. The rules for Sandra include an early curfew for the few times she is even allowed to go out with friends. The expectations include straight As with all her school work and most importantly, she must be home on time.

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Sandra's Anger

The next morning Sandra came into the kitchen with her book bag ready for school. Her father had already left for work and her mother was preparing to mop the floor.

“Mother, why can’t you ever stick up for me?” asked Sandra.

“Sandra, your father only wants what is best for you. Since we lost Connor last year he is more concerned about your future.”

“Really? Does he think I am some kind of machine? He knows I am taking very hard courses this year.” Sandra yelled.

“Sandra, lower your voice. We have seen how well you have done with your grades for many years now. Why would your father think you can’t do the same right now?”

Just then Sandra’s dog, Toby, started rubbing his body on her legs waiting for his head to be scratched. Sandra briefly scratched his head, then grabbed her book bag to leave for school.

“Sandra, you need to eat some breakfast.” her mother said as Sandra hurried out the back door. Toby laid down by the door waiting for Sandra's return.

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Tom’s Shed

That Friday evening after a quiet dinner Tom went out to work in the shed. He enjoyed working with wood. He had all the important equipment and tools he needed for his various projects.

While Tom was working on his latest project Sandra had a plan of her own. She packed her backpack with some clothes, snacks and matches. She already had her sleeping bag rolled tightly. She heard her father come in from the shed so she knew her parents would be asleep soon.

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Sandra Leaves

Sandra waited until she was sure her parents were sleeping. She got the backpack and sleeping bag, then, quietly left through the back door. She headed up the mountain path that began at the end of their subdivision. She walked for about five hours before she decided to rest. She found a campsite close to a winding stream. She wasn't cold, so she just rolled out the sleeping bag and climbed in. She looked at all the beautiful stars on this clear night, then rather quickly fell asleep.

She woke a few hours later to a sunny day. Sandra was pondering her situation as she walked down to the stream and watched the ducks. She sat on a rock at the edge of the stream and tried to decide what to do next. When she left home she had planned to walk to her aunt’s house but now she wasn’t so sure.

Sandra knew her parents were worried if they had figured out she was not home. She figured her father was mad also. She just felt so frustrated, yet she loved her parents.

Sandra walked back up to her campsite, lit a fire and began to eat some of her snacks. By the early afternoon she decided to go back home. It was supper time when she arrived home.

As she walked up to the front of the house she saw her father sitting in a lawn chair with Toby lying by his feet. He stood up and held his arms out toward her. Sandra dropped her bags and ran up to her father’s arms. Sandra and her father both had tears running down their faces. Her father said, “I can’t stand to lose you too, Sandra.”

“You aren’t going to lose me Daddy.

A Million Dreams - A Daddy Daughter Duet

© 2020 Pamela Oglesby

Comments

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on September 13, 2020:

Hi Robert,

Thank you for your comments.

Robert Sacchi on September 12, 2020:

A nice story about loss and fear of loss. Nicely done.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on September 07, 2020:

Hi Maria,

I wanted each character in this story to have a side as they which each grieving in a different way. Thank you for reading and commenting.

Love and blessings to you.

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on September 06, 2020:

I am catching up on my favorite authors' posts this evening and you are at the top of the list, Pamela. This is the third story following Bill's prompts that I've read - including Shauna and Peg's.

It's fascinating how each story was so different, yet so compelling.

I'm also glad this story had a happy ending. This was a situation where I could totally see both sides. Very well written, my friend.

Love, Maria

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 30, 2020:

Hi Peg,

I think wee all like a happy ending. This family was sad due to the loss of the son, but the teen learned how important her home was for her. Thanks so much for your very nice comments.

Peg Cole from Northeast of Dallas, Texas on August 30, 2020:

Such a wonderfully vivid tale of teenage angst and the pressures that face them. I'm delighted with the outcome. It really made me feel relieved and hopeful. And the photos worked well with the story, too. Well done!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 30, 2020:

Hi Chitrangada,

The picture prompts definietly gave me the idea for th story. I am glad you liked the story.

Thank you for your very nice comments.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on August 30, 2020:

Beautiful and engaging story, and well narrated plot, with the delicacy and complexity of family relations. You kept the interest till the nice ending.

Good story telling with the picture prompts.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful story.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 29, 2020:

Hi Rajan,

I am so glad you loved the story. I think most children today do realize they are loved and that their parents have their well-being at heart. Thank you for your comments, Rajan.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 29, 2020:

Hi Doris,

I would have liked a little more understanding from my father also. I wanted the end of the story to be happy and to reflect some healing after the loss of their sonI appreciate your comments, Doris. Have a nice weekend.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 29, 2020:

Hi Sp,

Yes, I wanted to show that even with the loss os a son, the family needs to realize how much they still mean to each other. I am glad you enjoyed the story and your comments are appreciated.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 29, 2020:

Hi Peggy,

A young person leaving home could always have a sad ending. This grieving family had problemsl they all needed to deal with to find acceptance. Thanks so much for your comments.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 29, 2020:

Hi Rachal,

This famiy had problems after the loss of their son. Young people leaving home is sure not a happy ending, but I love happy endings. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. God bless you too, Rachel.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 29, 2020:

Hi Linda,

Yes, everyoe in that household was grieving, which would not be abnormal after the loss of a son and brother. Bill's photo's sure prompted my idease. I appreciate your comments, Have a good weekend.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 29, 2020:

Hi Devika,

Thank you so much for your very nice comments.

Rajan Singh Jolly from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar, INDIA. on August 28, 2020:

I loved the story and the fact that Sandra realized that her father in spite of his scoldings loved her. I think the children today must realize that parents always have their well-being at heart even if they are mad at them sometimes. Engrossing story.

Doris James MizBejabbers from Beautiful South on August 28, 2020:

This is a great story about conflict between a father and teenage daughter. I'm glad to see such a happy ending with the father seeing the light. I just wish my father had been that understanding.

Sp Greaney from Ireland on August 28, 2020:

That's a great story. It kept you interested from the very beginning.

Good to see a story where both individauls realised how much they mean to each other.

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on August 28, 2020:

Sandra's journey could have ended tragically. I am glad that she returned home and that amends appear to have taken place between her and her dad.

Rachel L Alba from Every Day Cooking and Baking on August 28, 2020:

Hi Pamela. This was such a touching story. I'm glad this had a happy ending, so many stories of young people leaving home don't. If parents and young people read this story, they can realize there are other solutions their problems besides anger and leaving home. I am pinning this story so I can read it again. Thanks for sharing.

Blessings to you.

Linda Lum from Washington State, USA on August 28, 2020:

Pamela, that entire household was grieving, not just the dad, and each of them in their own way. You pulled at our heartstrings; thank you for creating a happy ending. Great job with Bill's photo prompts.

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on August 28, 2020:

Pamela you have a talent in sharing stories and you shed the light from Bill's ideas most interesting and with a surprise ending.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 28, 2020:

Hi Danny,

I am glad you liked the story and thank you for your nice comments.

Danny from India on August 28, 2020:

Pamela nice script. Alls well that ends well.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 28, 2020:

Hi Lora,

Bill's prompts seemed to give me ideas as I wrote this story er a few days. Each character was hurting in their way due to the dynamics following the loss of their son. I am glad you liked the story. I appreciate you generous comments, as always.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 28, 2020:

Hi Linda,

I wanted them to love each other but they were all hurting after the loss of their son and nobody was doing so in a healthy way. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 28, 2020:

Hi MG,

I like happy endsings. I appreciate your nice comments.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 28, 2020:

Hi Flourish,

They do neeed counseling. Each of the parents were dealing with the loss of their son in different and unhealthy ways, plus Sandra is also in pain. Thanks Fourish, for for your comments.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 28, 2020:

Hi Eric,

I love happy endings also, I appreciate your comments.

Lora Hollings on August 28, 2020:

I'm so glad that Sandra decided to go back home and, hopefully, her father will realize that he needs to be less strict with his daughter so that she doesn't end up hating school and him too! From their emotional reunion, I'm hoping that he has learned that he must be a more understanding parent in giving his daughter a little freedom just to enjoy life and in placing more importance on her happiness rather than getting straight As. You did a wonderful job weaving Bill's prompts together and in showing the strained relationship between Sandra and her father. I'm glad that your story had a happy ending, too! I thoroughly enjoyed your very engaging story.

Linda Crampton from British Columbia, Canada on August 27, 2020:

I'm glad the story had a happy ending. It was very nice to see that the father and daughter still loved one another.

MG Singh emge from Singapore on August 27, 2020:

You have the knack of relating a story. This is a nice one nice one with a happy ending.

FlourishAnyway from USA on August 27, 2020:

I’m glad he saw the situation sympathetically. It could have gone so much worse. You painted a happy resolution to this sad family dynamic. They need counseling.

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on August 27, 2020:

Thank you for this journey. I am a sap for a happy ending.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Hi Linda,

I am glad you read the story and enhoyed it. Your comments are certainly appreciate.

Linda Chechar from Arizona on August 27, 2020:

What a teenager of a wonderful story with a happy ending! It's a great writing!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Hi Shauna,

I thought about how to end this story for a couple of days. I am not that confidant when writing fiction, so if I take more time the story seems to turn out better. I like happy endings. I appreciate your comments.

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on August 27, 2020:

I'm so glad Sandra's dad wasn't angry with her. He must have realized he'd been driving a wedge between them.

Happy she made it home safe and sound, Pamela.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Hi Bill,

I think I should thank for your the pictures as they triggered the ideas. Of course, I appreciate your very nice comments. I do like happy endings. I considered not having a happy ending and just couldn't do it. LOL!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Hi Rosina,

I am so glad you read the article and enjoyed it. Thank you for your very nice comments.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on August 27, 2020:

Aww, that was sweet, Pamela. You did a wonderful job of setting the scene early on in the story, and then kept us wondering what was going to happen to the young girl as she crept out of the house. I'm thankful it had a happy ending.

Well done, my friend.

Rosina S Khan on August 27, 2020:

Pamela, thank you for this wonderful story based on Bill's photos. I loved the ending too. It truly reflects a father-daughter's love and a teenager's emotions. A superb article indeed!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Hi Lorna,

I am so glad you enjoyed this story. I remember how emotional a 16 year old can be and I wanted to refect the love between a father and daughter. I appreciate your comments.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Hi John,

I'm so glad you liked the ending. A father's love for his daughter is so special and I wanted to refect that love in this story. I appreciate your comments.

Lorna Lamon on August 27, 2020:

I really enjoyed this tale Pamela which took me back to teenage years. You have weaved a wonderful story within the prompts and I love a happy ending. Great writing.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Thank you Miebakagh for all of your comments.

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on August 27, 2020:

Such a beautiful ending to this story, Pamela. Perfect. You did a great job writing a story from Bill’s photos.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Hi Liz,

Your very thoughtful words are much appreciated. I don't write fiction often and do not feel it is my strong suit, so any praise feels wonderful, Thanks, Liz.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on August 27, 2020:

Hi Miebakagh,

Thank you for reading and commenting.

Miebakagh Fiberesima from Port Harcourt, Rivers State, NIGERIA. on August 27, 2020:

Pamela, truth is told and is it seems stranger than fiction. Thanks for sharing this story of a father-daughter-love.

Liz Westwood from UK on August 27, 2020:

What a sad back story to this narrative, but what a well-worked plot and lovely ending. Your creativity in basing your story on the photo prompts is impressive.

Miebakagh Fiberesima from Port Harcourt, Rivers State, NIGERIA. on August 27, 2020:

Pamela, they is realty in this short story. The truth is that truth is told and is stranger than fiction. Thanks for sharing.