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I took the deep dive

Updated on April 12, 2017
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Water deep, cold and dim,

I took the deep dive

Found that I couldn’t swim.

Am I still alive?



I took the deep dive,

I wanted to survive.

Found that I couldn’t swim;

Swim and thrive.



I wanted to survive,

Found that I couldn’t swim.

Swim and thrive.

Water deep, cold and dim.

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      Janis Leslie Evans 2 months ago from Washington, DC

      Beautifully sad, love the style, reminds me of Villanelle? I lost a brother, too. It took me a while to write about it. You've done an excellent job allowing us to feel the painful experience of drowning. Peace be with you, Nikki.

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      NadineRuth 2 months ago

      Love the poem - simple but sad and graphic. Bless you in the loss of your brother and I hope it isn't too long before you can manage to find joy in his memory.

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      Audrey Howitt 2 months ago from California

      Painful write--the loss is palpable

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      Nikki Albert 2 months ago from Canada

      Thank you for the comments, guys. This poem always hurts me to read, even now.

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