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My #5 for National Poetry Month
"Ya never know what a walk might bring"
her breath a sour mash of stained red
or maybe brown, hard to tell in the dark
neon blitz greens up a smile
that freezes insides
spits from between those greenies
pulls whiskey under blood shot eyes
winks
Insides thaw if you wait long enough
they wrap around
and hold you
grist
as greenies descend.
I didn't know, not for sure
but can guess.
I kick her pegged leg
on the way out.
Process Note: I was struck by this picture and the stories it could tell. I am not even sure that this is a poem, but this is what came out--a bit on the grisly side for me--
© 2017 Audrey Howitt
Comments
I love it Audrey...I would call this a poem...the word choice and the scene you create seem to build drama...Jamie
Yes. A dark one. I thought so while reading it. I do this with Flash sometimes.
Comperes at Open Mic say never apologise for sad or dark stuff. They feel that's what the crowd wants. Who knows?
Still painted well with your delicate brush.
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Thanks Jamie--I think I am pushing the envelope a bit
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Manatita, I appreciate your kind words--I have a darker side and rarely let it loose--thank all the years of reading Stephen King novels--
This one left me guessing but that's part of the mystery and fun.
You've done a great job releasing your darker side. Thanks Audrey
I had to go take another look at the picture. I can see the dark from the leg/ foot scoop. So you wrote a dark one, only means you're human. Smiling....
Interesting poem to accompany that photo. Definitely on the dark side of things as you mentioned and described as "grisly."
This would fit perfectly in one of my novels. I'm into grisly big time, as you know. Great stuff; I really enjoyed this one.
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It would fit into one of your novels Bill--thank you!
That image is gripping. When I read your poem I had to recheck to see if I had landed on another person's page! This is very different than your usual style.
You're a versatile woman and poet.
The poem is a bit grisly, but it's also very interesting. I enjoyed reading a different style of poetry from you.
Hi Audrey - Here lay down on the couch, this needs serious psychoanalytic interpretation. Glad you admitted you are unsure of the meaning.
Different in mood and content, I think, but still shows your expertise at creating images. Variety is the spice of life--and poetry.
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Thank you MsDora--it is a bit different!
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You crack me up Mike! It often happens that I am not sure of the meaning--maybe I shouldn't admit that so readily--
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Thank you Audrey Hunt!
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Thank you Ruby!
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