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Breaking Social Norms: Comedy Flash Fiction

Updated on March 15, 2017
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Craig didn't bother answering the door. It was Ralph. At four in the afternoon, the knock at the door was always Ralph, and he always let himself in. The first thing Ralph did upon entering was to check out the fruit assortment on the table. If it wasn't plastic, he helped himself. The second thing was the story. Ralph always had a bit of drama to dispose of in Craig's apartment, and today was no exception.

"How was your date last night?" Craig had learned it was far better to help the process move along than it was to fight it.

"The date was fine, just fine." Ralph didn't offer any more information.

"That's all? Just, fine?"

"Well, she did invite me to spend the night." Ralph had a slight smile forming.

"She did, did she? Go on, tell me more."

"I'm not going to go into the details. Come on, that's private stuff."

"Okay, okay. Don't get all uptight about it."

"I'm not uptight. It's just that....Oh, never mind."

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"Now wait a minute. You can't say, It's just that....and then not say what that is.

"What do you mean, I can't. I just did."

"What I mean is, you shouldn't break social norms, such as not finishing a sentence that begins with, It's just that....."

"Alright, alright. It's just that afterward, she rolled over, kissed me and said, I'll see you at work tomorrow."

"She made you leave in the middle of the night?"

"Yes, and we had used her car for the date, so I had to take the subway at two o'clock in the morning."

"You know what that was, don't you? That was her way of punishing you for making her use her car for the date. It was your second social blunder of the evening."

"Well, if that's what it was, I learned my lesson." Have you ever taken the subway at two o'clock in the morning?"

"I can't say I have, no."

"I think the subway slips into a different dimension sometime just before two o'clock."

"That bad, huh?


"This woman got on and sat down next to me. I mean, there were empty seats everywhere, and she sat right next to me."

"Well, that's not so bad. Was she a looker?"

"She wasn't a woman."

"Oh, this isn't going anyplace good, is it?"

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"She...he...whatever, kept pulling her top down to show more cleavage, and pulling her skirt up to show more hairy leg."

"That's disgusting."

"I already mentioned things had gone well back at Mindy's apartment.....up until she kicked me out that is."

"Yes, you mentioned that."

"I thought I was in for a double header totally against my will. I mean, this was not a petite, little man. This guy was a bruiser." Ralph held up his hand and showed the back of it to Craig. "You see this?"

"It looks like a phone number."

"Yes, it is. And it was written with a red sharpie."

"Are you going to call her....I mean him?"

Ralph's phone rang and he looked at the number on the back of his hand and the number on the phone's screen. "Oh, my god."

"You gave him your number?"

"It's the polite thing to do. Somebody gives you their number, you reciprocate."

"Why didn't you give him a fake number?"

"Oh, sure. And the next time Mindy kicks me out at two in the morning, and I ride the subway home, Bruiser gets to beat the crap out of me."

"Or, you could just drive your own car for the date."

"How about we back this conversation up to when I said, The date was fine....." and you offer me a beer?"

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      Chris Mills 11 hours ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      Always

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      Larry Rankin 12 hours ago from Oklahoma

      Always trying to innovate.

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      Chris Mills 5 days ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      Eric, I don't have a problem with them, but I do need to be able to run if I get the urge. :) Thanks for stopping by.

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      Eric Dierker 5 days ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Well that was very uncomfortable. Been on that ride before - near the rose zone in Mex. DF.

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      Chris Mills 6 days ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      I just hit 200,039

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      Chris Mills 6 days ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      Ruby, stay your of the subway at 2am. It's a scary place. As for Ralph and Craig, they seem to work for me in comedy. There is a third character I have used with them named, Jonesy. Craig is the straight guy. Ralph is just a little neurotic and Jonesy is a little nuts.

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      Chris Mills 6 days ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      Cora, it that's part of the dating scene, I'm staying home and writing hubs. Thanks for stopping. I'm glad you found it funny.

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      Ruby Jean Fuller 6 days ago from Southern Illinois

      HaHa, Ralph and Craig make a perfect comedic pair. I never rode the subway at 2 AM and after reading this ' ain't ' gonna....Hee...

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      Dora Isaac Weithers 6 days ago from The Caribbean

      Funny on one level, but also educational for the young who may need the alert concerning what can happen on the dating scene.

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      Chris Mills 6 days ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      Thanks, Gilbert. I'm glad you found it funny.

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      Gilbert Arevalo 7 days ago from Hacienda Heights, California

      Funny piece, Chris.

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      Chris Mills 7 days ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      jgs, very.

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      jgshorebird 7 days ago from Southeastern U.S.

      Poor old confused Ralph.

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      Chris Mills 7 days ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      Manatita, I like playing around with these two guys. I think I have them in four hubs now. Nice to see you todaty.

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      manatita44 7 days ago from london

      Yes, a 'lite' one and funny too. Well written story and interactions.

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      Chris Mills 8 days ago from Colorado Springs, CO until the end of March

      Thanks, Becky. I'm going to do several stories with these two. Yesterday I had one of Ralph getting caught using a fitting room at a clothing store while going commando. Ralph and Craig work well with common, everyday life themes.

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      Becky Katz 8 days ago from Hereford, AZ

      Really cute. I laughed over this one.

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