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Billybuc's Photo Challenge Fiction - The Hike

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Mountain Adventure

Mark and Liz hiked past the barn-like structure and they hadn’t see another soul on this frigid day. The wind was mildly blowing, and the sky was cloudy.

Liz was wondering why in the world she agreed to taking a camping trip with Mark when they had this unexpected snow storm in mid-November. They hiked for miles in the summer, but this was the first time she had ever agreed to hike and camp in cold weather on the Pacific Coast Trail.

“Mark, it's too cold to be out here hiking,” Liz said as she pulled her scarf more tightly around her neck.

“Come on Liz, you’re dressed warm enough for below zero temperatures and it is only 28 degree,” Mark replied. “Don’t wimp out of me,” Mark said rather snidely.

Mark was a large man, who was 6’2” tall and weighed 190 pounds, with dark brown hair and hazel green eyes. He was a fitness trainer, and he loved being challenged.

The petite Liz had been dating Mark over the past year. She was an amateur gymnast in good physical condition, and she competed frequently. She had her long blonde hair pulled back into a long braid that ran down her back. She had blue eyes and an adorable smile with her dimples. She had just graduated from college in May as a computer programmer. However, she loved the outdoors, always living a very active life.

“I can do without your snide remarks Mark.” Liz stated. “You know I love hiking but not so much in the cold.”

“Well, we are in the middle of this hike, and it is more than a day’s walk back to the car. We can stop early and I will build a nice campfire so we can cook while enjoying the warmth. Can you hang in there for one more hour?”

“Yes, one more hour only,” Liz said. Liz kept looking behind her as she thought she saw someone following them twice already.


Camping at Night

That night Mark did build a good campfire. They just cooked hot dogs over the fire and Mark didn’t make any more negative remarks.

“I am sorry that I upset you today. I just looked forward to this time and I wanted it to be fun for both of us.”

“I did to Mark, but I don’t like it when you talk down to me. You have not done that before, so is anything else wrong?” Liz said.

“Nothing is wrong. I shouldn’t have talked to you that way.” Mark replied as he looked away from Liz.

Liz said, “Mark, I know you pretty well by now. I do think something is wrong as you were extra quiet today and you have never talked down to me like that.”

“Liz, I just found out that my parents are getting divorced after 29 years of marriage. I don’t mean to take it out on you but yes, I am upset. They have been together for all those years so why in the hell can’t they work things out?”

”Oh Mark, I am so sorry to hear that. I never would have guessed that we're having any problems between them.”

“I knew they argued some but I never knew it was serious. I guess they fooled everyone,” Mark said in a voice of bitterness.

Liz moved closer to Mark and put her arms around him without saying a word. They sat quietly by the fire.


One More Problem

During the night Liz woke Mark up, “I heard something outside our tent. I don’t know if it is a bear but I know something is close.”

Mark put his jacket on and said, “Don’t get out of the tent. I’m going to check and see what made that noise.” He had a knife but no other weapon and Liz was scared. She pulled the sleeping bag up further around her neck.

Several minutes later Mark came back into the tent. “Well, I didn’t see anything or anyone, but we have been robbed and it wasn’t a bear. The backpack with our food that I pulled up into the tree with the rope is gone. We lost almost all of our food.”

Liz said, “Oh no. So, you didn’t see anyone?”

“No or I would have tried to get our food back. I didn’t even see footprints but the ground is so dry that I am not surprised. We can look better in daylight but I imagine the food is long gone. It was probably a homeless person that was just hungry.”


If There was No Bad Luck, They Would Have No Luck At All

Liz said, “Well, it isn’t quite as cold today. If we get moving we should be able to get back to the car, which s good as we are out of food.

Mark replied, “Yeah, we should make it. I do have a couple of bags of peanuts. That will be breakfast.”

“I will be glad to get out of the cold,” said Liz.

“Eat your peanuts while we start walking,” Mark replied. They were both frustrated due to the robbery.

They walked a while in silence as they were headed downhill but Liz talked about the beautiful rivers they were seeing now.

Suddenly, Liz heard a crash and she looked up just as Mark fell. He was actually rolling down the huge hill in front of her.

Liz shrieked as she watched Mark fall. “Oh Mark, Mark, are you okay?”

Liz very carefully made her way to where Mark was lying. They were closer to the river but they had not seen a sole in the 3 days of camping. When she reached Mark she saw his left leg was twisted at an abnormal angle. She knew it was broken.

She still asked Mark again if he was okay. When she reached him he looked at her and said, “I am pretty sure my leg is broken. I can’t walk and there is no cell phone coverage here.”


Help at the Boat Dock

Liz replied, “I know. I am going to walk out of here and get some help.” She tried to get Mark in a better position. She put the rolled up sleeping bag under Mark’s head. Then, she started down the hill. About 2 hours later she saw a dock on the river with numerous boats. She didn’t see a person but she hurried in that direction.

She arrived at the dock after another 20 minutes and yelled out, “Is anyone here?” She didn’t hear a thing, so she yelled again. Then, an older man was climbing out of a small building.

Liz called out loudly to get his attention. “Sir, can you help me?” The man looked at her, nodded and started walking toward her. She said, “My friend fell while coming down the mountain and he is injured. Can you help?”

The man nodded and said, “Sure. First, I am calling 911 for medical help and we may need others as well. My name is Ted by the way.”

“Hi Ted. I am Liz,” she was almost panting as she was out of breath from hurriyng down the hill.

“Come into the boat house and get something to drink while I make the call.”

Liz told Ted what happened and a bit about Mark’s injury also. Then, they headed for the trail and met the EMT crew. They all walked up the mountain until they found Mark.

The EMTs stabilized Mark’s leg and gave him something for pain. When they arrived at the bottom of the trail Ted offered to drive Liz to her car so she could meet Mark at the hospital. Liz accepted.


Hospital Care

Mark had a caste on his leg by the time Liz arrived. He said, “The doctor was able to set my leg without surgery. I will be here for a couple of days.”

“I am just glad you are okay, Mark,.”

“I really appreciate you Liz. You got help so quickly. You are really a strong woman, you know.”

“Thanks,” replied Liz.

“Liz, you know I love you, right?”

Liz replied, while laughing, “Is that the pain medication talking?” Then, she got serious and said, “Mark, I love you too, but no more camping in cold weather.” They both started laughing as their lips touched.

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This content is accurate and true to the best of the author’s knowledge and is not meant to substitute for formal and individualized advice from a qualified professional.

© 2020 Pamela Oglesby


Robert Sacchi on February 16, 2020:

You're welcome.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 16, 2020:

Hi Robert, Thanks for your comment.

Robert Sacchi on February 16, 2020:

A nice story about camping misadventures.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 06, 2020:

Hi Lora, I do love happy endings but I wanted the couple to have some hardships while on the trail. I am glad you liked the story.

I appreciate your very nice comments. I never expected to win a Hubbie award but it is a nice surprise.

Lora Hollings on February 05, 2020:

Wonderful story, Pamela. I'm glad it had a happy ending and I think that this couple's relationship will be able to endure some rough times ahead after meeting this challenge together. I think that they are well suited to each other. Congratulations on your hubby award. You certainly deserved it! I've learned many new things from reading your well written and informative articles. Thanks for sharing!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 05, 2020:

Hi Rajan Singh, Maybe scary would be a better choice next time when I write a ficitonal article but I do tend to like happy endings. I appreciate your comments.

Rajan Singh Jolly from From Mumbai, presently in Jalandhar, INDIA. on February 05, 2020:

I thought you were leading us to something scary and waited for the suspense. Glad though for the happy ending.

Dora Weithers from The Caribbean on February 04, 2020:

Congratulations on your 2019 Hub Award! You keep us informed and entertained!

Great response to the Billybuc challenge. You have excellent story telling skills.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 03, 2020:

Hi Maria, I appreciate your comments about the story and the award. That award was unexpected.

I hope you have a wonderful week. Love and hugs.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 03, 2020:

Hi Linda, I am going to need to write someone with a sad ending as I think everyone expects me to always have a happy ending. Thanks for commenting and I hope you have a good week.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 03, 2020:

Hi Linda, I don't like cold weather and certainly not for camping. I am glad you liked the scary atmosphere and I appreciate your comments. Have a good week, Linda.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 03, 2020:

Hi Devika, I am not into mountain climbing either. I do like happy endings. I am so glad you loved the story. Thank you for your very nice comments,

Devika Primić from Dubrovnik, Croatia on February 03, 2020:

Congrats on your Hubbie award! You have a great challenge and set out to good story. Always happy endings are encouraging to the writer and reader. Mountain climbing sounds a great adventure but not for me. Something I couldn't do however you created a story that is unique and I loved it!

Linda Crampton from British Columbia, Canada on February 02, 2020:

I was starting to feel cold myself after reading your description! I wouldn't enjoy camping in winter, especially when it's cold. I like the scary atmosphere in your story and the sense of foreboding created by the person following Liz and Mark.

Linda Lum from Washington State, USA on February 02, 2020:

You had we wondering to the very end what would happen. I love your happy endings.

Maria Jordan from Jeffersonville PA on February 02, 2020:

Glad this chilly tale had a warm ending, dear Pamela. You tied the photo prompts nicely into this well-crafted story.

Congratulations on your Hubbie - this is awesome. Love, Maria

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Dreamer, I agree that camping and hiking is more difficult in cold weather, I think most people feel the same way you so about it.

I am gald you liked the story. Thank you so much for your comments.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Doris, Cold weather is not good for camping in my opinion either. I like a happy ending but having some problems along te way makes the story more interesting in my opinion.

I appreciate your comments. Have a good week Doris.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Shauna, Mark was very stubborn in this story, but it did end well. Your comments are appreciated and thank you for the congrats on the Hubbie award. I never expected that award so it was a pleasant surprise.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Peggy, You are probably right about the thief but I don't have another story in mind yet. I appreciate your comments Peggy. Have a good week.

DreamerMeg from Northern Ireland on February 02, 2020:

Enjoyed your story, it's hard work hiking and camping in the cold. I have only ever done it once and never again! I am glad he showed his appreciation of her at the end.

Doris James MizBejabbers from Beautiful South on February 02, 2020:

Nice story, Pamela. I'm glad it had a happy ending. I was afraid it wasn't going to end happily. I agree with Liz about camping in cold weather. We stopped camping because I don't like cold weather and my husband doesn't like camping in hot weather.

Shauna L Bowling from Central Florida on February 02, 2020:

Nice story, Pamela. It's too bad it took Mark having a fall to finally tell Beth he loves her. However, all's well that ends well.

BTW, congrats on your Hubbie Award, Pamela!

Peggy Woods from Houston, Texas on February 02, 2020:

I am glad that it ended well. Whoever stole their food would likely do it to others on that same trail. Another story could probably be constructed out of that!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Bill, I think you are right about them hiking together or maybe even being together in the long term. Thanks so much for your comments.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on February 02, 2020:

Nicely done, Pamela. I'm glad you decided to try the challenge. Just my opinion, but I don't think those two should go hiking with each other again. lol

Ann Carr from SW England on February 02, 2020:

Thank you. You too!


Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Ruby, Ted Bndy is a scary thought. I was going to make the thief play a bigger role at first but decided not to and just make the hike very tough. Thanks for commenting Ruby.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Liz, Thank you so much Liz for your priase about my writing. I wanted to use the photo prompts to write but I am neer too confident, so you comments mean a lot to me.

Liz Westwood from UK on February 02, 2020:

You have crafted a great story around the photo prompts. I admire your creativity and the quality of this writing.

Ruby Jean Richert from Southern Illinois on February 02, 2020:

This was a great read Pamela. I thought someone was following them and feared for their safety. Glad it was a love story. I also thought when she met Ted that he could possibly be Ted Bundy! Scary thought....

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Chitrangada, Thank you so much for you very nice comments. I am glad you think I did justice to the challenge.

Chitrangada Sharan from New Delhi, India on February 02, 2020:

Interesting and engaging story, which kept me engrossed till the end. You are so good at storytelling and you did full justice to the challenge.

Thanks for sharing.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Flourish, With all those scenery pictures Bill put up it seemed like a hiking or camping trip made sense. Thank you for your comments.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 02, 2020:

Hi Ann, I do like happy endings. I appreciate your nice comments about the story and the award. Have a good week, Ann.

Ann Carr from SW England on February 02, 2020:

Good story, Pamela. I have every sympathy with Liz not liking camping in the cold (or camping full stop!).

You created some drama, the descriptions brought the scenery to life and you resolved it with a happy ending - we all like those!

Lovely response to the challenge and congrats on your award.


FlourishAnyway from USA on February 01, 2020:

I was wondering whether a creeper was following them or whether Mark was not who she thought he was. Glad that wasn’t the case. I sure am no camping type!

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 01, 2020:

Hi Lorna, Your comments about my writing fiction mean a lot to me as I am not too confident when writing fiction to be quite honest. I am glad you liked the story.

I appreciate your comments about the award also.

Lorna Lamon on February 01, 2020:

What a good read Pamela. I like how you created the scene including Mark being off and the reason. It had the right amount of drama and I love the happy ending. Your are proving to be an excellent writer of fiction Pamela. Loved it. PS: Congrats on your award - well deserved.

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 01, 2020:

Hi John, I probably should have written something about the person who stole the food. Thank your for your comments on the story and on the unexpected award.

John Hansen from Queensland Australia on February 01, 2020:

A very engaging story, Pamela. A happy ending after their ordeal was welcome, but you left me wondering who stole the backpack of food? Oh, congratulations on sharing the most prolific hubber award. That was well deserved,

Pamela Oglesby (author) from Sunny Florida on February 01, 2020:

Hi Eric, Thank you so much for your comments.

Eric Dierker from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A. on February 01, 2020:

Beautifully said. A story of triumph in the face of tough odds. And love was the ultimate winner. Thanks.

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