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Another Pantoum

another-pantoum

Near my door is a box of old letters

where I keep binders of my paper life

a place where my organization occurs

your name upon them as my former wife.


When I keep binders of my paper life,

yet photographs, they find themselves adrift

your name upon them as my former wife,

each act of organization a gift.


Yet photographs, they find themselves adrift.

I try to take each step with earned respect

each act of organization a gift

our labor is our responsible act.


I try to take each step with earned respect

in the absence of my empty home,

our labor is our responsible act,

a chance to see how our children have grown.

Comments

Jamie Lee Hamann (author) from Reno NV on April 25, 2017:

Thank you Bill, Mark, and ThreeKeys. Pantoum and other reputation poems are difficult. It is hard to find a line to repeat and then to weave it into the completed poem. It feels good to know that I may have hit the mark. Thank you again. Jamie

threekeys on April 24, 2017:

I,too,find the repitition of words or lines powerful. Thank you Jamie

Ann Carr from SW England on April 24, 2017:

Fine thanks, Jamie. Busy but fine!

Ann

Mark Tulin from Palm Springs, California on April 24, 2017:

This poem resonated with me having been divorced. The fruits of the labor of marriage is undeniable as expressed in your final line. Thanks.

Bill Holland from Olympia, WA on April 24, 2017:

I've always been a big fan of repetition. I think it is powerful when used correctly, and you used it perfectly.

Jamie Lee Hamann (author) from Reno NV on April 24, 2017:

Thank you Ann and Louise I hope you are both well. Jamie

Louise Powles from Norfolk, England on April 24, 2017:

That's a lovely poem, Jamie. As Ann said, it's full of emotion. Really touching. =)

Ann Carr from SW England on April 24, 2017:

Great poem, Jamie. It's full of emotion, sadness, deep philosophy and observation. I love this structure of the revisiting of lines; it pulls it all together, provides a thread.

I especially like 'where I keep binders of my paper life'; it brings to mind so many things. Well done!

Ann

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