Another Pantoum

Updated on April 24, 2017

Near my door is a box of old letters

where I keep binders of my paper life

a place where my organization occurs

your name upon them as my former wife.


When I keep binders of my paper life,

yet photographs, they find themselves adrift

your name upon them as my former wife,

each act of organization a gift.


Yet photographs, they find themselves adrift.

I try to take each step with earned respect

each act of organization a gift

our labor is our responsible act.


I try to take each step with earned respect

in the absence of my empty home,

our labor is our responsible act,

a chance to see how our children have grown.

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        Jamie Lee Hamann 11 months ago from Reno NV

        Thank you Bill, Mark, and ThreeKeys. Pantoum and other reputation poems are difficult. It is hard to find a line to repeat and then to weave it into the completed poem. It feels good to know that I may have hit the mark. Thank you again. Jamie

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        Threekeys 12 months ago from Australia

        I,too,find the repitition of words or lines powerful. Thank you Jamie

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        Ann Carr 12 months ago from SW England

        Fine thanks, Jamie. Busy but fine!

        Ann

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        Mark Tulin 12 months ago from Santa Barbara, California

        This poem resonated with me having been divorced. The fruits of the labor of marriage is undeniable as expressed in your final line. Thanks.

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        Bill Holland 12 months ago from Olympia, WA

        I've always been a big fan of repetition. I think it is powerful when used correctly, and you used it perfectly.

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        Jamie Lee Hamann 12 months ago from Reno NV

        Thank you Ann and Louise I hope you are both well. Jamie

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        Louise Powles 12 months ago from Norfolk, England

        That's a lovely poem, Jamie. As Ann said, it's full of emotion. Really touching. =)

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        Ann Carr 12 months ago from SW England

        Great poem, Jamie. It's full of emotion, sadness, deep philosophy and observation. I love this structure of the revisiting of lines; it pulls it all together, provides a thread.

        I especially like 'where I keep binders of my paper life'; it brings to mind so many things. Well done!

        Ann

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