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Updated on June 27, 2018
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Holding degrees in philosophy and Law. Formal studies or certificates or degrees in business, theology, insurance and security. Ex-preacher.

Cliff

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She Broke His Heart

He was sitting there in his cutoff jean shorts. He pounded another beer. The group was below on the other side of the creek. She was with "him". What was left for him? She left him. What purpose or joy could there be now? A teenager in great despair with nothing left to live for. Maybe just another teenager checking out like so many.

His buddy was there with him. Consoling, kind of. They were at the 40 ft height for the dive. A grab on a branch and up to 50 ft. Another brew. Fingers pointing up as he went higher. Full danger level But what else could be lost?

Shouts to "go for it" rang out. "Screw it". His buddy told him to come back down. "Please Eric come back down she is not worth it". A good hand hold and up to 60 and without hesitation up to 70.

Just another ruined teenager to go along. Now no more cries from the group, in fact a deadly silence. A limit had been passed and eminent death looked real. Could the 8 ft pool below sustain such a dive. It had been done once they said. By a 30 year old a year ago but not confirmed. Leaping to his death.

His gal jumped up and yelled no Eric please! But by now it had to be done.

Hands loose with thumbs ready to smash into his forehead on impact, hit the pool in a roll to curb the depth. No need to pee, already done. Don't forget to get the air out before impact so it does not get knocked out, best to scream in the dive.

And then a cool calm. No more about the gal. No more about sadness. All the sudden. All the sudden it was about the dive.

The winner emerged, the victor was home. The dive was no longer a suicide mission it was a full on mission. Stripping off his "tennis" shoes and belt with buckle and tossing him to Gary below as they could cause a problem in landing.

Concentration to clear the cliff yet still hit the deep pool. Deep breaths, not for the water but for the fear. No more sound in the ears, no more dark dark fears.

And off into space the boy went. No right to expect success and all to expect the darkness.

He nailed it! All things right with only bruising on the forehead. The group was silent at first and then rip-roaring thunder with many coming to him and beers being popped all over. Shaken and sprayed. What could not be done had been done.

The gal's boyfriend walked off as the gal came up to him. "We are done here" is all he said as the party raged.

Sometimes it is not the cliff or the gal.

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    • Ericdierker profile imageAUTHOR

      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Thank you Rodric. I am sorry to respond so late.

      The place is called Grasshopper point just up the road about 3 miles north of Sedona.

      I did not really think of it as cultural. Perhaps we all view our little space as just normal.

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      Rodric Anthony Johnson 

      5 months ago from Peoria, Arizona

      Eric, I love it the way it is. If you want to write more though that would be awesome! You left more to the imagination. It is one of those stories where is the reader can culturally identify it touches home. I suppose I am one who identifies with the story culturally. I have been through this before! It is the aim of us writers to touch the heart of the reader. You did that with me.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Thank you Dana. I love writing in this genre. Just a little embellished

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      Dana Tate 

      5 months ago from LOS ANGELES

      Loved it! Some of your best work.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Thanks Bill I understand folks pray for peace and security in their lives. A good concept I suppose especially for parents. Not here.

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      William Kovacic 

      5 months ago from Pleasant Gap, PA

      Well, Eric. Your true-to-life stories are always the best. This one was excellent. And, yes, I can see you all through this one. Good job, my friend!

    • Ericdierker profile imageAUTHOR

      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Thank you Rodric. You comment makes me think I can do better with back story and things like lighting and smells and banter.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Thanks John. (not to worry) my testosterone level is low now. My Doc. suggested.... And I said "not on your life doc. I have earned a low level".

      I suppose John friendships of meaning replace adrenaline rushes. And you are one.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Manatita it was a "framing" which for sure we will chit chat about. The memory is in the head but how to frame it for others? Your support is loving and appreciated.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      I big old sorry for being so late responding. Maybe? Sorry for me? I love you people.

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      Rodric Anthony Johnson 

      5 months ago from Peoria, Arizona

      This played like an entire movie in my mind of 90 minutes! How did you do that! This was a great piece with all the elements of entertainment; yet, succinct.

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      John Hansen 

      5 months ago from Queensland Australia

      This is quite a thrilling story, Eric.The dare or risk factor often hard for testosterone filled teenagers to decline. Very descriptive and well-written as always.

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      manatita44 

      5 months ago from london

      Super-excellent piece! Right pitch! Right timing! Right flow ... right resonance. Awesome ending!

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Thank you Linda. I am glad I am here to ;-)

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Thank you Chris. I hate belly smacking. Your continued support is very appreciated and I hope you know that it has been extremely important to my growth as a writer.

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      Linda Crampton 

      5 months ago from British Columbia, Canada

      This is a dramatic story with great description of emotion and action. I'm glad you survived the dive!

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      Chris Mills 

      5 months ago from Hartford, CT

      Well Eric, You've show once again that you have some good fiction in you, although I see there was truth in it as well. I may have dived from 40 feet, but one of the stupidest things I've ever done was to dive from 30 feet into three feet of water. I had to hit the water just short of a belly smacker. Congratulations on a good story.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Elijah I can still see and feel it. Perhaps a life changing event. Gary is still a good friend. My action stuff is real. I have no right to be still in this shell.

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      Elijah A Alexander Jr 

      5 months ago from Washington DC

      Now Eric, you didn't do that! did you? That sounded like you actually did it by expressing the feelings and thoughts as if it came out of you. And so, it turned out to not be the cliff nor girl, just the "daredevil" in you.

      Somewhere in my youth I had herd of someone high diving into about 8 feet of water and, if I remember it correctly, it was a circus act but I don't remember the height.

      You maintained my attention all the way, it was just that well written.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Peggy. I like your comment. That Eric in the story is me and it is a true story. Maybe 1975? So you are spot on.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Mary after all those dives young, at about 50 I got horrible acrophobia. My sons laugh. I am funny there. I like the emotion of fear. That is so crazy.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Venkatachari M, A spot call "Grasshopper Point" About 2 miles above Sedona.

      It is so blessed to call you friend. Thank you.

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      Eric Dierker 

      5 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

      Thank you Ann. The hardest part on this one was remembering well. Tell you the truth I think my pants got knocked off and I had to stay under to put them back on. hihihi

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      Peggy Woods 

      5 months ago from Houston, Texas

      Teenagers sometimes think that they are immortal. The motives in the boy you described were somewhere between anger over the loss of a girl and possible suicide. Glad he survived that dive. If this was real life...perhaps he would mature and learn how to handle things better in the future.

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      Mary Norton 

      5 months ago from Ontario, Canada

      You've described this so well, you made me think of how I felt when grandchildren do these dives on cliffs. I find it really scary.

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      Venkatachari M 

      5 months ago from Hyderabad, India

      Very thrilling and touching story. Eric, you narrated it all so much emotionally to appeal to the hearts. A good response to Ann's challenge.

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      Ann Carr 

      5 months ago from SW England

      You keep the suspense and we feel the fear and emotions. Great descriptions, Eric, and great response.

      Thanks for taking the challenge.

      Ann

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